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Sorry but i had to get that off my chest i've been wanting someone to flame a story of mine so i can really lose my temper lol.I'm totally crazy:D

Anyway if you have any ideas for the story pz say so and plz review cos i got like 130

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Here's the story...


'She's Beautiful' the two who were staring at her mused.
She stayed staring out of the window until they finally got to the mall.When they arrived she hurriedly put up her hood just after people began to glance in their direction.Starfire was just getting out of the car and was standing behind her so she presumed they were looking at her with those shocked expressions as if someone extremely beautiful had just appeared,unaware that they were trying to get a glimpse of the dark enchantress.

Raven kept her gaze to the floor as people were beginning to stare at them.Sensing Raven's discomfort Cy ushered them into the mall,supposedly wanting to hurry to get Jak 3 but really making sure his so called sister was alright.

"So's everyone ok to shop?"Robin asked.

The others nodded.

"Great!"


Raven followed Star and Robin since she would need Star's opinion on what to do for her makeover.It didn't take long to get Star on her own since Robin was easily distracted by the flashing lghts and loud sounds of the arcade hypnotising him into it's lair.

"Um Starfire?"

"Yes Raven?"

"Well you see i was gonna give myself a makeover but i didn't know where to start so i was hoping you could help me you know as friends?"she babbled.

"Oh i would love to help you with your new look,come on we don't have any time to waste!"she cried grabbing Ravens arm and yanking her into the nearest store called 'Cosmopolitan'.

"I know the perfect person to help you wih your clothes!"Star squealed.

"PHOENIX"she yelled at the top of her lungs.

"Yeah?"

A 16 year old girl came into view.She had on black jeans with dragons down the side,a leather biker jacket with a dragon on the back,sneakers and a sleeveless t-shirt with a phoenix on.She also wore a silver chain with the words Dragon Phoenix underneath the silver dragon and gold phoenix both containing firey crystals for the eyes.She had waist length chocolate brown hair that was a firey orange at the bottom.Her eyes were a firey orange-red.She was slim but not dangerously thin with a curvaceous figure hidden underneath her jacket.Her hair was in a high ponytail and was held together by a gold clasp with an exotic flower made from many jewels.

"My friend needs your services."

"So who do i have to hurt or kill this time?"she asked without pause.

"Huh?"Star replied.

"Who do you kill"Raven asked starting to get interested.

"Oh you mean a makeover?"

"Duh!"Star said.

"Sorry i thought,Oh never mind"Phoenix quickly said.

"So will you do it?"Star pleaded.

"Yeah sure.I don't have anything better to do."She replied.

"So lets get started.Follow me"she beckoned with her hand.


She led them to the back of the store where hundreds of thousands of clothes hung proudly on shelves,hangers and in wardrobes etc.

Dazzling dresses clung to the mannequins that wore them.Soes were spread out in rows along the floor.

Raven was hypnotized by the clothes but was soon snapped out of it by Phoe so that her measurements could be taken.

Phoe quickly took her measurements and sent each girl to a different part of the area to get clothes in Raven's style.Raven came back with all dark covering clothes.Star came back with pink revealing clothes and phoe came back with an assortment of colours of clothes that showed a small amount of skin but not too much.The other clothes were put back and Star and Phoe started ro get Raven to try on different outfits to see which suited her and which ones didn't.

First she tried on a knee-length white skirt with a lilac corset style top and violet sandels.The top hugged her curves in all of the right places and the skirt showed off her slim legs.Shedidn't realisethat sheattracted a large portion of the male vicinity's attention whilst modeling the outfit.

Next she tried on some sky blue jeans with a red tanktop and black boots.By this time a rather large crowd had gathered where the modelling took place.

After tring on a few more outfits Raven went to pay much to the males complaints of no more fashion show and headed out of the store with Star and Phoe who couldn't stand waiting for her sister to finish work in the shop who decided to tag along.The girls practically dragged her out with them so she didn't have much of a choice anyway.

They were unknowingly followed by a modelling agent.

Their next stop was Victoria's Secret and oblivious to Raven's complaints they left with two bags for her.

They then headed over to the best salon in themall with guidance form Phoewho knew the mall like the back of her hand.

They walked into the brightly lit salon with the agent in tow still unaware of his presence and the hairdresser got to work.When she had finished the make-up artist started on her as well.When they had both finished Raven had waist length violet hair dyed black at the ends and wore violet eyeshadow and rose-pink lipgloss with balck mascara.

They soon left the salon not having to pay as the manager was good friends with Phoe's mother.

All of a sudden a figure stepped in front of them...


Sorry this took so long to do but the computer kept crashing before i could save it lol.

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I'm gonna update about every 2-3 days depending on if i can think of anything to write.If you have any ideas plz share so in your review!

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Cya Bubi

The Komodo Dragon Phoenix.