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A: I should just keep writing the way I'm doing and assume you people are smart enough to mentally fix the errors.
B: Edit all my chapters and check the stories before putting it on the website.
Chapter 9: The Trail
While are hero's fell through that unknown hole they realized they weren't falling any more just slowly drifting downward. Goofy managed to lie on his back as if on an invisible hammock while Sora and Donald managed to drift feet first. When they finally managed to land on the ground (Goofy landing with a thud) a white rabbit with a giant watch ran by "oh my fur and whiskers, I'm late, I'm late, I'm late" "late for what" said Goofy "I'm here I should be there, I'm late, I'm late, I'm late, oh the Queen she'll have my head for sure" said the rabbit ignoring Goofy "I wonder what he's late for" said Goofy unaffected by the rabbits rudeness "why don't we go and find out" said Sora "No freaking way" yelled Donald "Why not" said Sora "first rule of intergalactic travel Do Not Meddle In The Affairs Of Other Worlds" said Donald "how come" said Sora "because the existence of other worlds is supposed to be secret" yelled Donald "okay, we'll doesn't look like we have much of a chose that's the only way to go" said Sora pointing to were the rabbit went.
After are hero's went down the hall they found themselves in a very small room and scurrying across the floor was the white rabbit only this time he was the size of a mouse! After going through a very small door Sora bent down to see "how did he get so small?" said Sora asking nobody in particular "no you're simply too big" said the tiny doorknob, they were so surprised by this that Donald's hat literally jumped, "must you be so loud you woke me up" said the Doorknob "good morning" said Goofy politely "good night, I need a bit more sleep" said the Doorknob yawning "wait, what do we have to do to grow small?" said Sora "why don't you try the bottle over there" said the Doorknob using its nose to point, and at that moment a table with two bottles popped out of nowhere. Sora and the gang went over to drink the bottle and next thing they know they were tiny.
Sora and the gang went over to the door only to find it asleep "well so much for going through the door" said Sora shrugging "Sora look" said Goofy from the distance. Sora turned around to find Goofy pointing at a hole in the wall like the ones mice often live in. "I think it's a tunnel" said Sora "well then why don't we go in" said Goofy in his usual tone "wait a minute Goofy we don't know where it leads, for all we know that could lead us right into a Heartless trap, right Sora" said Donald, but then Donald realized that Sora was already half way through the tunnel, Donald and Goofy looked at each other "well kings orders we got to follow him" said Goofy following Sora, Donald shrugged in annoyance "that kids going to be the death of me" before joining the rest of the group.
When they got to the other side they saw some kind of gathering, there was a fat Queen on a large pedestal, a blond girl with a blue dress on a smaller pedestal in front of the Queen, a bunch of card soldiers standing guard and the white rabbit blowing a horn "court is now in session" said the white rabbit panting "I'm on trail but why" said the little girl innocently but the rabbit ignored her and continued "her majesty the Queen of hearts presiding" "this girl is the culprit there's no doubt about it and the reason is Because I Say So That's Why" said the Queen "that is so unfair" said the girl "well have you anything to say in your defense" said the Queen mockingly (I don't know how to describe it) "of course I've done absolutely nothing wrong" said the girl with her fists on her hips "you may be Queen but I'm afraid that doesn't give you the right to be so mean" said the girl finished "Silence You Dare Defy Me" said the Queen enraged she banged her fists on the pedestal shacking the entire court. Meanwhile are heroes were watching this unfair trail, 'hey guys we got to help her" said Sora, Sora had a strong sense of justice and felt as the Key Bearer he must help people but Donald shook his head and said "we cant" "we're outsiders so that would be muddling" said Goofy "Meddling" Donald corrected "right and that's against the rules" Goofy finished, Sora cocked his head in disappointment there got to be something I can do to help. Back at the court "the court finds the defendant Alice Guilty as Charged, for the crimes of assault and attentive theft of my heart" said the Queen, Sora gasped at hearing this, the Queen was attacked by a Heartless and is blaming the girl Alice, "Off with Her Head" the Queen roared and with that the card Soldiers started ganging up on Alice while Alice pleaded. Unable to hold the injustice in any longer Sora rushed in, "who are you, How Dare you inter fear with my court" yelled the Queen "excuse me but we know how the real culprit is" said Sora bravely "ya it was the Heart" said Goofy covering his mouth before saying Heartless "anyway she not the one your looking for" said Sora "that's nonsense have you any proof" said the Queen, with that Alice was thrown into some kind of birdcage "I here by find the court adjured until this young man finds evidence, bring as much or as little evidence as you can with 2 hours, fail and it off with your heads, until then I will be playing croquet" then the are heroes left to the forest to find evidence what have you gotten us into Sora thought Donald.
Disclaimer: Here's a sneak preview of anther story I'm working on. Revenge of the Loids: Roll joins an all female NetNavi tournament which turns out to be a trap set up by the Dark Loids! ShadeMan is using Roll as bait to lure MegaMan into an unfair battle against all the Dark Loids! Will they succeed in destroying the Blue Bomber or will true love conjure all! Coming soon to a computer near you.