Rock'N'Roll Love- Chapter 2
Reviews-
exrxr-I like your plot (REALLY like) but your dialogues (and some of your writing too) are confusing. it was hard trying to figure out who said what to whom and why. may i suggest to you a beta?
this first chapter really needs to be re-read, edited and changed again. but don't feel down about my review! i'd hate myself if i discouraged you from continuing this cause i really want to see this continue! i'm just saying finding someone to beta your work would be better.
-I have been looking one but I can't find anyone to do it! I hope I did a bit better this time, I was being more in tune wiht it instead of just jotting whatever came to my mind is what happened in the last chapter.-
Roses In Bloom- Well, I must say, this is a very interesting idea...one that I'm loving! I can already tell from the first chapter that the rest of the story will be awesome. The one thing I would suggest is that you describe the people and what they are wearing (if you must) in a bit of a smoother way. Some of it is a bit cut and dry.
I don't want to discourage you at all, all of us run into tough spots at times, just suggest a way to make the fic run smoother. Though I must say, you've done a wonderful job on it already!
Keep up the good work!
-Thank you for telling me that! I hope(once again) That I did a better job on that. This is what constructive criticism is for! Thank you once again and al that jazz. -
Hiei Is Mine-awesome update soon -
-Well that is a rather simplistic response. NOT SAY THAT IS A BAD THING! Its just that I get two really long responses then I get this. He he.-
HikariNekoYami-very nice...even though I haven't read it yet...BUT THAT NOT THE POINT! I know it will be good...yea...and its going on my fav list! favs
-HIKARI YOU ARE ONE OF THE MOST ANNOYING PEOPLE IN THE UNIVERSE! Oh and its okay people shes my friend and yes she is a idiot. I CANT BELIEVE YOU DIDN'T EVEN READ IT!-
Rry-:goins in on the throwing-ness of the sharp progecttiealies: WOW :looks at what she just wrote: I REALLY can't spell some times :gets a raised eyebrow from neko-leaf: OK OK! I REALLY CAN'T SPELL A LOT OF THE TIME! ( but I do love this story...(sofar) but WRITE MORE! I WUN MORER! (that :points at random asortment of words that are 'I WUN MORER': that was on persose :sighs: just don't put me in a spelling bee...please P-L-E-A-S-E please as in; PLEASE WRITE MORE!
-Okay okay I get the point! No I really do, and I WROTE MORE! -Points down at story!--
Karesu- Whoa, I just like... responded to my awesome reviewers...
Sasuke- Isn't that what you are supposed to do?
Karesu- Just like YOU should be doing the DISCLAIMER?
Sasuke- ... Fine...
Disclaimer(as told by Sasuke)- Karesu doesn't own Naruto, lets keep it that way. I mean yeah I like the whole me and Naruto thing... and annoying her... but god ONLY KNOWS what she would do if she got PAID to be evil to us! Though I do have to compliment her because she DID write the lyrics for that song...
Karesu- Maybe Naruto or Itachi should so that from now on... Yeah and you better praise me for that song it rocks...
ROCK'N'ROLL LOVE- CHAPTER 2!
She should have never let it slip that she was the Never Loss manager. Why one may ask, one very simple reason and his name was Naruto. She now had a crazed Never Loss fan to deal with, and lets not forget the crazed girl there, Ookami.
Yes, the poor prodigy manager somehow kept what was left of her sanity in check while doing school work, working with Never Loss, and keeping up with Naruto and Ookamti. This is certain to lead her to a early grave.
And if that wasn't enough there was the fact she was now in the hair and makeup room in the back of Sand Theater getting ready to be a replacement for the person who was originally supposed to introduce the rock band.
The blue and black locks had been arranged into two buns that looked a bit sloppy, A pair of loose camo pants and a black shirt that said 'I have PMS and A gun.' across it. Muttering to herself as they applied some makeup which happened to be black lipstick and eyeliner. Just when she was going to get up the costume designer stopped her and made her put on some combat boots to complete the look.
Groaning she walked out knowing the band was waiting for her, they wanted to know what would happen her first time through hair and makeup. Of course they had gone through earlier.
Sasuke's hair had been gelled down from his normal spikes and wore leather pants and a fishnet shirt. The makeup he had on was red lipstick and some bronzer. Then her eyes moved to Itachi.
The elder Uchiha had on some blue jeans that were ripped in many places and skin tight navy shirt on that also seemed to have some rips in it.
Kiba had his normal sunglasses on and pinstripe pants with a white and black shirt that displayed the character betel juice.
When the band members looked at their manager they almost leered.
Itachi was the first to speak. "Hey Karesu, you know if I wasn't gay I would jump you at the moment." She rolled her eyes in response.
"Yeah I am sure you would Uchiha-San. Oh and just to warn you guys, two of my friends are sitting in the front row and are going to come backstage after the concert, so don't be surprised." Then she stalked off yelling at them to go get warned up before hand. Considering that they truly needed to do that they followed their managers orders.
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The crowd roared in anticipation when the lights dimmed and the lazar lights started to go off at almost 10 minutes after the appointed time the show was supposed to start. Why was it that concerts never seemed to start on time?
Sitting in the front row Naruto and Ookami were screaming their lungs out. And they were oh so decked out for the occasion.
Naruto warring his blue jeans that had a lot of sharpie marks on it with the names of the band members and repeating the band name a whole hell of a lot. His shirt was white and it had a picture of Karesu, Ookami, and himself last year at a party and they were attempting to ice-skate.
It was such a funny image because Karesu was almost falling flat on her face, which was a rare occurrence, and Ookami was gripping her for dear life. He himself was trying to avoid the two girls. His old friend Gaara had taken it from his cell phone and Naruto loved the image so much he had printed it on a shirt. The only reason he was warring it was for a the soul fact it was his lucky shirt and he was going to meet the band after the concert.
Ookami had on some jeans with a black layered skirt over it and light blue tank-top that had the logo from the bands newest CD ' Blue Eyed Angel' thus the shirt being blue. No one had that one and no one would, that was the prototype out of the two that didn't make it for the shirt design, this was one of the greatest benefits with being friends with Karesu for so long.
The crowd became an uproar when Karesu stepped on the stage.
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When Karesu stepped on the stage she briefly wondered how people could help now going deft from the noise. Then again you were talking about people who were used to it because they had their music up 100 volts to loud.
"Hello!" she said into the mic when she got to it. The crowd seemed to only increase in volume from that. "Im glad that you all came out here tonight! Oh behalf of Never Loss we are so glad that you support the group. But you didn't come out here to listen to me ramble on, so here if your band NEVER LOSS!"
She has to almost run off the stage to avoid the shock wave of sound that would most-likely kill her eardrums. Sure she had been on the backstage of concerts, but it was so much more intense when you were on stage.
Lifting up a glass of water and popping a pill in her mouth to help with her headache she said before swallowing it down, "Good luck guys."
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Sasuke was the first to come out, hitting the wall of pure energy that was created by the fans and he smirked to himself to see them so enthusiastic. Itachi followed and then Shino after him. Taking their stands they started to play the song 'Blue Eyed Angel' because they thought it was a good way to start it off. Well at least their producers did. Sasuke started to sing on his cue.
"Why cant I bleed?
My blue eyed angel.
Am I a different breed?
One who's blood Doesn't run.
Will I die alone?
I ponder this while looking at the water
and skipping a stone.
Will you save me?
(Chorus)
Blue eyed angel take me away
If you could talk to me
what would you say?
Why cant I bleed?
What have I done
what evil deed?
Have I committed a sin
I have because I want you
all I think about
is those eyes of blue
your in my mind
Blue you have to get out
you cant be trapped
without a doubt
be free."(1)
While he was singing this he was scanning the audience, just to see what crazy people may have showed up at this. Then his eyes went along the front row crowd and he saw the most stunning blue eyes he had ever seen. The words from his own song came back to him 'Blue eyed angel.'
It was about time to sing the chorus again but he had choked so he couldn't do it. Thank god for fan base because they thought it was intensional and sang it for him.
"BLUE EYED ANGEL TAKE ME AWAY
IF YOU COULD TALK TO ME
WHAT WOULD YOU SAY?"
The mass of people sang out happily and Sasuke tore his eyes away from the person and continued with the song.
"Help me
save me
Im afraid of what I may be
without your help.
My blue eyed angel."(2)
The music faded out and the song was over. Sasuke made a point not to look at the front row to his left for the rest of the concert, plus he could feel his brothers heard gaze on the back of his head.
END OF THE CHAPTER TALK
Karesu- Yet another chapter! AND MY FIRST HINT OF SASUNARU! -Dances around-
Itachi- You are still at fault for not updating for so long...
Karesu- I KNOW! School wasn't allowing me any free time. It was annoying...
Itachi- Yeah well it's a miracle that you did update.
Karesu- Shut up you!
(1)-Yes I wrote all the lyrics for this off the top of my head so don't be mad if they suck.
(2)- I couldn't think of a better way to end it so... wah la!
Please review? I will love you forever.