Well I am going to ask bluntly for any ideas or advice. I am very unsure what to do so please help me!
Thank you for your comments. They may hurt my gut, yet these will help me get better so thank you. But so far these are the things i need to work on. More will help me get it right to type away please.
Things to work on:
"Bad spelling, use of script format, out of character, very poor grammer, and a very loose plot. I think I've covered the bad...the good...you're trying. Keep trying take more time with the chapters, learn the proper spelling of the japanese words and please capitalize names!"- Mercaba
Thank you for your comment Bobboky.
I think i will take your offer of help. Thank you---Baretta