To fellow reviewers, I have come to the decision, to revise, and rewrite my story Inescapable Grasp of Eva.
Reasons are as follows:
I introduced the characters too quickly.
I rushed through the story, therefore not giving Jon, or Natasha a chance to reveal who they are. Sam is because I don't plan to make him that important right away.
The relationship, now that I think about it between Shinji and Rei was extremely farfetched, and it left little room to grow.
Rei herself showed no real signs of emotional growth and that really messed up her character.
The story didn't really take off till Chapter 3, because I had only intended this story to be a side project, something to do for fun, instead of becoming the hit that it is now.
That's just a few of my reasons; if you want more, please ask me. Expect it next week. I plan to delete the current story, and start from scratch, so therefore, add me to your list of people you keep track of, so that you can get it fresh, hot off the press when I submit it online. So be on the look out for the 1st of a four part story, Inescapable Grasp of Eva, Gathering of the Children. Just to you guys know, the other three are, Pain of Eva, Forever in the Grasp, and Wrath of the Evangelion. The names are not certain; I may or may not alter them, depending on if I think it suits the theme behind each segment.
Just to give a little background on the Gathering of the Children, it will mostly focus on the children, as they grow a bit. Generally I will reintroduce Natasha Kanatnikov, Jon Dang, Samuel Jackson and Jane Tao, in that order, and allow all but Sam a chance to grow. Also, I will take Shinji's and Rei's relationship a bit more seriously, and do some actually development, and to those who are Asuka fan's, she will attempt to foil their relationship. If you have ideas on how, please PM me your ideas. Also, the first three Hellspawns will still be introduced. Therefore, Cerberus, Spawn, and the third one I haven't introduced yet, Destrost, will still make their appearances. So basically sums it up.
Summary:
It has been well over a year since 3rd Impact, Shinji and Rei are 16, while Asuka and Toji are 16. The three 'primary' children live together with their guardian, Misato Katsuragi. However, like all good things, this peace and distance from the Evangelions wasn't meant to last. SEELE has somehow returned, and all 4 old men want vengeance, and do it by means necessary. The four of them, along with 4 new pilots, will pilot the Evangelions, as they fight against SEELE, who will stop at nothing, to destroy Tokyo-3.
That's generally the summary; I will probably alter it a bit when I dish out the prologue. Well anyways, that's all from me, I will see you guys sometime next week.