Thank you all for the lovely reviews but just a small note: when you review can you say who your character is. Thanks
Interested Reader
ch 1, anonymous Please update soon! Like now!
Milleniua
ch 1, signed A bit confused at first, but I'm sure it will be great!
InjuredPelican
ch 1, signed I'm still intersested, especialy if my character's in it. I think some of your sentences are a little to long. If you shortened them, it would make reading more clear. Looking forward to next chapter!
satan'stoasterstrudel
ch 1, signed Yay! I'm so glad the story started! (I submitted the character of Celeste, but I've changed my name since then.) I think that the story is nifty. Yes. Nifty indeed. (If you've noticed, I'm a bit weird. Yes. Weird indeed.) Ok, bye! You'll probably hear from me again.
DragonsDarkRose(not signed in)
ch 1, anonymous good story so far (My character was one that wasn't in the first chappie, but it's alright, i still like it so far!) Please update soon, you're an awesome writer!
frozen-in-shadow
ch 1, signed oer! that was good . i can't wait till meh person gets in!
blucherriblossoms
ch 1, signed hey nice first chapter! update soon!
Animekitty1
You did an awesome job! Your writing was very descriptive and beautiful. I loved the first chapter. Please update as soon as possible because I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Rayne was in the healing hut again, it was the 13th time in three weeks and today would be the last, and she decided that today would be the day that this place was destroyed. The purple haired guy who had saved her was fully healed, it was amazing after the 1st week most of this bruises vanished and the 2nd week he said that he felt as if he was at full power, this week he was being shown around the camp by Dany.
"So Dany…" started Trunks as he came walking into the hunt, he paused when he saw that Rayne was awake
"You awake" said Trunks as he walked over to her
She flinched backwards a little almost afraid of him
"I'm not going to hurt you, and just wanted to see if you were alright" he said slightly hurt by her action
"I am fine" she whispered as she got up from the bed she was sitting on
"I am planning on shutting down this place today... Underneath the main place site there are spaceships... you will take that an leave this planet"
"What" said Dany "You plan on taking on every guard in this place?"
"Yes"
"I don't think so" said Dany harshly "If you going fight then I want to join you, I want a few cracks at the guards"
Rayne met Dany eyes in a grey verses yellowy green battle of wits, but the child remained defiant and stood his ground
"You will aid me then" she finally said
"Hang on" said Trunks "Dany is not fighting"
"What" said Dany "Why Not?"
"You're a child and that would be suicidal" came Trunks answer
"Look here Trunk I am not afraid of death, my race expectancy is only 21 years and…"
"Why then do you want to shorten your life going into a battle that seems impossible?"
"Because Trunks. he stopped being a child when he first came here, he has had to witness things that no person should. If he wants to go and take out a few guards that made his life hell then it is his choice"
"Aren't you concerned that he could die" yelled Trunks
"We all die some day" she said softly
Suddenly realisation hit Trunks "You're planning on giving up your life to stop this"
"If that what is takes"
"What happened to you here that was so bad, that you will give up your life to stop it"
"…."
"Fine then I am staying to" he said
"No, you must go"
"Why?" he asked but was greeted by silence "Why" he asked again
"She belongs to a race that is bound heavily by a code of honour, and because you saved her she is now bound to you, which is why she came back even after you helped her escape" said Dany who had been wondering why she had come back but remembered what his mother sister had told him
"So what does that mean" he asked
"It means that I am yours, I must help you achieve your destiny of returning your race to power and then I will be free from you"
"How'd you know that…"
"I listened when you told Dany"
"If that is the case then you dying isn't going to help me" he said with a slight smirk on his face
"I" started Rayne but fell silent "Fine then let us fight together, but today this camp will fall"
"Ok"
Celeste had reached the edge of the camp and could see many of the slaves being led away by guards the slaves had metal shackles around their wrist and legs and so they walked slowly which caused the guard to kick them forward urging them to move quicker. Celeste suspected that it was clean up day in the camp, meaning that once each camps residents exceeded a number they would have to be cut down either by them killing the slave or throwing the salves into a ring to fight each other to death with the winner claming the prize of theirlife.
Celeste had been in one of these rings the slaves in each seem to turn into vicious monsters possessed, trying to win at all cost. Luckily that was how Celeste had escaped, the guards were to busy paying attention to all the aggressive fighter and didn't miss one if the seemingly quite ones. But they should have been watching her because she would destroy them slowly no one would stand in the way of her finding her parents not even god himself.
"Rayne the guard has come for you" said Dany as he strolled into the camp, Rayne got up from her bed and walked out of the door when she had left Dany turned to Trunk excitedly
" I wish I could see her fight that guard"
"Huh" said Trunk as he strained his ears trying to hear what was taking place outside the camp
"Let's go" said Rayne as she appeared in the entrance of the door
"How?" said Trunks slightly confused, he hadn't heard and sound of a struggle… she must have knocked him out cold then he thought as he followed his two companions out the room
As he stepped out of the hut he was suddenly overwhelmed by the bright light, it had been a long time since he had seen a light as bright as this, and it pierced his sensitive eyes till he had to shut them.
"You ok" whispered Dany
"Yeah" said Trunks as he opened his eyes again
"Are you two ready" came the voice of Rayne
Trunks swallowed the rising lump in his throat before he echoed Dany yes.
"Ok then" said Rayne as she leaped out attacking first guard she saw
'What the hell' thought Celeste as she watched the bizarre going ons in the camp, slaves were running free and attacking the guards, fires brightened up the site and many people had already fallen in death
"Well it looks like the party has started without me" she said with a smile before jumping at a guard
Trunks couldn't remember the last time he had worked himself this hard without going super sayain, as he punched guard after guard, he felt the angry inside of him increase calling out to him to going into super sayain mode and kill all those whom had joined this evil
"Trunks" yelled Rayne as she drifted over to him
"Remember where I told you the ships were, hurry and go there" she yelled as she backhanded a guard sending him flying into a wall
"I'm not leaving you" he yelled back
"Look how many people are dying, we have got to get all of them of this planet. Take Dany with you; turn on all the ships, I'll tell people to start boarding them"
"But…"
"Trunks" yelled Rayne "Just go"
"Fine" said Trunk as he grabbed Dany by the collar and flew fast towards the palace
Celeste was injured she cursed the gods for not allowing her, her arrows if she had them none of the guards would have stood a chance… but unfortunately she didn't have them and a guard who hadcaught her of guardhad damaged one of her wings making it hard to balance.
"Go toward the ships" yelled a voice to the slave "Hurry" Celeste looked up and noticed a girl with long black hair ushering the slave toward thepalace underground; but why? Did she say the ships were there... Of course they are no-one could get close enough to the castle to check but they had to be there.
If that girl was right than this washer chance to get of the mud-ball planet and Celeste well she was going to take it.
"Can you see her" asked Trunks as Dany peered out of the ship door
"Nope" yelled Dany
"Damn it" said Trunks "Stay here I'm…"
"Wait there she is" Said Dany excitedly pointed to a white dot with black hair
"Finally" thought Trunks as he put on a 5 minute timer on the ship telling it when to take of
Rayne had almost made it towards the ship when she felt a cold dark energy hovering above her looking up she saw the heard of the CO staring at her his dark black eyes burned into her back as she increased her speed towards the ship
"Now where would you be going" asked the CO as he suddenly appeared in front of Rayne
"Away from you" spat Rayne as she tried to dodge around him
"So you can speak" he said as he brought his hand out at lighting speed and grabed her by the throat "You were always so beautiful, it's a shame that I have to kill you" he whispered as he bushed his face against her ear before tightening his grip on her neck
"No" shouted Trunk as he flew at lighting speed toward theCO hitting him in the back and forcing his to drop Rayne
"Trunk" yelled Dany "1 minute left"
"I'm coming" he yelled not taking his eye of the CO "Rayne hurry"
"I'm sorry Trunks" she whispered as she stood up thrusting her hand out towards Trunks he was hurled backward, sending him flying into the now closing ship
"No" screamed Celeste as she dived in the half closed door
"Rayne" yelled Trunks as he pounded on the now fullyclosed door, quickly he moved towards the console typing in a few key words, but was only reward with a beeping sound
"Trunks what's the matter" asked Dany
"Someone or something has overwritten the system I can't turn the ship around"
"But, what about"
"She's probably dead" came the cool careless voice of Celeste
Sorry if that was confusing, but i had to change the scene a lot, but i hope that you still got the gist of the story.
So what did you think of part two, I know I said that more character would be in this chapter but, I couldn't make all of the characters meet in the same place.
Anyway please review and I promise characters will be introduced into the next chapter