Thanks for reviewing everyone! (For chapters one and two.) All this helps a lot THANKS!
Lala-ness-I probably won't stick entirely to the Romeo and Juliet story line.
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Chapter 3: Anxious
That night Zuko couldn't sleep. He was too anxious about the day to come. He lay awake in his bed thinking. "Oh how I can not wait for daylight to appear, so soon I may see my love and how her radiance sparkles in the light of the setting sun. How the wind picks up her ebony hair and how her eyes sparkle like that of the ocean…oh night, why must you taunt me so? I have done nothing wrong. Please hurry and be gone so I may see my love," he whispered to himself in the dark of his room. (He can be a real romantic if he feels like it. Although it's never happened until now.) He turned on his side and tried to sleep, but it was no good, he couldn't sleep at all. "Grrrr, FUCK! THIS IS HOPELESS I CAN'T SLEEP!" he yelled. He got out of bed, ripped open his door and went to the kitchen to see if he could "eat himself to sleep" like his Uncle always does.
When he got to the kitchen he found his Uncle asleep on the counter. What d'you know, big surprise. He thought. He looked into the large freezer box they had stored in the floor of the kitchen to see what was left of that night's dinner. He found some rice and some squid and put it all in a bowl with some soy sauce. After he did all that, he sat down on the counter next to his Uncle and started to eat. After a few minutes of eating in silence, Zuko decided that he couldn't take it anymore and woke up his Uncle. "Uncle," he said pushing him back and forth. "Uncle, wake up!" he yelled. "Huh? What? Where am I?" the old man asked. Zuko rolled his eyes. Where the hell do you think you are? He thought. "Zuko, is that you?" his Uncle asked. He yawned. "What are you doing up so late?" Zuko looked away. "I couldn't sleep, so I decided to come here." He said and continued eating his food. His Uncle looked at him in disbelief. "I sense there's something bothering you Prince Zuko, tell me what is it?" Zuko sighed. "You wouldn't understand." He said. His Uncle smirked. "Oh come now Prince Zuko. You think I was never a teenager?" he said as he laughed. Zuko finished eating and put his bowl in the sink. He sighed and looked at his Uncle. "Can you keep a secret?" he asked his eyes showing a desperate plea. Oh boy, this is serious, thought his Uncle, but nonetheless, he agreed. "Of course Prince Zuko."
Zuko told him everything that happened to him yesterday and when he was done, he looked at his Uncle to see what he would say. His Uncle was stroking his beard, deep in thought. "Well, first thing's first, who do you want me to keep this a secret from?" he asked Zuko, who, by now was sitting beside him. "Everyone-including my Father." He said. His Uncle looked at him. "Including your Father? Zuko, I have NEVER kept anything from my brother and if he finds out that I'm keeping YOUR secret, well, he'll have us both." He said. "Please Uncle! You promised and I can't let anybody find out about Ayaka, if they do, I don't know, she might be killed-I MIGHT BE KILLED! Please, Uncle, please just keep this secret from everyone and I'll be forever grateful please?" begged Zuko, grabbing onto his Uncle's arm and looking at him desperately. "Did you say 'Ayaka'? THE Ayaka? PRINCESS of the Shimon Fire Island, DAUGHTER of King Kokuyo, and next in line to inherit the throne AFTER her brother Prince RYU?" asked his Uncle in disbelief. "The very same." said Zuko calmly. He let go of his Uncle's arm.
His Uncle sighed. "Very well, I will keep this secret from the world and your Father." He said. Zuko smiled. "Really? You will?" He asked. His Uncle stood up and so did he. "Yes. Prince Zuko. I will keep this secret to my grave." He said. Zuko's smile broadened. "Oh THANK YOU UNCLE!" He said, bowing. He started running to his room. "Prince Zuko?" his Uncle called. He stopped and turned. "Yes Uncle?" he asked. "Promise me one thing," he said. "What's that?" asked Zuko. His Uncle smiled. "Promise me…that you will go and see her tomorrow." Zuko smiled. "I will Uncle. You can count on it." He said. For the rest of the night Zuko slept soundly and WAITED for daylight to come this time.
What do you think? Too short? I think it was too, but I couldn't think of anything else. Please review. I look forward to hearing from you guys! -