Strong not Stupid

Disclaimer: I don't own Inuyasha, or any of the characters in it.

Note: this is all in camera view.
( view of a gym )
You look over to the left and see a man doing bench-press; also known as Inuyasha. He's pressing about 200 pounds. There's a crowd around him cheering. Inuyasha: 197, 198, grunt* 199, 200.
Inuyasha sets the bar down and sits up. Shippo: Wow Inuyasha your strong!
Standing over Shippo is Kikyo. ( I hate Kikyo!) Who's drooling over Inuyasha. Kikyo: Yes, you are strong,and cute too. How about one of these?
Kikyo holds out a box of cigarets. Inuyasha: I thought you said I was strong, not stupid?
Then Inuyasha gets up and walks out of the gym.

Well what did you think? If you don't like it just say so. If you wish give pointers. I plan to write a story soon any way. Please Review!!!