Emily- I am glad you loved this chapter! Oo I can't wait until you write your story. You must tell me when the first chapter is up. Hehehe that Willie person should feel very proud for being a demon.
Rain- No no no no no! You can review a chapter as many times as your heart desires!! I love reviews so I defiantly won't stop you! Don't worry I don't care if you don't like Jake's POV....I would have never thought of it, but someone asked me to do it. We all like different things, and I know I won't be able to please everyone. I will try not to do another Jake POV, but he will still be in the story.
Rain- Yes, I know I could easily put this up there with your other review, but you wrote two reviews (which is perfectly okay with me!) so you get two responses. I am glad that you agree with me about Willie. He could have done it much nicer, but there are some people in world like that...what can you do? I am also happy you think my story is good! Here is a review!
Imasecret13- Hey! Yup I got chapter 9 up and now here is 10 lol. Yeah, I hope you get chapter 2 up quickly because I really do like your story A LOT! Talk to ya later.
StarFall- Sorry it took so long to update...I was on a 2 week vacation and just got back. Then fanfiction wasn't working....grr that made me mad.
Anna- You make me soo happy!! Hehe I am giddy from the reviews right now so sorry. For some reason I can't stop laughing so ::takes deep breath:: ok I think I am calming down a bit...NOPE! Oh well. Yeah I agree that it is a bit unlikely, but it might happen. Where on www.jennycarroll.com is it? I looked and could not find it so I am sad so if you or someone else could tell me where it is...thanks!
Linkinparkid- Hey Brian! Glad you like it so far...hmm maybe I should mention Linkin Park more often in my story. What do you think? Lol Talk to you later, too.
SpiceyGurl - YAY!! You are cool because you like Gilmore Girls and my story! LoL It would be fine by me for you to go kick Willie's butt hehe. Thanks for the support and I am happy you like my story!
Write-on3108- Ah you make me feel all warm and special inside! I didn't even think my story would be liked this much by people!! I'm glad you love it. It is my first story ever and it makes me feel good that you love it. Oh, I agree about Willie. "bastardo" is bastard in Spanish...at least that's what my translator on the computer said.
animechix666- That makes me feel so special that my story was one of the first ones you looked for, and I am happy I didn't let you down!
Jennifer- NOO don't loose interest in my story! I couldn't help it that I was out of town for 2 weeks...no I'm sad...I hope you read this chapter.
Elizabeth- GUESS WHOSE BACK! BACK AGAIN! LIZ IS BACK, TELL A FRIEND (you)! I am back as you can tell and I tried calling you and YOU weren't home. Gr lol...
Sitting dragon- *ohh thanks so much and I hope you will continue to read it. By the way, I love your name mine is a name of a dragon too.
StarFall- Thank you! I very much appreciate this and I agree that Willie is a moron, and I am so happy that you like my story. Hmmm what's after chapter 9? How about chapter 10 which takes me to...
~~~~~~~~~~~~CHAPTER 10~~~~~~~~~~~ wow my story just keeps getting bigger and bigger lol!
JESSE POV
I stared at Fr. Dominic with uttermost disbelief. What does he mean Paul is going to kill himself from shifting? How does he know what shifting even is? I only knew a minimal amount about "shifting" from what I have gotten Susannah to tell me.
Susannah told me that...Nombre de Dios! Susannah is still unconscious! How could I have forgotten about her? Well, I was sort of preoccupied with the thought of getting rid on my Slater problems. Now that Paul was "out cold" I now had to worry about Querida.
I stood there thinking about what to do for Susannah when Jake said, "Uh, Fr. D? What do you mean that dude is going to, uh, kill himself by shitting?"
We all stared at him when he said this. I started laughing, luckily he couldn't hear me. David looked like he was trying really hard not to laugh, but he couldn't contain himself too long. Father Dominic looked appalled though.
"Shifting...SHIF-TING!" He pronounced slowly and clearly.
"Not..." David tried to say in between bursts of laughter. "Not..Shi...shshit...shitting." He then lost all control and looked like he was about to hurt himself by laughing so hard. "Paul Slater..." He tried to calm down but it wasn't working, probably because I was laughing just as hard. During this Padre just shook his head while Jake looked confused. David tried again, "...Isn't going to...kill himself...by...shitting!" He then fell to the ground trying to breathe while still laughing.
"Oh...I guess that makes more sense...," Jake then said still looking at David. "Dave...you can stop laughin' now."
"I think I should go take Susannah to her room, so she can rest," I said looking down at her. I sighed and said, "If only I was able to get here sooner!"
"Yes, I think you should go take her back, but Jesse, you have no need to blame yourself,"
"Padre," I said looking at him now. "I almost killed Paul, and you know what happens to ghosts when they kill someone,"
"Yes, I know Jesse, but you didn't kill him did you? So you have no need to worry about risking eternal damnation or wandering around this earth nothing more then an empty image of Jesse. You didn't kill him and that is all that matters."
I sighed and returned my attention to Susannah, and I couldn't help but feel guilty. I had risked everything to kill Paul. If a ghost kills a living human they basically have no chance to move on. Not a problem for me since I am in no hurry to move on right? Wrong. I wouldn't move on but it would be like I didn't exist. Not even mediators would be able to see me. I would just be a lost soul roaming the earth until Apocalypse, and then I would go to hell with all the other criminals and hate seekers. This is not how I would like to spend the rest of my time.
"Jesse, look at me," Father Dominic said. I looked back at him. "You are still here talking to me, and Paul is not dead. You shouldn't worry about it."
Worry? I'm not worrying...I'm feeling guilty. I knew he was right, but I still couldn't believe how lucky I was that Paul shifted. If he didn't he would be dead and I would be gone.
"I guess I should take Susannah back to her house. She has been laying there for long enough."
I picked Susannah up and Jake exclaimed, "Whoa! How is she floating?"
David said very sarcastically, "She's magic."
"Oh, that would explain a lot about that girl."
David's mouth dropped open and he stared at his brother in disbelief. He said, "Are you really THAT dense?"
"Hey!" was Jake's response. "I could take you little man!"
"Well, I should hope so since you are five years older that me. Jesse is holding Suze so he can take her home."
"Does he need me to drive again?" Jake asked.
"I don't know yet. Paul had the Spirit realm blocked off from me..." I looked at Father Dominic.
"Well, I can unblock it. Any good mediator knows how to do that. You never know when a dangerous ghost will come after you."
Well, that's good. It would be much easier to dematerialize with Susannah then having to drive. "Yes, Padre, please do that."
"Okay, I haven't done this in a while so let me think..." He sat down on his chair and mumbled to himself every once in a while.
I began to pace the room again because I was in a hurry and began to get impatient.
"I got it!" Fr. Dominic yelled out in an excited manner.
"Good! What is it then? Please do it quickly!" I said anxiously.
"Hold your horses, Jesse! I will do it don't worry!" He said to me.
This made me very angry. "I don't HAVE any horses any more if you haven't noticed Father!" I said a bit hotly. I couldn't help it; horses were a big part of my life.
"NO Jesse that's a somewhat modern term meaning wait a few minutes. Okay here it goes." He took a deep breath, closed his eyes, and said, "As a mediator and guide of lost souls I command the Spirit Realm to be open again!" It was not his normal voice, but it seemed deeper and more commanding; a little bit frightening.
He opened him eyes and said, "Go ahead and try."
I thought about being in Susannah's room and I appeared there.
"YES!" I shouted to no one in particular. "It worked it worked I can't believe I worked!" I chanted.
I reappeared in Father Dominic's office and jumped around punching my arms into the air excitedly.
"Nice Jesse!" David said laughing.
I chuckled and grinned at him. I then turned to Father Dominic and said, "Thank you Padre. You know its true what they say that you take things for granted until it's gone. Of course I figured that out 150 years ago when I died..."
"Yes well you should NEVER take anything or anyone for granted Jesse," He looked me straight in the eye and I got a feeling he was talking about Susannah.
I looked away and said, "Oh, well...I guess I should take Susannah now that I can materialize places." I picked her up again because I had set her down when I was checking out the Spirit Realm. I said goodbye and materialized in Susannah's room again.
I set her softly down on her bed and kissed her lightly on her forehead. I whispered, "I'm sorry for everything Querida." I looked down at her and sat down on the side of her bed. "I'm sorry that Paul is always bothering you. I'm sorry that I couldn't have been there sooner for you and that I tried to kill Paul...no I am not sorry about that. Though, I am sorry about the pain you are going through physically and mentally. I know I probably caused some of that pain and for that," I paused and leaned down and kissed her again on the top of her head. I then whispered into her hair, "I can never forgive myself. I truly do love you." I stood up and started walking around her room pausing every once in a while. I ran my hand through my hair and said, "I just wish I could tell you to your face, but I don't know if I can..." I looked over at her and said in a barely audible voice, "I...I am sorry..."
I then disappeared.
~~~~~~Paul~~~~~~
Jesse was strangling me, and I knew I couldn't stay alive much longer this way. I even begged him to let me go of me. I, Paul Slater, begged to a ghost....that is not something you hear me say everyday. Suze may, but not me. The are suppose to beg to ME. Just like Suze should love me not some ghost.
I stopped fighting him saving the last of my energy for breathing, which he wasn't making too easy. "Jesse!" I gasped in a haggard voice. "Jesse please stop! I don't want to die...not like this..." I whispered the last part closing my eyes. They were becoming hard to keep open. I reopened them and saw that Jesse was still there.
He then said in a voice even I have never heard him use, who is the person who normally get him pissed," You. You should have thought of that before!" He had so much hate and fire in his voice.
I thought that it was all over for me. I knew I wasn't ready to die. Great, I'm going to have to mediate myself. How fun does THAT sound?
Then it hit me, well, first Jesse hit me, but then IT hit me. I closed my eyes and thought of the blanket of stars that were not from our world. The cold wet feeling of the fog hitting my face, and the mist drifting around my feet. The sick feeling in the pit of my stomach that only this place can gave me, and the chill the makes your whole body shiver unlike anything in our world. I opened my eyes and was there. I shifted.
I sat down and waited for them to notice that I was in a comma and leave me alone. I was tired so I ended up lying down. While I was staring at the bright glow of the stars I felt my nose. Several people had punched it today and I knew it was the worst broken nose that any doctor would have seen. It felt perfectly fine now.
I didn't hear the footsteps coming but when I looked up a big shadow covered me. It said, "You do not belong in the realm of the dead! You shall leave now."
I stood back up and glared at the gatekeeper. I said in a cold voice, "I am a powerful shifter, and YOU shall leave me alone."
"Shifter?" He asked.
I replied still glaring at him, "Yes, Shifter. Someone who is even more powerful then a mediator."
He looked at me amazed, "More powerful then the great mediators?"
"Did I stutter?" I didn't have time to tell him about the differences between mediators and shifters. I had a plan forming in my head and I wanted to use it.
"Yeah ok well, I got to be going now. I have some important business to tend to back on Earth."
"Shifter business?" He asked me.
I rolled my eyes at this. I mean come on! Why is he so interested in Shifters? "Uh...Yeah kind of," Well, at least I will be using some of my shifting abilities.
"Farewell, oh great Shifter!" I Gatekeeper said in a big booming voice that echoed throughout The Shadow Land.
"Goodbye...Gatekeeper," I said in a bored voice.
I then closed my eyes and pictured Father Dom's office. I opened my eyes and was extremely glad to see that I was alone.
I started to run to my car. I had to hurry up and get to Suze's house. I wanted to get there before she woke up since I knew there was no way I would be able to get in there if she was awake. Right now she probably doesn't trust me at all....if she ever had. If she knows what's good for her, she should trust me. She needs me...and my knowledge about shifting.
I must have been driving quicker then I thought because the next thing I knew, I was pulling into Suze's driveway. I was silently hoping Jesse was not in there with her. I personally only enjoy dancing with death once a day not twice. Besides what I had in mind would be much easier if no one but Suze was present...
TBC
So, what did you think? Please review!!! Oh and sorry for the long delay I was out of town for 2 weeks and I have been working on this since I got home. REVIEW REVIEW REIVEW! (please!!)
Rain- No no no no no! You can review a chapter as many times as your heart desires!! I love reviews so I defiantly won't stop you! Don't worry I don't care if you don't like Jake's POV....I would have never thought of it, but someone asked me to do it. We all like different things, and I know I won't be able to please everyone. I will try not to do another Jake POV, but he will still be in the story.
Rain- Yes, I know I could easily put this up there with your other review, but you wrote two reviews (which is perfectly okay with me!) so you get two responses. I am glad that you agree with me about Willie. He could have done it much nicer, but there are some people in world like that...what can you do? I am also happy you think my story is good! Here is a review!
Imasecret13- Hey! Yup I got chapter 9 up and now here is 10 lol. Yeah, I hope you get chapter 2 up quickly because I really do like your story A LOT! Talk to ya later.
StarFall- Sorry it took so long to update...I was on a 2 week vacation and just got back. Then fanfiction wasn't working....grr that made me mad.
Anna- You make me soo happy!! Hehe I am giddy from the reviews right now so sorry. For some reason I can't stop laughing so ::takes deep breath:: ok I think I am calming down a bit...NOPE! Oh well. Yeah I agree that it is a bit unlikely, but it might happen. Where on www.jennycarroll.com is it? I looked and could not find it so I am sad so if you or someone else could tell me where it is...thanks!
Linkinparkid- Hey Brian! Glad you like it so far...hmm maybe I should mention Linkin Park more often in my story. What do you think? Lol Talk to you later, too.
SpiceyGurl - YAY!! You are cool because you like Gilmore Girls and my story! LoL It would be fine by me for you to go kick Willie's butt hehe. Thanks for the support and I am happy you like my story!
Write-on3108- Ah you make me feel all warm and special inside! I didn't even think my story would be liked this much by people!! I'm glad you love it. It is my first story ever and it makes me feel good that you love it. Oh, I agree about Willie. "bastardo" is bastard in Spanish...at least that's what my translator on the computer said.
animechix666- That makes me feel so special that my story was one of the first ones you looked for, and I am happy I didn't let you down!
Jennifer- NOO don't loose interest in my story! I couldn't help it that I was out of town for 2 weeks...no I'm sad...I hope you read this chapter.
Elizabeth- GUESS WHOSE BACK! BACK AGAIN! LIZ IS BACK, TELL A FRIEND (you)! I am back as you can tell and I tried calling you and YOU weren't home. Gr lol...
Sitting dragon- *ohh thanks so much and I hope you will continue to read it. By the way, I love your name mine is a name of a dragon too.
StarFall- Thank you! I very much appreciate this and I agree that Willie is a moron, and I am so happy that you like my story. Hmmm what's after chapter 9? How about chapter 10 which takes me to...
~~~~~~~~~~~~CHAPTER 10~~~~~~~~~~~ wow my story just keeps getting bigger and bigger lol!
JESSE POV
I stared at Fr. Dominic with uttermost disbelief. What does he mean Paul is going to kill himself from shifting? How does he know what shifting even is? I only knew a minimal amount about "shifting" from what I have gotten Susannah to tell me.
Susannah told me that...Nombre de Dios! Susannah is still unconscious! How could I have forgotten about her? Well, I was sort of preoccupied with the thought of getting rid on my Slater problems. Now that Paul was "out cold" I now had to worry about Querida.
I stood there thinking about what to do for Susannah when Jake said, "Uh, Fr. D? What do you mean that dude is going to, uh, kill himself by shitting?"
We all stared at him when he said this. I started laughing, luckily he couldn't hear me. David looked like he was trying really hard not to laugh, but he couldn't contain himself too long. Father Dominic looked appalled though.
"Shifting...SHIF-TING!" He pronounced slowly and clearly.
"Not..." David tried to say in between bursts of laughter. "Not..Shi...shshit...shitting." He then lost all control and looked like he was about to hurt himself by laughing so hard. "Paul Slater..." He tried to calm down but it wasn't working, probably because I was laughing just as hard. During this Padre just shook his head while Jake looked confused. David tried again, "...Isn't going to...kill himself...by...shitting!" He then fell to the ground trying to breathe while still laughing.
"Oh...I guess that makes more sense...," Jake then said still looking at David. "Dave...you can stop laughin' now."
"I think I should go take Susannah to her room, so she can rest," I said looking down at her. I sighed and said, "If only I was able to get here sooner!"
"Yes, I think you should go take her back, but Jesse, you have no need to blame yourself,"
"Padre," I said looking at him now. "I almost killed Paul, and you know what happens to ghosts when they kill someone,"
"Yes, I know Jesse, but you didn't kill him did you? So you have no need to worry about risking eternal damnation or wandering around this earth nothing more then an empty image of Jesse. You didn't kill him and that is all that matters."
I sighed and returned my attention to Susannah, and I couldn't help but feel guilty. I had risked everything to kill Paul. If a ghost kills a living human they basically have no chance to move on. Not a problem for me since I am in no hurry to move on right? Wrong. I wouldn't move on but it would be like I didn't exist. Not even mediators would be able to see me. I would just be a lost soul roaming the earth until Apocalypse, and then I would go to hell with all the other criminals and hate seekers. This is not how I would like to spend the rest of my time.
"Jesse, look at me," Father Dominic said. I looked back at him. "You are still here talking to me, and Paul is not dead. You shouldn't worry about it."
Worry? I'm not worrying...I'm feeling guilty. I knew he was right, but I still couldn't believe how lucky I was that Paul shifted. If he didn't he would be dead and I would be gone.
"I guess I should take Susannah back to her house. She has been laying there for long enough."
I picked Susannah up and Jake exclaimed, "Whoa! How is she floating?"
David said very sarcastically, "She's magic."
"Oh, that would explain a lot about that girl."
David's mouth dropped open and he stared at his brother in disbelief. He said, "Are you really THAT dense?"
"Hey!" was Jake's response. "I could take you little man!"
"Well, I should hope so since you are five years older that me. Jesse is holding Suze so he can take her home."
"Does he need me to drive again?" Jake asked.
"I don't know yet. Paul had the Spirit realm blocked off from me..." I looked at Father Dominic.
"Well, I can unblock it. Any good mediator knows how to do that. You never know when a dangerous ghost will come after you."
Well, that's good. It would be much easier to dematerialize with Susannah then having to drive. "Yes, Padre, please do that."
"Okay, I haven't done this in a while so let me think..." He sat down on his chair and mumbled to himself every once in a while.
I began to pace the room again because I was in a hurry and began to get impatient.
"I got it!" Fr. Dominic yelled out in an excited manner.
"Good! What is it then? Please do it quickly!" I said anxiously.
"Hold your horses, Jesse! I will do it don't worry!" He said to me.
This made me very angry. "I don't HAVE any horses any more if you haven't noticed Father!" I said a bit hotly. I couldn't help it; horses were a big part of my life.
"NO Jesse that's a somewhat modern term meaning wait a few minutes. Okay here it goes." He took a deep breath, closed his eyes, and said, "As a mediator and guide of lost souls I command the Spirit Realm to be open again!" It was not his normal voice, but it seemed deeper and more commanding; a little bit frightening.
He opened him eyes and said, "Go ahead and try."
I thought about being in Susannah's room and I appeared there.
"YES!" I shouted to no one in particular. "It worked it worked I can't believe I worked!" I chanted.
I reappeared in Father Dominic's office and jumped around punching my arms into the air excitedly.
"Nice Jesse!" David said laughing.
I chuckled and grinned at him. I then turned to Father Dominic and said, "Thank you Padre. You know its true what they say that you take things for granted until it's gone. Of course I figured that out 150 years ago when I died..."
"Yes well you should NEVER take anything or anyone for granted Jesse," He looked me straight in the eye and I got a feeling he was talking about Susannah.
I looked away and said, "Oh, well...I guess I should take Susannah now that I can materialize places." I picked her up again because I had set her down when I was checking out the Spirit Realm. I said goodbye and materialized in Susannah's room again.
I set her softly down on her bed and kissed her lightly on her forehead. I whispered, "I'm sorry for everything Querida." I looked down at her and sat down on the side of her bed. "I'm sorry that Paul is always bothering you. I'm sorry that I couldn't have been there sooner for you and that I tried to kill Paul...no I am not sorry about that. Though, I am sorry about the pain you are going through physically and mentally. I know I probably caused some of that pain and for that," I paused and leaned down and kissed her again on the top of her head. I then whispered into her hair, "I can never forgive myself. I truly do love you." I stood up and started walking around her room pausing every once in a while. I ran my hand through my hair and said, "I just wish I could tell you to your face, but I don't know if I can..." I looked over at her and said in a barely audible voice, "I...I am sorry..."
I then disappeared.
~~~~~~Paul~~~~~~
Jesse was strangling me, and I knew I couldn't stay alive much longer this way. I even begged him to let me go of me. I, Paul Slater, begged to a ghost....that is not something you hear me say everyday. Suze may, but not me. The are suppose to beg to ME. Just like Suze should love me not some ghost.
I stopped fighting him saving the last of my energy for breathing, which he wasn't making too easy. "Jesse!" I gasped in a haggard voice. "Jesse please stop! I don't want to die...not like this..." I whispered the last part closing my eyes. They were becoming hard to keep open. I reopened them and saw that Jesse was still there.
He then said in a voice even I have never heard him use, who is the person who normally get him pissed," You. You should have thought of that before!" He had so much hate and fire in his voice.
I thought that it was all over for me. I knew I wasn't ready to die. Great, I'm going to have to mediate myself. How fun does THAT sound?
Then it hit me, well, first Jesse hit me, but then IT hit me. I closed my eyes and thought of the blanket of stars that were not from our world. The cold wet feeling of the fog hitting my face, and the mist drifting around my feet. The sick feeling in the pit of my stomach that only this place can gave me, and the chill the makes your whole body shiver unlike anything in our world. I opened my eyes and was there. I shifted.
I sat down and waited for them to notice that I was in a comma and leave me alone. I was tired so I ended up lying down. While I was staring at the bright glow of the stars I felt my nose. Several people had punched it today and I knew it was the worst broken nose that any doctor would have seen. It felt perfectly fine now.
I didn't hear the footsteps coming but when I looked up a big shadow covered me. It said, "You do not belong in the realm of the dead! You shall leave now."
I stood back up and glared at the gatekeeper. I said in a cold voice, "I am a powerful shifter, and YOU shall leave me alone."
"Shifter?" He asked.
I replied still glaring at him, "Yes, Shifter. Someone who is even more powerful then a mediator."
He looked at me amazed, "More powerful then the great mediators?"
"Did I stutter?" I didn't have time to tell him about the differences between mediators and shifters. I had a plan forming in my head and I wanted to use it.
"Yeah ok well, I got to be going now. I have some important business to tend to back on Earth."
"Shifter business?" He asked me.
I rolled my eyes at this. I mean come on! Why is he so interested in Shifters? "Uh...Yeah kind of," Well, at least I will be using some of my shifting abilities.
"Farewell, oh great Shifter!" I Gatekeeper said in a big booming voice that echoed throughout The Shadow Land.
"Goodbye...Gatekeeper," I said in a bored voice.
I then closed my eyes and pictured Father Dom's office. I opened my eyes and was extremely glad to see that I was alone.
I started to run to my car. I had to hurry up and get to Suze's house. I wanted to get there before she woke up since I knew there was no way I would be able to get in there if she was awake. Right now she probably doesn't trust me at all....if she ever had. If she knows what's good for her, she should trust me. She needs me...and my knowledge about shifting.
I must have been driving quicker then I thought because the next thing I knew, I was pulling into Suze's driveway. I was silently hoping Jesse was not in there with her. I personally only enjoy dancing with death once a day not twice. Besides what I had in mind would be much easier if no one but Suze was present...
TBC
So, what did you think? Please review!!! Oh and sorry for the long delay I was out of town for 2 weeks and I have been working on this since I got home. REVIEW REVIEW REIVEW! (please!!)