Stop Saying You Love Me
Disclaimer: I don't own anything cept the plot n' the oc =) ya... please RR! Thanks.
Warning: THIS IS A DARK FIC. IT HAS CHILD ABUSE, RAPE, BEATING AND OTHERS. IF YOU ARE SENSITIVE ABOUT THESE THINGS, PLEASE LEAVE NOW. IT IS RATED R.
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Evier
I'm not liking this fic. You make the characters sound insipid: "LIAR!" Ron screamed. "How dare you insult me and Hermione like that?!" Think to yourself, if you were in that situation would you bother saying something so tacky? Another thing that irked me was your letter to Harry from Ginny: "Well, our parents got...um...tortured and killed...umm so now Ron hates you and because Hermione is Ron's girlfriend she does too." WTF? You should also check up on your French before saying it. "I mean his name means dragon of bad faith!" The latin word for dragon is draco, however bad faith is french would be mal foi. For your translation to be anywhere near correct his name would have to be Draco du Mal Foi. I seriously hope that you either get better or just stop writing, because the Fandom already has enough bad writers as it is and it certainly doesn't need another one.
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This is a review I got. I can't believe that I'm only into my story by 2 chapters and I get a review like this. But I'll respond to it anyways.
It's ok if you don't like this fic...I never told anyone to like it. But your reasons not to are sort of...weird. "LIAR!" Ron screamed. "How dare you insult me and Hermione like that?!" you said if I was in this kind of situation, would I say something like that? Yes, I would, you might not, but I would. Everyone has a different personality. In the movie of the 1st book, when Voldemort said that I'll grant Harry any wish, Harry screamed, "You liar!" isn't that the same? As for the letter, that isn't the main point of the story, so I didn't put to much time into it. I Only need a reason for Ron and the others to hate Harry. I've never took the class for French or Latin, so you can't blame me for mistranslating it. If it really irks you that much, then I'll change it to "His name sounds like 'Dragon of bad faith.'
I appreciate your thoughts on my story. I really do. There is something you said that REALLY pissed me off. You had no...and I mean NO right to tell me to discontinue my work or say that I'm a bad writer. Some people out there enjoy this story. It's just your thought, you didn't have to throw it in my face. I know I don't write very well, but I will get better while I write through the chapters. "...the Fandom already has enough bad writers as it is and it certainly doesn't need another one." If you think this Fandom has enough bad writers, stop coming on! Go to another one! Oh, I'd like to see you write a story, and THEN you can come to me again. Plus, I'm writing for myself, not the readers. I'm expressing my feelings, as the logo says. I ask for reviews only so I can get encouragement and so I can know what I did wrong and what parts they like. I'm "unleashing my imagination and freeing my soul." You had no right to insult me like that. And if you REALLY don't like this story, don't read it. I WILL keep continuing this story unless I have a reason not to, and that review you gave me was NOT a reason.
--Ok, now that I got that out of my system and since I can't post a chapter as an AN here's a few paragraphs
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As they headed toward the Headmaster's office, Harry began to feel a little uncomfortable. He had just been kicked out of the Gryffindor Tower-- his own HOUSE had just kicked him out... "Umm...Harry? Do you know the password?" a voice suddenly spoke, intruding on Harry's thoughts. Harry looked up to see Blaise looking at him sheepishly, and he shook his head. "Umm...ok...err...Liquorish Wands?" Nothing. "Umm...Chocolate Frogs?" Still nothing.
"Hmm... Let's try some Muggle candies then. Jolly ranchers? Starbursts? Warheads? Sodacaps?"
This went on for about five minutes until they FINALLY got the password... "LEMON DROP!!" The gargoyle who'd been staring at them so coldly before suddenly jumped aside. Blaise sighed. "I should have guessed that first." Then they went in and knocked on the door. "Come in, my dear boys. Would you care for a Lemon Drop?" They both politely refused as they stopped before Dumbledore. "Very well then. What can I do for you? Oh wait, never mind. I already know— am I correct in saying that you need a place to stay Mr. Potter?" A twinkle appeared in the headmaster's eyes again. Blaise and Harry nodded.
"Well, I can't let you stay in the Slytherin Dungeons, so hmmm...," he paused for as he tapped his jaw. "How about this? Since I cannot put you into any of the other houses, I'll place you in one of the empty room by the Astronomy Tower. Not many people know of its existence, and it's located just behind the portrait of Merlin. Will that be okay?" Harry nodded. "Very well, then. Your belongings have been moved. Oh yes; the password to the room is Merlin, of course." Dumbledore glanced up at the clock and then looked at the two teens again. "And since it is already past your curfew, off you go to bed!" The two nodded and silently exited the office. As they began to walk down the hallway, Harry could've sworn he saw Dumbledore chatting with some of the portraits on the walls. The voices were pretty clear, but he still wasn't entirely sure if it was real or just a figment of imagination. After all, he had been stressing out a lot lately...
"Harry."
The dark-haired male looked up to see Blaise facing him.
"I'm sure you're safe now, and everyone's asleep, so goodnight!" And before Harry could comprehend what was happening, Blaise lifted up his hand and placed a soft kiss on it. "Bye." And then he left, leaving Harry to stare after him.
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A/N: (after beta) ya...some of you asked why Dumbledore doesn't seem really concern...I didn't want to tell you because I was going to use it later in the story and keep it unnoticed by then (like how the chamber w/a lot of pots and how some of us didn't think much about it) but you guys asked...so I'll cut that part out...it's cuz Dumbledore knew that it was going to turn out okay in the end...ya...shows he has faith in his students...--'
Cassie
Disclaimer: I don't own anything cept the plot n' the oc =) ya... please RR! Thanks.
Warning: THIS IS A DARK FIC. IT HAS CHILD ABUSE, RAPE, BEATING AND OTHERS. IF YOU ARE SENSITIVE ABOUT THESE THINGS, PLEASE LEAVE NOW. IT IS RATED R.
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Evier
I'm not liking this fic. You make the characters sound insipid: "LIAR!" Ron screamed. "How dare you insult me and Hermione like that?!" Think to yourself, if you were in that situation would you bother saying something so tacky? Another thing that irked me was your letter to Harry from Ginny: "Well, our parents got...um...tortured and killed...umm so now Ron hates you and because Hermione is Ron's girlfriend she does too." WTF? You should also check up on your French before saying it. "I mean his name means dragon of bad faith!" The latin word for dragon is draco, however bad faith is french would be mal foi. For your translation to be anywhere near correct his name would have to be Draco du Mal Foi. I seriously hope that you either get better or just stop writing, because the Fandom already has enough bad writers as it is and it certainly doesn't need another one.
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This is a review I got. I can't believe that I'm only into my story by 2 chapters and I get a review like this. But I'll respond to it anyways.
It's ok if you don't like this fic...I never told anyone to like it. But your reasons not to are sort of...weird. "LIAR!" Ron screamed. "How dare you insult me and Hermione like that?!" you said if I was in this kind of situation, would I say something like that? Yes, I would, you might not, but I would. Everyone has a different personality. In the movie of the 1st book, when Voldemort said that I'll grant Harry any wish, Harry screamed, "You liar!" isn't that the same? As for the letter, that isn't the main point of the story, so I didn't put to much time into it. I Only need a reason for Ron and the others to hate Harry. I've never took the class for French or Latin, so you can't blame me for mistranslating it. If it really irks you that much, then I'll change it to "His name sounds like 'Dragon of bad faith.'
I appreciate your thoughts on my story. I really do. There is something you said that REALLY pissed me off. You had no...and I mean NO right to tell me to discontinue my work or say that I'm a bad writer. Some people out there enjoy this story. It's just your thought, you didn't have to throw it in my face. I know I don't write very well, but I will get better while I write through the chapters. "...the Fandom already has enough bad writers as it is and it certainly doesn't need another one." If you think this Fandom has enough bad writers, stop coming on! Go to another one! Oh, I'd like to see you write a story, and THEN you can come to me again. Plus, I'm writing for myself, not the readers. I'm expressing my feelings, as the logo says. I ask for reviews only so I can get encouragement and so I can know what I did wrong and what parts they like. I'm "unleashing my imagination and freeing my soul." You had no right to insult me like that. And if you REALLY don't like this story, don't read it. I WILL keep continuing this story unless I have a reason not to, and that review you gave me was NOT a reason.
--Ok, now that I got that out of my system and since I can't post a chapter as an AN here's a few paragraphs
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As they headed toward the Headmaster's office, Harry began to feel a little uncomfortable. He had just been kicked out of the Gryffindor Tower-- his own HOUSE had just kicked him out... "Umm...Harry? Do you know the password?" a voice suddenly spoke, intruding on Harry's thoughts. Harry looked up to see Blaise looking at him sheepishly, and he shook his head. "Umm...ok...err...Liquorish Wands?" Nothing. "Umm...Chocolate Frogs?" Still nothing.
"Hmm... Let's try some Muggle candies then. Jolly ranchers? Starbursts? Warheads? Sodacaps?"
This went on for about five minutes until they FINALLY got the password... "LEMON DROP!!" The gargoyle who'd been staring at them so coldly before suddenly jumped aside. Blaise sighed. "I should have guessed that first." Then they went in and knocked on the door. "Come in, my dear boys. Would you care for a Lemon Drop?" They both politely refused as they stopped before Dumbledore. "Very well then. What can I do for you? Oh wait, never mind. I already know— am I correct in saying that you need a place to stay Mr. Potter?" A twinkle appeared in the headmaster's eyes again. Blaise and Harry nodded.
"Well, I can't let you stay in the Slytherin Dungeons, so hmmm...," he paused for as he tapped his jaw. "How about this? Since I cannot put you into any of the other houses, I'll place you in one of the empty room by the Astronomy Tower. Not many people know of its existence, and it's located just behind the portrait of Merlin. Will that be okay?" Harry nodded. "Very well, then. Your belongings have been moved. Oh yes; the password to the room is Merlin, of course." Dumbledore glanced up at the clock and then looked at the two teens again. "And since it is already past your curfew, off you go to bed!" The two nodded and silently exited the office. As they began to walk down the hallway, Harry could've sworn he saw Dumbledore chatting with some of the portraits on the walls. The voices were pretty clear, but he still wasn't entirely sure if it was real or just a figment of imagination. After all, he had been stressing out a lot lately...
"Harry."
The dark-haired male looked up to see Blaise facing him.
"I'm sure you're safe now, and everyone's asleep, so goodnight!" And before Harry could comprehend what was happening, Blaise lifted up his hand and placed a soft kiss on it. "Bye." And then he left, leaving Harry to stare after him.
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A/N: (after beta) ya...some of you asked why Dumbledore doesn't seem really concern...I didn't want to tell you because I was going to use it later in the story and keep it unnoticed by then (like how the chamber w/a lot of pots and how some of us didn't think much about it) but you guys asked...so I'll cut that part out...it's cuz Dumbledore knew that it was going to turn out okay in the end...ya...shows he has faith in his students...--'
Cassie
