This is my first fan fiction and I hope people like it. I know it may be a bit mary- sueish but whatever! At least I'm going to make it a good Mary - sue. So tell me what you think, your likes, dislikes and what I could improve on. Plus tell me what you think should happen with the characters, I'm always open to ideas.
Chapter one
Rebecca and Kelly sat on the bus which was travelling to Camp Green Lake. It was sweltering hot in the bus and their throats itched from thirst.
Rebecca stared out the window, she had window seat. They seemed to be travelling through a vast desert environment which was littered with holes which must have been about five foot deep!
Rebecca was scarcely talking and Kelly seemed to have given up with conversation ages ago. The reason Rebecca wasn't talking was because she was so nervous about this Camp Green Lake place.
Rebecca was quite a pretty girl, with shoulder length, naturally straight blonde hair and dark blue eyes. She was small and many girls her age towered over her. She was wearing three quarter length jeans, a top saying "Babe," on it and some suede boots. She was also wearing a gold necklace which had a diamond in it, her Grandad had giving it to her before he died.
Kelly didn't get as much attention from the boys as Rebecca did. Probably because she was so simple looking. She had frizzy, mousy brown hair which she had tied in piggy tails and her eyes were a pale blue. She was taller than Rebecca and quite lanky. She had a squeaky, sometimes irritating voice.
She was wearing a top that looked quite small for her, it had a picture of a rose on it and she was wearing three quarter lengths and suede boots too, because she was copying Rebecca. She always copied Rebecca when it came to fashion.
Rebecca kept looking nervously at the guard who sat at the front of the bus, he had a rifle in his hands and was eyeing the two girls suspiciously. Kelly saw Rebecca looking at the guard and stuck her tongue out at him. Rebecca laughed.
Kelly and Rebecca had been best friends for three years.
Kelly was the more adventurous one, she'd always get the two girls into trouble and Rebecca would always have to sweet talk them out of it.
Kelly fidgeted with the handcuff which attached her hand to the chair in front. "This handcuff is making my wrist sweaty," Kelly complained to the guard.
The guard ignored her.
"Hey, I'm talking to you," she said.
"I suggest you shut up, little girl, or you'll be sorry," the guard said, looking at her over his sunglasses.
Kelly gave him a dirty look but shut up.
She gave Rebecca a mischievous grin. Rebecca smiled back.
The reason why the two girls were handcuffed in a bus, heading to Camp Green Lake (which is a juvenile delinquent centre for boys) is because Kelly had seen a coat and a bag in a shop that she really wanted and took it, trying to shove the coat up her t-shirt and giving Rebecca the bag to hold. Obviously that didn't work and the shop worker noticed and started yelling at them.
Kelly began running out of the shop and she grabbed Rebecca to come with her. They got cornered by a policeman just as they were trying to leg it down the elevators. Rebecca wasn't really a bad girl, she didn't want to get in trouble with the police, it's just she was so gullible, she easily got talked into things.
The judge was going to send them to jail, but Rebecca pleaded with him not to send them there. She hated the thought of living in a grimy cell jail.
The judge had told them of a place called Camp Green Lake which was another option but only boys go there.
Rebecca had begged to go there, anything is better than jail, she had thought.
The Judge agreed to send the two girls there.
Rebecca was quite frightened now, what if the boys were rough and tough and picked on her.
Kelly seemed fine about it.
"All those boys to ourselves," she had said, "I bet they haven't seen girls in months, they are going to love us,"
"But what if they pick on us?" Rebecca had said.
"Pick on you!" Kelly had snorted, "No way hun, They are well gonna fancy you, you are well pretty,"
"Shut up, I ain't pretty," Rebecca said.
"Whatever Becca, and boys just fall over themselves to snog you cuz you're an ugly dog!" Kelly had said, rolling her eyes…