Okay, many people have asked for me to rewrite the story, and so I'm going to rewrite the first four chapters. I don't want to rewrite my latest chapters because... They are long XD; Thanks Cleo and Geki for bitching at me to do it. I was trying, but I couldn't understand what I was doing wrong. After reading alot of The Princess Bride I saw things I could do that I didn't know about. Mainly puncuation. I also took to note ' Stop describing their fucking hair, Its kind of retarded x 20.' Chapter one shall be up tonight or tomorrow because my beta reader is busy at the moment. When Chapter one is complete could you please tell me if I did better and if there is anything I'm doing wrong in it )!
hugs all the reviewers Please enjoy, loves!