Hiya! I'm back with some really random stupid ideas. Next chapter is going to be a crossover chapter, but it's not going to be stupid (hopefully). The crossover characters are from Cardcaptor Sakura (that's the only manga book I like), Star Fox, Animal Crossing, and I'm just making this up as I go, so only time will tell if there's anything else.
School has been really fun this week (not the learning part, just the friend stuff). So I'm going to tell you about this really weird thing we're doing in English. We are studying Greek Mythology, and we are assigned a God or Goddess. I'm Aphrodite (Af-ro-dite-ee), Goddess of beauty and love...so at first I thought this was a good thing, but its not. One of meh friends named Connor is Zeus, father of Aphrodite, but it turns out, Zeus is a pervert, and he's actually, the father and the husband. Sick, eh? There was a lot of gross and inbred-ness. But that's not all; Aphrodite had six husbands, and cheated on four of them. So far, I know that I first was married to Hephestus (no one got that part), and then I had an affair with Michael (Apollo), and then I had an affair on top of that affair with Scotty (Artemis). But we were all laughing about it and it was fun...good for meh. Ok, you probably skipped this part and are waiting for me to write the real fic, so fine, be that way...here it is...
Disclaimer: I don't own Sonic, Sega, Cardcaptor Sakura, Star Fox (oh but I wish I did), Animal Crossing...ok, you get the point, I don't own much of anything successful.
I do believe this is the shortest chapter yet; only 2 pages not counting all the other junk, but I'm once again neck deep in homework, and all of meh Saturdays are filled until the 6th of November.
Just a hint: This fic is not going to end up like as Sonadow, Rougamy, Rougikal, Creamamy, Knuckladow, Sonitails, or any of that crap. This is not a slash fic.
I got 50 reviews! Whoot! But I got meh first flame! Durn...but that's how it goes ::winks:: That was stupid...I'm going to clear this up because I'm pretty durn peeved. This is what he/she wrote...
After reading through your story, I must confess that this isn't one of the greatest stories I've ever read. This is for several reasons:
a.) The first and main reason is that your story, quite simply, has no plot. It's focus seems to simply be "sonic caracterz actin leik girls lol". Also, the small "plots" that are incorporated make little to no sense (think about it; if YOU had just gotten zapped by a gender-changing ray, would YOU want to have a gigantic party?).
This fic is random! So what? If I want the character to act different, then I can. And I choose for them to have no motivation and throw a party.
b.) Even before getting zapped by the Gender Blender, the characters are highly out of character. Amy isn't THAT much of a valley girl, and Tails is, quite simply, the opposite of how you make him out to be.
If I want the character to act different, then I can. I said at the beginning that Amy is going to be a valley girl. My friend suggested that, and I know that Amy's not like that. No dir! Tails is different, and people like it like that.
c.) Fanfics do not have background music.
Yes they do...I've read a bajilion fics that say that, like College Days, that has to be the funniest fic I've ever read, and it has background music.
d.) Fanfiction is supposed to be used as a way to have fun, but... honestly, what you're writing is too insane to really be considered a Sonic story. No offense or anything, but stories that make no sense are often very un-enjoyable.
I am truly offended because, well, just ask Super Metal Sonic, he's nice and I do believe he enjoys my fics. Yay for Super Metal Sonic!
e.) It's quite obvious that your story is a rip-off of the story "The Gender Bender" (which, incidentally, is only slightly better than this story). It uses the same kind of jokes (e.g. "Eggman!" "Sonic!" "Eggman!" "Sonic!"), and you only had to change one letter in the title to make the title of this story. So please stop denying this fact and admit that you stole several ideas from that story and used them in this one.
I already told everyone that I didn't steal the title, and I'm not going to waste my time telling you.
On the plus side, your grammar is better than that of some people I've seen on this site, although you do need to clean up your use of punctuation and capitalization around quotation marks. When writing a pronoun after a quote, you don't capitalize the pronoun (e.g. "'Hi. I rule your world' He said." should be "'Hi. I rule your world,' he said."). If you could clean up these errors, then you could probably write some excellent fanfiction.
Cleaning up those errors? Geeze! I'd just hafta delete the whole fricken story! Microsoft Word directs my grammar, so I'm just going with what that said.
Anyways, just submitting my opinion on this story. You can feel free to ignore it if you want, but I just wanted to point out these flaws in your writing.
I am just going to ignore that because I feel speshul and I'm going to continue writing this wonderful nonsense. Ok? Ok. Good. And also, Kyunji, I don't mean to insult you as much as you have insulted my fic, so, no offence.
Ok, lets get on with this really short fic...
As the guests settled into their beanbag seat thingies, Tails called out "bite me!" Everyone sweatdropped. "Ok, I'll go first." Shadow announced while picking up the bottle. He stole some glances from a dude sitting next to him, making the dude take a few steps back.
Boooooooop!
We interrupt this program for a speshul news announcement: If you could, which dude would you vote for? Bush or Kerry? When you review, tell Soniclover3 which one because she's really bored and wants to take a poll. Now back to your regular programming.
Boooooooop!
"Spinny spin spin! Who will it land on, eh?" Tails called out as Shadow spun the bottle. It landed on Rouge. Badummmm! "Ew! I don't want to kiss a boy/girl! He/she's got cooties!" She yelled. Rouge ran out the door and didn't come back. "I guess I'll spin again, eh?" Said Shadow.
....................Spin!....................
"Yay!" Shadow yelled as he grabbed Eggman's hand and lead him into the closet.
"That's just wrong." Spawn commented.
"Noooooo! Get away from me! I'll never go in there with you!" Eggman screamed like a little girl as Shadow pushed him into the dark room. The door slammed and then there was a loud crash. Eggman ran out of the closet as fast as his fat self could go. "I've seen too much! Ok, this is getting weird, so lets make a deal...if Shadow, Sonic, Amy, Rouge, Tikal, Cream, Knuckles, and Tails can defeat me in my Egg Viper, with Hyper Metal Sonic (or whatever he's called in his super form) and E 101 Beta. Only then will I'll give you the antidote." (A/N: Sorry, but this fic is ending much more quickly than I had hoped, so I shall continue it further only if you say so.)
"Deal! I just wanna start liking beer and football again." Sighed Sonic. He shook hands with Eggman and Shadow, Knuckles, Sonic, Amy, Rouge, Tikal, and Cream walked out the door. "Tails! Come on! We are waiting for ya!" Cream yelled at him.
"Don't wanna! I'm gonna stay like this for-eva!"
"No your not, get your sorry arse over here...now!"
"Fine..."
Everyone except Eggman was taken by surprise when the massive Egg Viper hovered over them. "Hey! Like so totally no drinking and driving!" Amy screamed.
"So sue meh." Eggman shouted back.
A lawyer came out of a plot hole and sued Eggman. "Biznotch." He muttered.
Anyway...
"Geta loada thissss!" Eggman barked at them as he shot laser junk at them.
"So totally not cool, mon!" Amy said.
Ok, I know, this fic is going down hill...fast. I'm losing meh touch, if I've ever had one. I'm seriously running out of ideas ::hangs head in shame:: I'm so sorry.
I do believe this is the shortest chapter yet; only 2 ½ pages not counting all the other junk, but I'm once again neck deep in homework, and all of meh Saturdays are filled until the 6th of November.
When you review, it makes meh happy...hint hint. I'm writing another fic called Change of Heart, so please check that one out too...hint hint again.
Byebye people, and I hope your not too mad at me.
