I hated Chapter 6 so I am re-posting it, and this is the edited version. This time around they are not going to go to Diagon Alley, let's just way they went yesterday, for sake of the story.

Kluvhp thx for your tips on how to re-write.

I hope you enjoy

Everyone had just spent the day in Diagon Alley. They were all tired mostly from trying to catch Kelley from going away and looking at the broomsticks. They went to so many stores it was amazing.

(This is important enough to say) They went to Olivanders to get their wand. Each of them received: Kelley: 10in Holly Unicorn hair. Kelsey: 7 3/4 inches Redwood Phoenix feather. Veronica: 12 inches Mahogany leaf of mandrake. And Dana: 9 inches beech wood scale of firecrap. (Now you may or may not be wondering why they needed to get new wands. Well they needed new ones because the wands from America weren't registered in Britain so they wouldn't work. Hence they got new wands. See my point?)

Anyways, as everyone was back at the house tension began to rise between the exchange students. Kelsey and Kelley continued arguing about whom got the bathroom first in the morning, and Veronica and Dana argued about who 'liked' Ron more. (In my perspective-ew- but to each her own Ms. W I couldn't resist this is just too hilarious.)

Eventually Harry and Ron decided that it was time for lunch, so they went down stairs. They took one glance in the kitchen then they began to back away slowly. In the kitchen there was so much arguing that you could barley hear someone next to you, (How they heard the other person's arguments I do not know) once away from the kitchen a girl came up from behind them and pushed them into the Dining room. " Say here!" commanded Elise. " My pressssssssious." (I know it's spelled 'precious' but this is phonetics ok.) Sorry, wrong story.

A couple of minutes later Harry heard an announcement, " Lady's and Gentlemen, are you ready? It's time to face the facts, it's time to learn the fact's because it's time to meet the contestant's who are attempting to win the heart of this… Er… um… uh… guy in the crowd, ladies and gentlemen I present Veronica and Dana!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" announced Kelley. The room stayed silent, Harry and Ron weren't sure what was going on, though Ron looked a little like he was in a dream. He tilted his head and smiled.

Elise turned off the light it was pitch black in the room, then suddenly she turned the light's on and off giving the thumbs up sign, another American Slang thing Ron didn't understand.

"Hit the music Kelsey," commanded Kelley, and Kelsey hit and button on some kind of muggle device that looked like it had eyes and a mouth, a little creepy huh.

Dana walked down the 'stage.' (If anyone here has seen the movie Zoolander, that was the face she was doing, 'Blue Steel') Quickly Dana turned around and flipped her head and looks at Harry and Ron and winked. At this Ron fell off his chair THUD. Harry Kelley, Kelsey, and Elise burst into sudden laughter. When Ron got up his face was as red as a cherry. (Yeah, a metaphor.) Dana looked slightly embarrassed as well, however she just turned around and stood at the side of the 'stage.'

Next Veronica walked down the 'stage' she looked abnormally serious. Then she attempted something that even a gymnast wouldn't do (Kyra and Hannah in Honor of you all.) She took her arms and did three back flips. (Luckily she was wearing pants.) Veronica walked to the end of the 'stage' she faced Dana.

They faced each other gave each other the evil eye and began circling around each other. Occasionally one of them would jump towards the other in attempt to scare the other, it never worked. As Veronica and Dana looked at each other there was so much tension. It felt like one of those old western movies, with that weird sound they play when there is a face off. Well instead of drawing guns Veronica and Dana twisted their head's causing their hair to flow this way and that.

If this had been on TV (Another muggle invention) you would have heard sounds of GRRRRRRRRRR and Meow. A catfight yes, that's what this was. As they stood looking at each other Crookshanks crawled between them and said, " Hermione is ill that's why you haven't seen her Ta Ta for now." It was literally a catfight. (I don't know where the talking animals cam into the story, but I needed an excuses for not seeing Hermione.)

" GRrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr." Said Veronica.

" Oh you want some of this?" threatened Dana, and she attacked Veronica lunging on her like a lion. Ouch that must have been painful. Veronica struck back with a face slap and then a kick. They were rolling on the floor defending themselves from the others attacks; Veronica clearly favored slapping as opposed to kicking because every chance she got she would slap Dana smack on the face. Dana however enjoyed kicking, in my perspective a more affective way in a battle. As Dana kicked what she though would be her last kick Veronica did a matrix move, and bent her body over backwards just as Dana's kick would have hit her face. Veronica grabbed Dana's leg and flung her backwards over her head. Veronica thought she had one but Dana pulled her ankle and now both of them where on the floor. Eventually they got up to their feet and began moving their hands up and down like sissies.

I would refer to this as a sissy fight neither of them were touching their hand; they were just flailing them around like they were having a seizure. As they flung their hands around carelessly they tilted their heads back and squinted their eye's as if they didn't want to watch.

This seemed so stupid to Harry because not only that they were fighting like sissies, but also that it was over Ron. Ron in Harry's perspective was an idiot and he looked like a frog, and he was not very sensitive.

Ron however was watching this fight very closely; he was amazed at the fact they two girls were fighting over him. Occasionally he took up his fists and pretended as if he were fighting to. Whenever Dana or Veronica got hurt his eyes widened like a kittens, but his eye's weren't cute like a kittens, they were mean, and selfish.

Minutes had passed and Veronica laid on the floor panting for breath. " I guess I won then huh." Said Dana triumphantly. Dana came back into the crowd and next to Ron. Veronica looked up at her in disgust. She thought Oh she has it in for her. She stole my beloved I will steal something of hers something very valuable, oh I can't wait for that day. Oh Watch he Dana, just watch he. Muhahahahahaha and she thought the evil laugh of Lord Moldywart.

Did you think it was better? I do, I added some more detail to the fight, and I thought it was o.k. However you are the reader, and I would be flattered if you reviewed my story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

ME