After some extreme and thoughtful consideration, I have decided to cut the current version of "Atrisia" short and revamp the entire thing. This means that the current "Atrisia" (version 1.0) will no longer be updated, either at or blogspot, and that you, as readers, will not be able to see the material until I have completed the entire story. I realize that this comes as a disappointment/inconvenience to most, if not all of you, and I apologize that I begun this story and posted it without looking ahead to the future of it. However, I ask you to please understand that there are many reasons for my decision. The main one is, frankly, that I am not happy with the current story because I don't believe I wrote it to the best of my abilities. For you, the readers, I want to write it the best I can. Hopefully you'll be happy with the results.
Things that are destined to be revamped:
Characters: all major and some minor characters will be developed extensively so that they 'live' and react like true people - no more mary sues!
Plot/storyline: major and minor plot points will actually be created and the storyline will be comprised of 3 arcs. New characters will be introduced as main characters, each with their own storyline which will be tied in with the major/original/main storyline.
Themes: mature, darker themes will be created and used to go with the underlying themes in the actual game Other: better developed planets, new red-herrings & plot twists, premonitions, and so much more!
Although it sounds like I'm advertising a new videogame, these things actually will come to pass for the revamped "Atrisia." If you're freaking out thinking that I'll remake exile/new characters/etc, don't worry, because the main premise of characters will stay the same - they'll just gain a lot of history/emotions/beliefs/etc.
I'm really sorry for posting the beginnings of this story and leading you all on like this. The new "Atrisia" will be better, I promise, and I'm doing it for you. I'll keep the current version up on both sites & blogspot), with updates on the new version appearing at juicy pomegranate. Eventually, my plan is to have a real site dedicated to "Atrisia," but I'm tackling the writing first.
If you have any other questions, feel free to email me or send me an IM through AIM (ivory chopstick).
Thank you,
bri