Christine
I awoke some time around midnight. I'd been there almost twenty-four hours. I thought I'd go to Erik and try again, he had to tell me about him self. was he afraid to? of course. I put on my coat and left the room. I was deep in though and didn't notice anything around me and walked right into him. It appeared to me that Erik wasn't looking either. We both jumped, I was still half asleep, but that shocked me enough to awaken me completely.
"Oh...Christine...dear..."
"Erik..."
I thought he was nervous, so was I. I told him I was just coming to his room.
"I was just coming to yours."
"Why?"
"Because I want to show you something. come"
He guided me out of his small abode and into the gondola on the lake. It was freezing and as we crossed the small area were moonlight shined down I relised I could see my breath. He kept looking back at me. stupid over protective- but I was jerked from my thoughts when the boat touched land and he pulled me out. were are we? I hadn't seen this place before and, as I looked around, he touched a lever and a door creaked open.
I think I've lost everyone, so tell me, what's wrong with my story? what can I fix? please tell me why you've stopped reading! (none of this is directed at Savy, she still reviews.)
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