I was just looking at the chapters from my room in the dorm and I realized
that the text in chapter four was somehow f*cked up by the website turning
it into and HTML format. I'll try and fix this when I get a chance.
Also, as someone pointed out, I have used two different names for the artifact that sent Hiei and Kuwabara to the dark world. So, for future reference, it is going to be called the "Light Jump Stone". Also, the elder's name is officially "Tressei". I'm sorry for any confusion on these two topics. As for why these mistakes were made. well, I wrote the first five chapters while I was still living at home. And then I wrote the sixth one while I was living on campus. The problem was that I couldn't get to FF.net from the campus computers (to check the previous chaps), so I was working from what I could remember.
But anyway, now I can access ff.net from the campus network, so that's not a problem, either.
The worst thing that happened to me, was the fact that this chapter was delayed by a death in the family, and then the disk that had the chapter one vanished (along with most of my other disks that had my new chapters in them). So this is a re-write that you're looking at.
Sorry for the wait,
-Bojack
Chapter Seven: Bad News
Bohen looked down at Rain as he lay there, rapped up in a blanket in bed. The older man could see that he was trembling slightly as he slept.
"He's getting worse, isn't he?" Bohen asked to someone behind him.
The white-haired man looked at him and frowned. "Yes, I'm afraid so." He replied. "and I'm not sure how much longer he will live." He added sadly.
Bohen turned around and looked him in the eyes. "It's not fair, why must these things happen.?" He began. "Especially to someone so fragile as him." He added as he turned around for a moment and brushed a strand of pail hair off of his face.
"I know how you feel, Bohen." The other man replied. "As a doctor, it's very hard to only be able to watch someone slowly die while you can do nothing about it." He added.
"Oh Hawkins, if only Garland were here right now." Bohen began, but then stopped.
The other man placed his hand on his shoulder and looked him in the eyes. "I miss him as well." He replied and then turned away and left the room.
***
Hiei was leaning against the wall when he saw Bohen stepped out and start to move past him.
"Wait." Hiei spoke.
Bohen stopped and turned to face him, noting that Kuwabara was with him, but lacked the expression on his face that Hiei had.. "What?" He asked dryly.
Hiei narrowed his eyes slightly and opened his mouth. "I think it's time you told me the truth about the boy." He began.
Bohen remained silent.
"Because back when he used that spell, I felt a life force much stronger then before, but it was gone just as fast as it came." He began. He walked over to Bohen and looked him straight in the eyes. "And I think you know why that is." He added.
"You're very observant." Bohen replied. "Follow me, I'll explain." He added and he motioned for both of them to go with him.
***
The three of them were now sitting inside Bohen's home.
"Rain is." Bohen began to explain. "Rain is. an unusual person, he is one of a pair of twins." He added. "As you know, most twins are born when the embryo splits in two, but something went wrong. "Bohen continued, but stopped for a moment to look at the two young men. "Instead of two individual children being born. there were two children that seemed to share a single life force." He explained.
"That would explain why he seems so weak." Hiei replied. "Having only part of a life force would be a very hard way of living." He added.
Bohen nodded. "And if that wasn't hard enough, Rain was always the weaker of the two." He replied. "Garland was strong enough to not need Rain to survive, but Rain is not strong enough to make it without his brother.
"So, in other words, they're both only completely alive when they're together?" Kuwabara reasoned.
"Yes," The older man replied. "That is exactly it.
Hiei was taken back slightly by his comrade's sudden display of understanding, but shook it off. "And without Garland with him, he will eventually die." Bohen concluded darkly.
"And do you believe that Garland is dead?" Hiei asked him.
Bohen looked at him and thought for a moment before replying. "Garland has been gone for several days now. he was taken to the Valley of the Shadow of Death." He explained.
"What exactly is this place?" Hiei asked him.
"I don't know where it is or much about it,' Bohen began. "All I know. is that it is a place that you never come back from." He finished.
"Then I have only one more question. for the moment." Hiei began.
"What is it?" Bohen asked.
"What do you know about the being that took all of the bodies away?" He asked.
Bohen shook his head and thought for a moment. "Very little," He replied. "Except that it was one of the creatures that was said to be the heralds of Darkon." He added. "There are supposed to be four of them." He finished.
The older man looked down at his weathered hands and then back up at Hiei and Kuwabara. "They came first, and started the fall of humanity, and Darkon finished it." He added bitterly.
Hiei thought for a moment and then spoke up. "The Four Horsemen of the Apocalypse." He remarked. "And I thought that this Darknon didn't have sense of humor.
***
Parth was sent into the room with a kick to him back.
He stumbled forward and landed on his knees, he looked up to see a strange- looking figure looking down at him. He had long black hair and pale skin with dark yellow eyes and an angular face. He was rapped up in a green cloak.
Another figure appeared behind Parth. He was tall and darkly tanned and broad-shouldered. He had a long mane of fiery-red hair and green eyes. He also had very long elf-like ears and a pair of long horns that stuck out the sides of his bushy hair. Spikes also stuck out of shoulders, elbows, and the side of his calves. The dim light of the room reflected off of his breastplate.
There were also three other figures in the room as well. Two of them were concealed in brown cloaks and Asian-style straw hats. The other sat at a table and wore a blue, hooded cloak, the figure appeared to be shuffling a set of cards.
The dark-haired man stepped forward. "What is the meaning of this?" He asked calmly.
The red-haired man grabbed hold of Parth roughly by his shoulder blades and began squeezing them. "Tell him what happened." He instructed him. "T-two men attack my men yesterday." He began.
"And?" The red-head inserted as he squeezed tighter.
"And when I went to capture them in one of the serf towns, they. they overpowered us." He admitted.
"I found him like this." The red-haired one remarked.
"Then you were defeated by humans?" The dark-haired man asked.
"But, sir, they were much stronger then regular hu-" Parth tried to reply, but was silence by a glare from the figure looking down at him.
"I'm not interested in your excuses." He began. "The fact that you lost, can only mean that you are incompetent!" He spat.
He then walked up to Parth and looked him straight in the eyes as the other man forced him to look up. "And the only thing you are good for now, is the information that will give me." He added.
The dark-haired man and the red-hair exchanged a quick glance between one another and then looked down at Parth.
The demon suddenly felt the man behind him reach down to restrain him. The other, standing in front of him, reached down and took hold of him by the head.
"Make sure he doesn't move, Thorn." The dark-hair one remarked.
"Of course." He replied.
Parth gasped as the pale figure held onto his head with his hands and looked him in the eyes. "No, please, not thaAHHH!!!" He screamed as a horrible burning sensation coursed through his body and into his mind. It was like his skull was on fire.
Thorn held the struggling demon down as thoughts were invaded and torn away.
Finally, the redhead released the limp body and let it fall to the ground in a disheveled heap. The eyes had rolled back up into the head and smoke and blood were coming out of his mouth and nose.
Thorn gave the corpse a rough kick and then looked up at his friend and smiled. "He's dead alright." He commented.
"And I have all the information I need." He replied with a smile.
"You always did have a flare for the dramatics, eh Marth?" remarked the cloaked being as he laid his cards out in two rows, face down.
The demon called Marth smiled. "It works, doesn't it?"
He then looked upward and closed his eyes. "One of them is short, with black and white hair and carries a sword with him. The other is tall, with orange hair." He spoke. "And they're both in Linbrook Township." He added. "Yes, of course, I'll be one it right away, Lord Darkon." He added as he spoke to an unheard voice.
~End of Chapter 7~
So, now it seems that we have finally met a few of the bad guys of this story. And, I just want you guys to know that this is where things are gonna really start picking up! (But I can't tell you exactly how, sorry.)
I'd also like to thank Draith, Zinic, and Kuzima Kuwabara (just be patient, you get your answer soon enough ~_^) and everyone else.
So, please drop me a line and let me know what you think, reviews are always appreciated.
-Bojack
Also, as someone pointed out, I have used two different names for the artifact that sent Hiei and Kuwabara to the dark world. So, for future reference, it is going to be called the "Light Jump Stone". Also, the elder's name is officially "Tressei". I'm sorry for any confusion on these two topics. As for why these mistakes were made. well, I wrote the first five chapters while I was still living at home. And then I wrote the sixth one while I was living on campus. The problem was that I couldn't get to FF.net from the campus computers (to check the previous chaps), so I was working from what I could remember.
But anyway, now I can access ff.net from the campus network, so that's not a problem, either.
The worst thing that happened to me, was the fact that this chapter was delayed by a death in the family, and then the disk that had the chapter one vanished (along with most of my other disks that had my new chapters in them). So this is a re-write that you're looking at.
Sorry for the wait,
-Bojack
Chapter Seven: Bad News
Bohen looked down at Rain as he lay there, rapped up in a blanket in bed. The older man could see that he was trembling slightly as he slept.
"He's getting worse, isn't he?" Bohen asked to someone behind him.
The white-haired man looked at him and frowned. "Yes, I'm afraid so." He replied. "and I'm not sure how much longer he will live." He added sadly.
Bohen turned around and looked him in the eyes. "It's not fair, why must these things happen.?" He began. "Especially to someone so fragile as him." He added as he turned around for a moment and brushed a strand of pail hair off of his face.
"I know how you feel, Bohen." The other man replied. "As a doctor, it's very hard to only be able to watch someone slowly die while you can do nothing about it." He added.
"Oh Hawkins, if only Garland were here right now." Bohen began, but then stopped.
The other man placed his hand on his shoulder and looked him in the eyes. "I miss him as well." He replied and then turned away and left the room.
***
Hiei was leaning against the wall when he saw Bohen stepped out and start to move past him.
"Wait." Hiei spoke.
Bohen stopped and turned to face him, noting that Kuwabara was with him, but lacked the expression on his face that Hiei had.. "What?" He asked dryly.
Hiei narrowed his eyes slightly and opened his mouth. "I think it's time you told me the truth about the boy." He began.
Bohen remained silent.
"Because back when he used that spell, I felt a life force much stronger then before, but it was gone just as fast as it came." He began. He walked over to Bohen and looked him straight in the eyes. "And I think you know why that is." He added.
"You're very observant." Bohen replied. "Follow me, I'll explain." He added and he motioned for both of them to go with him.
***
The three of them were now sitting inside Bohen's home.
"Rain is." Bohen began to explain. "Rain is. an unusual person, he is one of a pair of twins." He added. "As you know, most twins are born when the embryo splits in two, but something went wrong. "Bohen continued, but stopped for a moment to look at the two young men. "Instead of two individual children being born. there were two children that seemed to share a single life force." He explained.
"That would explain why he seems so weak." Hiei replied. "Having only part of a life force would be a very hard way of living." He added.
Bohen nodded. "And if that wasn't hard enough, Rain was always the weaker of the two." He replied. "Garland was strong enough to not need Rain to survive, but Rain is not strong enough to make it without his brother.
"So, in other words, they're both only completely alive when they're together?" Kuwabara reasoned.
"Yes," The older man replied. "That is exactly it.
Hiei was taken back slightly by his comrade's sudden display of understanding, but shook it off. "And without Garland with him, he will eventually die." Bohen concluded darkly.
"And do you believe that Garland is dead?" Hiei asked him.
Bohen looked at him and thought for a moment before replying. "Garland has been gone for several days now. he was taken to the Valley of the Shadow of Death." He explained.
"What exactly is this place?" Hiei asked him.
"I don't know where it is or much about it,' Bohen began. "All I know. is that it is a place that you never come back from." He finished.
"Then I have only one more question. for the moment." Hiei began.
"What is it?" Bohen asked.
"What do you know about the being that took all of the bodies away?" He asked.
Bohen shook his head and thought for a moment. "Very little," He replied. "Except that it was one of the creatures that was said to be the heralds of Darkon." He added. "There are supposed to be four of them." He finished.
The older man looked down at his weathered hands and then back up at Hiei and Kuwabara. "They came first, and started the fall of humanity, and Darkon finished it." He added bitterly.
Hiei thought for a moment and then spoke up. "The Four Horsemen of the Apocalypse." He remarked. "And I thought that this Darknon didn't have sense of humor.
***
Parth was sent into the room with a kick to him back.
He stumbled forward and landed on his knees, he looked up to see a strange- looking figure looking down at him. He had long black hair and pale skin with dark yellow eyes and an angular face. He was rapped up in a green cloak.
Another figure appeared behind Parth. He was tall and darkly tanned and broad-shouldered. He had a long mane of fiery-red hair and green eyes. He also had very long elf-like ears and a pair of long horns that stuck out the sides of his bushy hair. Spikes also stuck out of shoulders, elbows, and the side of his calves. The dim light of the room reflected off of his breastplate.
There were also three other figures in the room as well. Two of them were concealed in brown cloaks and Asian-style straw hats. The other sat at a table and wore a blue, hooded cloak, the figure appeared to be shuffling a set of cards.
The dark-haired man stepped forward. "What is the meaning of this?" He asked calmly.
The red-haired man grabbed hold of Parth roughly by his shoulder blades and began squeezing them. "Tell him what happened." He instructed him. "T-two men attack my men yesterday." He began.
"And?" The red-head inserted as he squeezed tighter.
"And when I went to capture them in one of the serf towns, they. they overpowered us." He admitted.
"I found him like this." The red-haired one remarked.
"Then you were defeated by humans?" The dark-haired man asked.
"But, sir, they were much stronger then regular hu-" Parth tried to reply, but was silence by a glare from the figure looking down at him.
"I'm not interested in your excuses." He began. "The fact that you lost, can only mean that you are incompetent!" He spat.
He then walked up to Parth and looked him straight in the eyes as the other man forced him to look up. "And the only thing you are good for now, is the information that will give me." He added.
The dark-haired man and the red-hair exchanged a quick glance between one another and then looked down at Parth.
The demon suddenly felt the man behind him reach down to restrain him. The other, standing in front of him, reached down and took hold of him by the head.
"Make sure he doesn't move, Thorn." The dark-hair one remarked.
"Of course." He replied.
Parth gasped as the pale figure held onto his head with his hands and looked him in the eyes. "No, please, not thaAHHH!!!" He screamed as a horrible burning sensation coursed through his body and into his mind. It was like his skull was on fire.
Thorn held the struggling demon down as thoughts were invaded and torn away.
Finally, the redhead released the limp body and let it fall to the ground in a disheveled heap. The eyes had rolled back up into the head and smoke and blood were coming out of his mouth and nose.
Thorn gave the corpse a rough kick and then looked up at his friend and smiled. "He's dead alright." He commented.
"And I have all the information I need." He replied with a smile.
"You always did have a flare for the dramatics, eh Marth?" remarked the cloaked being as he laid his cards out in two rows, face down.
The demon called Marth smiled. "It works, doesn't it?"
He then looked upward and closed his eyes. "One of them is short, with black and white hair and carries a sword with him. The other is tall, with orange hair." He spoke. "And they're both in Linbrook Township." He added. "Yes, of course, I'll be one it right away, Lord Darkon." He added as he spoke to an unheard voice.
~End of Chapter 7~
So, now it seems that we have finally met a few of the bad guys of this story. And, I just want you guys to know that this is where things are gonna really start picking up! (But I can't tell you exactly how, sorry.)
I'd also like to thank Draith, Zinic, and Kuzima Kuwabara (just be patient, you get your answer soon enough ~_^) and everyone else.
So, please drop me a line and let me know what you think, reviews are always appreciated.
-Bojack