Okay its my first fic and I really could do with some pointers. Give all the criticisim you want! Its all good. So read on and don't forget to comment! Thanks!
Look at her. Amazing. Those eyes. Her hair. Wish I could just look at her forever. But no. I can't. I can't go there. He'd kill me. No joke.
Summer raised her eyebrows. 'Eh Chino? What's with the staring?' Ryan blushed and lowered his gaze. 'Oh nothing. Em…… you have some mayo on your nose'.
'What? And you let me sit here like this Cohen? Cooper? Girls room! Now!'
Seth looked at Ryan then at Summer and Marissa's retreating backs. 'Mayo?' he questioned. 'Oh don't ask!'
'So Coup. Hows things with Chino?' asked Summer as they emerged from the girls room.
'I don't know. Ever since the Tereasa episode he's not the same. I just wish he would talk to me. It can't be easy loosing a child'
Summer looked at her best friend. She hadn't seen her this upset in a while, not since Ryan left. Now he's back and he's still making waves. Everytime Ryan and Marissa are together there's trouble.
'Leave him. He'll come around eventually. C'mon I can sense a date with a certain Mr Ben and and Mr Jerrys.' Marissa giggled as she let her friend drag her out of the building...
'So man how are you?' Seth looked at Ryan, who was staring into space.
'Huh? Oh I'm okay'
'Yup and I was born yesterday! Ryan, I can read you like a book!'
'Ha I win! Sorry Cohen!'
'Yet again the Seth is defeated. When will I learn! But seriously talk to me man'
Ryan remained silent. Should I tell him? What? I miss Tereasa? I want her to bring my baby back? I'm in love with his girlfriend? Summer Roberts.
Summer was the first one to visit him. He didn't expect to see her when he opened the door. They were never that close. She said Marissa missed him, that Seth missed him, that she missed him. She wanted him to come home. He replied 'this is my home. Tereasa needs me, Rachel needs me, my family.' She left and came back the next week with pictures of everyone. She stayed all night (Tereasa and baby Rachel were in her mothers). Next morning he woke up on the sofa with Summers head on his chest, his arms around her. She glanced at him, caught his eye, and gladly welcomed the kiss he gave her. No one could know but somehow they felt for each other. Three months later and they still couldn't stop themselves!
What am I doing? Ryan and Marissa! Not Ryan and Summer! And what about Seth? It would kill him. It's wrong. But why does it feel so right?
Right I know it sucks but im a newbie! So comment and tell me if I should go on!