Peace Only in Death

My life was dark and I saw no light,

I found pleasure in death,

When I should have brought life,

I scouted and scourged,

And in my great haste,

I thought that life was my greatest waste,

I served a great man; no greater than he,

I saw he was blessed,

My king he would be.

When I took on his path,

I knew death was near,

But I found no despair, no fright, nor fear,

And by he, I was humbled; I promised my sword,

To protect and to serve,

I gave Rome my word.

I still hungered for darkness,

And my battle came,

When I gave my life, in my great king's name.

My own sword was the weapon,

With what my enemy cut me down,

But I took my death for kingdom and crown.

My life was dark and I saw no light,

I found peace only in death,

I was Tristram, King Arthur's knight.

I moved this poem, but here's the past reviews:

Pocky Katze
2005-01-02
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thats good:)

Queen of Gore
2004-12-30
ch 1, signed

YES! YOU SPELLED IT TRISTRAM! Thats his real name, such as in the King Arthur legend by Thomas Malory, thats how he spelled it. Just that it was slowly morphed into Tristran and then into Tristan. And I know what you mean, in the movie it sounds like their saying "Tristram" and not Tristan. In my fan fics I usually write "Tristran" but when Im talking about him I say "Tristan" because otherwise people will start yelling at me shrug.

..Anyways... this is LOVELY! I love it, its a very neat portrayal, on his devotion to Arthur! Great job!

Calliope Foster
2004-12-29
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Wow! I never expected people would like it! Lol. But thank you, thank you, thank you ALL for the wonderful comments.
I used the name Tristram because I thought I kept hearing them call him that, because it's one of the many names he uses so I was confused. But still, it's all good. And I did write a story for Lancelot, I will do my best to write a poem for the little bird, and I WILL come and read your story, my dear.
Again, thank you all!

ElvenStar5
2004-12-28
ch 1, signed

Cool! I liked the poem! Interesting way of saying that his life was dark, but I can see the point. He did seem to have this dark foreboding air around him, except when he was drunk. lol. Or eating apples. then he didn't seem quite so scarry. Love it! Write more! Or one for Lancelot.

ModestySparrow9
2004-12-28
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Oh, that was really good. It's so sad that Tristan died, but you're right when you say it's for a good cause. I liked the poem. Nice wording. Please read my poem 'Wind of the North', and also, since you're a Tristan fan, you could read and review my fanfic, 'The Heart of the Hawk'. Thanks. :)
-Modesty

Speckled Bird
2004-12-28
ch 1, signed

Such a beautiful peom, Tristan is my favorite character in King Arthur. I'm not joking i'm like totally obssesed with him,lol.Just on thing His name is Tristan not Tristam.

anyway great piece of writing, u really painted a beautiful protrait with our words.

Thank you guys so much!