As a few people have suggested, I have started putting review responses in the chapters.
Triskit: Thank you! It was intended to make you think like that.
Wraithlord42: Thanks for your review! As you can see I am putting review responses in the chapters.
Theo Gary: Glad you like it!
Anonymous- Cat: You'll see what she'll do in the chapter. I'm afraid it's not dramatic, but probably what most people would do! (I think!)
Korean Pearl: I am so sorry I missed you out! I have reviewed one of your stories now and it was v.good (even though the review says that, I'll say it twice!)
Gt: Thank you, I'll R&R as soon as I find your story up! Is it Animorphs fanfic or something else?
Evil- tyrant: Visser Three has now officially forgotten Aftran's name and she is being referred to as "you" to her face and "that new Yeerk" in the third person! If you meant Leyan, then he is the Visser's favourite guard and he has been there for a long time. Thanks for the tip!
Tabatha51: She does have a brother called Estril who is in Chapter 4 (or maybe 5)! Well, one of my Chapters anyway! He does get killed, but I don't think he is assigned to the same ship as her, only to a Hork- Bajir. Thanks for reviewing!
Yrkh8er: It's okay. You can definitly use my screenname, but I didn't make the name up, it belongs to one of my favourite horses. (If you've read my bio you'll know I'm horse mad! If you know me you'll also know I'm totally mad!)
Y.G: Thank you for all your reviews!
To everyone: I'm so sorry this took so long. wouldn't let me onto my login page. I sent a message round via reviews to all signed reviewers who'd written stories (I think!), but I obviously couldn't contact anyone else! Sorry!
So, on with the story...............
I ran as best I could in Jaolin's tired body towards the exit. I could dimly see Visser Three and the other Hork- Bajir running towards the pool. The Andalites had let all the involuntary hosts out of the cages. Some of them were riding on the back of a huge brown horse. There were five Andalites, morphed into various Earth animals. There was blood everywhere, and all the Taxxons were having a major feeding frenzy! I felt sick, and closed my eyes. When I opened them again, the Visser had morphed into a gigantic eight- headed creature. He sent flames at the Andalites and the hosts. A human tried to attack him, bare handed. He went down, but such courage! I had never known humans at that time, never infested one, but that gave me an insight into their souls. They would never give up unless they were dead. They just would get knocked down rather than surrender.
I will admit it, I was pleased to see the one single human woman get away, riding on the horses back away from the Pool and towards her freedom. I was glad that one human extra would have her head to herself. But the feeling of happiness was soon outweighed by the carnage that I saw around me. Humans, Hork- Bajir and Taxxons were laying in pools of their own blood, unmoving. Some were charred with burns from Visser Three's terrifying morph. He demorphed, and he and his guards surveyed the scene of terror calmly.
I however, was shocked by the horror and pain of this. How could I continue doing this? But how could I not?
(YOU!) Yelled the Visser.
I turned round, then realised there was no one else and he was yelling at me. I felt my heart start beating about ten times faster.
(Where have you been? You're supposed to fight, not stand there with your eyes shut!)
I said nothing. Leyan, who seemed to be the Visser's favourite, bravely spoke up.
"She's never fought before, Visser. She just moved up to Hork- Bajir."
(You mean they are giving me rubbish Yeerks now? Send word to Sub- Visser 19. I want him in my quarters in 15 minuites!) He shouted.
"Yes, Visser," Leyan replied.
(And I will see you afterwards. I will not tolerate your speaking out of turn.)
"Yes, Visser."
Leyan sent another Yeerk to fetch Sub- Visser 19. The rest of us went back to the Blade ship. I heard Leyan and one of his friends arguing with each other.
"Leyan, why did you defend that Yeerk ? You've let him kill loads of other new recruits before and haven't said a word. Now he'll hurt you, and probably us as well."
"She doesn't know how to fight!"
"Oh, I see."
"What?"
"She. You like her."
"No, it's not..."
"You're disgusting Leyan, favouring her like that." Leyan's friend walked off.
Before I could do anything, Leyan walked out. I quickly looked at the ground.
"Guess you heard that," he muttered.
"I'm sorry, I couldn't help overhearing and then I guess I..."
"Don't worry," he said gently. I felt a little nervous that perhaps his friend was right. There was such an awkward silence that I felt I had to say something.
"Thanks for standing up for me. Will the Visser really kill..."
"No, I don't think so, but I wouldn't put it past him. Personally I'd rather serve under Visser One."
"I would too."
(I feel sorry for his host) Jaolin said to me.
(I don't. It's an Andalite)
Jaolin ignored me. Leyan and I had been walking along in silence together. I hadn't even noticed! I then realised with a jolt of worry that Leyan had somehow managed to get nearer. A lot nearer. In fact so close that we were touching. I suddenly pulled away.
"I've got to go Leyan." I said quickly. "Good luck with the Visser." I swiftly walked away, leaving him staring after me in silence.
I need ideas for Karen's last name. She won't appear for a while but I want to have a last name for her so I can write that chapter whenever I want, as I suck at making up names. Please could you tell me if you can think of one! I'll mention whoever's name I use in the disclaimer.
Review for the next chapter! Flames are punishable by assignment to Visser Three's personal guard (ie death). Constructive criticism is, as always, welcome!
