Chapter Eight
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A few days after arriving Susan, Rachel, Tomy, Steven and Alan were out on the beach at around 3 in the afternoon.
The girls were talking with Tomy while Steven and Alan were out swimming. All of the sudden Steven and Alan picked up the pace of their swimming. Susan noticed that they were moving quickly so she went to see what happened.
"What's wrong?"
"It looks like pirates."
"That's wonderful!" Susan said sarcastically
"Some one needs to go up and let my mother or father know."
"We should all go."
"I hate to interrupt your discussion but..."
"Damn! Susan get up the castle and warn my parents take Rachel with you neither of you are armed."
Susan nodded and ran off toward Tomy and Rachel. Susan quickly told them what was going on and then she and Rachel started off towards the castle but they were cut off by pirates who had already landed on the shore. The only chance they had to get help was to yell and hope to attract someone's attention.
"HELP!" they yelled as loudly as they could
Up on the wall Alanna heard noise and looked towards the beach. After seeing the pirates she and some of the guards went down to the beach.
Ok that's all I have for now I would like your (my reader's) opinion. First Susan and Rachel will be captured but is there anyone else that you would like to be. Second where should they be taken. And finally what do you think of the story if for some reason the site won't let you review send me an Email with "Fanfiction review" in the subject line. And FWI I start school on Tuesday so chapters may come slower.