Disclaimer: No, sky high is not mine.
Pain and loss is captured in a story about a person dealing with her changes from a girl to a woman. Throw in a mysterious power, and a little romance, and see what happens. Please tell me if my character is original enough.
The cold, freezing rain spattered onto the hair of a crying girl. She sat there curled up, trying to find a wormthness that had long passed. Her soft, breathless cries could barley be heard as the rain around her speed and slowed in what seemed like an endless dance. Crystal blue eyes opened when ever a sound was made, but soon closed trying to forget the one reason why she was out there. It was a word that said by anyone else would just be that, a meaningless word. Only to her it meant the world, because that word was the one that took all the things she had ever loved away. As the rain grew lighter, the girl tried to stand, but fell when her legs couldn't support her weight. With her hands laid onto the muddy ground, she screamed the one word that built an exploding fire in her. She screamed the word Pain.
Tell me if this has enough description in it!