Could someone please review my songfic that I posted?
I see your broken smile,
And ask, am I the cause?
I see the pain you feel,
And ask why it's there.
Why am I the cause,
The cause of everything that's wrong?
I watch the suffering I cause,
And ask why I did that.
I can't stand the pain I cause,
But then, why do I cause it?
I hurt someone again,
But they act as if it's fine.
I don't know what is wrong,
But I don't know what is right,
No one told me how,
Or what I could do to right it.
I wait for the pain to stop,
But I do not see the end,
And as the heartbeat drops,
I wait for the final end.
I watch the constant suffering,
And wonder why it's there,
Only to find,
That I'm the one that brought it here.
Umm…I hope that you like this poem. Tell me, do you think that I should do some poems on the outer senshi later on?
Mad-4-Manga: What does shimasu mean? Anyway, I will think about writing some poetry for you to put up in one of your stories. I think that I like Srea and you! Demonesses are cool! This review was about as boring as the last one, which I might add, was NOT boring! Here is you chocolate cake.
Dark Kitsune of Ra: Ya, sorry, I am not good with rhyming. Sorry!
Alantie Mistaniu: My mom would kill me if I said, but I am not in high school, I can tell you that! Yay! I took your mind of senioritis! Any who, here is a cookie!
Silver Sailor Ganymede: I looked at two of your stories and I liked them. I am really hoping that you'll continue! Thanks for telling me what your name means! Here is a cookie!