My first fic, R&R constructive criticism is welcome
Chapter1
The alarm clock blared on as a man woke in shock form the loud noise. After successfully waking up his obvious thought was "Why the hell did I choose a job where I had to get up at 4 in the morning." After dragging his ass out of bet and getting dressed he had just enough time to get a cup of coffee before he had to walk to work.
Shuffling through the streets like a zombie, running only on the slight buzz the caffeine in the coffee gave him, he made his way to his first day at his new job. As he entered the military complex he ran into a woman with blond hair.
"Do you have a legitimate reason for being here." The blond woman inquired. Her hand went slightly to her holster, as if she was expecting a threat.
"Ah, yes I am the transfer form the General Gran's unit. I am Captain John Bradley." Replied the man as he showed the woman his tags and assorted paperwork.
"Oh the specialist, it's about time you showed up." The woman returned the paperwork to Bradley, "Follow me to the Colonel's office." The solider made her was through the complex to an office with the name Colonel Mustang embedded on the door.
"Thanks, I didn't catch your name" inquired Bradley.
"Lieutenant Riza Hawkeye" answered Riza, turning back and making here way to her desk.
Bradley knocked on the door and entered the office and saluted the Colonel. "Hello sir, Captain Bradley reporting sir." Bradley repeated the standard redderic of a lower ranking officer to a higher one.
"At ease Captain, glad to have you on board", another standard response. Mustang began flipping through his files on his new soldier, "Your record is excellent, great in hand to hand, specialty with bladed weapons, besides Hawkeye you're probably the best solider I have."
"Well I do aim to please sir." Said Bradley, seeing through the bullshit compliment, he had seen and did way to much to even give a crap about what his superiors thought about his record. "I hope we can have a good time working together."
So what do you think so far, what should I do better in the future, remember if you see a problem in the storytelling/writing ect. Please tell me about it.