I NEED HELP! This is my first Star Wars story and I'm a little nervous. Please review and be brutally honest. I can take it.
The Battle Within working title>
The Sith are getting to be out of control and now they need one thing to achieve total domination...a child, born with extraordinay powers. Diva-Ki Ghetta. She was lost on the planet of Endor and was raised by Ewoks but was still found. Diva-Ki must figure out for herself the past to choose with confusing and contradicting help from her soul, her friend, and her master.
Warning! Warning! Danger! Danger! Warning! Warning! Danger! Danger!
"We are loosing altitude!"
"Commander Ghetta, it looks as if we are going to crash into that planet!"
"What is that?"
"Endor, sir."
"Ok. Officer Kaal. Man the ship. If we are going to die, I want to be with my wife and child."
"Yes, sir."
Commander Rain-Ki Ghetta walked down the corridor to his chambers where his wife sat holding their newborn baby in her arms.
"She doesn't cry." Quin-Habi said. "I am terrified and she looks at me as if to say 'What is wrong with you?'"
"I would expect nothing less of her. She is an extraordinary child. That is why we had to leave Utpau. If the Sith found out about her and how powerful she could become…"
"Don't husband. I don't want to think about that." She looked down at her daughter and faught back tears "Are we going to die?"
"There is a great chance of that yes." As the words came out of his mouth the cabin shook violently.
"What will happen to Diva-Ki?"
"We can only hope for the best. It looks like we will crash into the planet of Endor. If that be the case the Sith Lords will never think to look for her there."
"OK." Both could feel the ship picking up speed as they whizzed through Endor's atmosphere.
"Put her in her carrier."
Quin-Habi quickly put the babe in her protective basinet and ran to her husband.
The clamor from the crash could be heard for great distances and the Ewoks looked around to see what the noise was then continued their work, figuring it was some youngsters causing mischief.
Later in the day, when he Ewoks went out for their daily hunt they came across the unfortunate vessel. They took what parts they could carry back to their tribe for inspection, including the peculiar egg shaped object a few feet away.