Okay, so here is the premise. I have been reading KND fics for a while, and I eventually tried writing some. I have seen every couple imaginable. ¾, 1/5, 2/5, and so on. While I read all of these there is one couple that I have never seen, 2/4. So I have now taken it upon myself to write one. Just a warning, I am not gay and I have never written a story with a boy/boy couple. So please, any constructive criticism will greatly help. I am basically going on what I have read from other fics so please bear with me while I find my feet. So, on to the review responses.
Riobella- thank you for the review, and I appreciate the reviews that you have given me on my other fics as well. I am really hoping that it turns out great as well. If you have any suggestions let me know because I am pretty much swinging in the dark here. I am hoping that I can have a decent plot that reflects the relationship that Hoagie will eventually have with Wally by the time I am through, but I still unsure as to how close I want them to actually be. Since I am a big fan of writing an outline of the story first, not knowing where how I am ending the story is becoming a problem for me.
Aseret Kitsune- Thank you. I do plan to continue, but between work, school, and my humble social life, it is hard. Plus, I have several other fics that I am working on right now that the muses seem to want me to finish first. I hope you enjoy his chapter and any suggestions you have would be helpful.
Oh, and by the way, I don't own these characters. But if the owners are reading this and are looking to give them away, my birthday is in July… hint hint. By the way, my grammar is not actually this bad. It's just that I wanted it to sound like it would if Numbuh 4 was telling the story. Ok, so on with the show.
Operation F.O.U.N.D.
Friend
Often
Understands
New
Developments
By OmegaRed9
The noight passed on without any event. The noises died down at about 10 pm and I tried to check and see how Hoagie was doin. I guess I shouldn't be surprised that he managed to put up a new door in a matter of hours. I was about to rip this one off of the wall too, but thought that would be a bad idea. I could smell some odd odors comin from his room though, and my curiosity was beginning to get to me. It smelled like new car and burnt rubber. Definitely an odd combination. I would never buy that candle from one of those girly stores in the mall.
I suddenly remembered his reaction earlier when I barged in his room and thought that he might be sleeping. I decided that I was going to bother him later. So, I started down the hall to my room and was happy as the smell was disappearing the farther I got from his room. I was passing by a window and felt a breeze caress my golden hair; the night air felt good on moi face. I suddenly felt the weight of the day on my shoulders and went straight to bed without my usual evening workout. I guess the stress of worrying about Hoagie got to me and made a little sleepier than I had expected.
When I jumped on the mat in my room to sleep I had a strange feeling that I was all alone. I knew that I was alone, but it felt like I just realized it or something. Aw crud… that sounds stupid. Ok, you know how you just know something in your head, and you don't even think twice about it. But then you feel it in your body or your heart or something and it just kinda comes to life. That is what I felt like right then. Kinda empty and alone. It scared me. I had never felt like that before. It was like my chest was hollow or something. Can you believe that me, the super tough guy, actually had to feel his chest for his heart beat just to make sure it was still there? I know it sounds dumb, but I felt like my heart was missing.
I knew I was tired, but at that point my need for feeling whole sorta took over and I completely forgot about sleep. I just laid there and tried to figure out what is going on. It kinda remoinds me of when people talk about love in those girly movies that Kuki takes me to. They can't explain it, but it's just there and it consumes them. Well that is how I felt. And the worst part about it was that I was ssssoooooo tired. I couldn't fall asleep like that though. I couldn' tell moi friends either; they would think that oi was a nut job. I can see em now, Nigel would just stare and call me dillillusional telling me to go back to bed, Abby would make some stupid joke about eating too many tacos, Kuki would probably giggle and say that I was in love, and Hoagie… Hoagie would… (sigh). I hope that he is ok.
I laid awake for hours just trying to fall asleep, but my mind raced trying to figyuh out what was wrong with me. I didn't look at any clock though; that is a sure fire way to never fall asleep. You know the saying a watched pot never boils, roight? Well I figure that applies to sleep too. So I don't know what time I actually fell asleep, but it was pretty late. It really wasn't a good night's sleep either. I had bad dreams and woke up in the middle of the noight. When it was finally time to wake up in the morning I was still dead tired.
I looked in the mirror and noticed how awful I looked. My hair was wild, like I had never heard of a thing called a brush, and my eyes had thick bags under 'em. I was totally ready for a shower. So I immediately made a run for the shower. I shouldn't say run; it was more like a slow, turtle-like crawl. When I finally made it to my bathroom I was in agony to find that there was no hot water. Those girls always use it all up. Oh well, if there is one thing that'll wake yo ass up it is a freezing cold shower. I knew that the water was cold as ice and all, but I still enjoyed the shower. It was good. Not just a shower for the body, but also one for the soul. Jeeze, I was just actin' all girly then, wasn't I. The water running down my body seemed to pour the stress off of my body from the night before. That was good because I felt like I was gonna break.
Oh well, after the shower I am a little less weird.
After getting dried up and dressed I manage to step in some goo on the floor. I look down to see that a can of coke that I had left in my room spilled over onto my gummi worms and was in the process of disintegrating them. The thick black liquid was slowly working its way through my favrit candy treat. I was pretty pissed off that I couldn't have them all to my self, plus I now have crud all over the bottom of my shoes. Oh well, nothing I can do about it now.
I walk out into the hall and listen for sounds of construction. I don't hear a thing and start to smile. It's a good thing that Hoagie stopped working, otherwise I would have made him stop so he could get better. Maybe now he'll be relaxed enough to pose a challenge at the new video game we got. I start to head down for breakfast and when I got there I saw that the only one not present was Hoagie. I talked it over with everybody and they all said that we had better not worry about it and leave 'im alone. They all thought he was still asleep since he was working so hard yesterday.
I ran what they had to say through my head and agreed with them. "Well, with all of that effort that he put into that thing, I bet it's gonna be the best invention ever. I just hope it works. Aww, who am I kiddin' we all know that Numbuh 2 wouldn't stop workin on it unless he ran a successful test run."
Little did I know that I would later be cursing my self for saying that.
Author's Note: So what do you think. I want to hear form you guys. I know it isn't much in the way of adding to the story, but it is only a chapter that I put in for foreshadowing, metaphors, and crud like that. Uh oh, I'm already starting to talk like Numbuh 4. I had better change POVs before it becomes permanent. Well, I can't wait to see you guys on the review boards.