The Underground
Story Form By Panda (altered)
Originally by Nate Docken
Disclaimer I do not own the Matrix, I didn't write it, film it, or have anything to do with the movie (perhaps besides buying it and writing a insignificant fanfiction on it).
Note: I know this site does not allow an author's note to be a chapter (which I believe it BULLSHIT because if I have this big ol' note in the first chapter, it just makes the story look terrible!), so I have included it into the Prologue, but seperated it.
First off, this was originally in script form by Nate Docken (someone I know and talk to every single day, not just some random stranger) and he had planned to make it into a hand-made film. On a low budget and being procastinating, he had not filmed it yet, but he had all the actors and most of the props. This is his project for school.
This fictional story is also a project, but it is mine. I wrote the story but he wrote the plot and dialogue, although I did change some things and added a few things. He was OK with this, and I DID NOT steal it from him. He decided it was nice because some people like reading in story form and this had much more visuals (which is important).
What I want to accomplish from posting this here is to get more feedback because it is what I need to improve the story and make it look nice. It is required in the grading rubric.
Some more junk info:
Here are the characters and who is acting them!
Apollo/Phoenix - Nate Docken
Kazna - Zak Guiosky
Iris - Shei Farrabi-Iverson
Kalia - Panda Osaki (me)
Koe - Jay (Originally Ben Weiss)
Prometheus - Forest Seaburg-Wood
Sinis - Alex Fukui
Robinson - Casey Robinson
Norton - Trent Ewing
Notes on the chapters: I have read over it only about twice of each chapter. I will read it again once it is posted... but chapter 7 is under construction because it has not exactly been completely written yet. I know it's a special chapter and not just another random fight like the others (which I had made up most of the fights) so I am waiting on Nate's procastination to come to a pause so I may get a decent reply. And unfortunately, his computer had died... and he is procastinating on fixing that as well.
Also... a note that Nate had made earlier when only about 3 chapters were written, he commented that it seemed it was based around Kalia. True that I play Kalia's role (and I know her character more than any of the other ones) and he hasn't commented since but I would like to know if it does seem off balance of each character and their roles. Does it seem to revolve around Kalia? Or the main characters, Phoenix/Apollo and Kazna?
From my writing history, I love to write romance, and even though it was not highly detailed in the script about Kalia/Phoenix-Apollo or Iris/Kazna's relationships, I wrote added them each at least a small section of a chapter or a whole chapter. I believe it is bold and boring if those parts were unincluded in the story :)
Also, the Epilogue is divided into three parts. Do not think that they are one chapter! I am still trying to figure out how to make it so it sounds like a good ending (any ideas?). It is just information for now about the sequel.
And... TBC means to be continued.
I believe that is all I have to say, thank you for reading and please enjoy.
PRELUDE:
The time is the year two-thousand. The One known as Neo has just realized his powers of control over the Matrix and his faith in Morpheus never stronger. A few months after their amazing accomplishments, a new organization was founded inside the Matrix, known only as the Underground. This new organization was founded by a man named Sinis, and with their motives unknown to Morpheus, caused some uneasy tension between the two factions.
Soon, some of those who followed the same beliefs that Morpheus shared were beginning to die. Sinis sent one warning to Morpheus, and that stated that Morpheus and those who follow him should cease their activity in freeing the minds of those in the Matrix and their reasons for such a demand befuddled Morpheus. Their logical explanation for their cause was to either die in the Matrix by the Agents or to die in the real world, by defending a dying city against a fierce horde of seemingly never ending killing machines.
The Underground is made up of people who were born into the Matrix, who understand what is going on outside of the Matrix, but also have the knowledge to manipulate the Matrix just as those who have feed their minds can. They are able to manipulate the Matrix because they keep in their minds the constant idea that the Matrix is not a real world and therefore, they can bend the rules. One of the newest members of the Underground who has shown amazing potential in the bending of the rules inside of the Matrix is known as Apollo, who was named that by Sinis to represent the light of God that has been sent to him for the Underground's benefit.
Apollo began to grow in body and mind, and soon began to question his very own existence. He imagined that he was only taught the information about the Matrix and the war and the real world and his beliefs by Sinis just in order to eliminate the Prophets and gain power. Soon after his thoughts of this, he began to become convinced that he existed for only those purposes and he became interested in how much power he can gain. By joining the obviously superior Underground, he could use them as stepping stones to further the limits of his power. He killed or sometimes disabled any Prophet he could see. He became obsessed with his validation for life and soon stood up against an agent who had come to eliminate him. He fought well, but in the end, he perished. His dying thoughts were how much of a mistake he made, wanting power by force, and he realized that power comes with patience, and time...
Prologue: Resurrection
The rain constantly poured heavily. The two men could barely see eachother, both soaked down to their skin. The man on the ground lifted his head. Water blurred his vision and his hair was a messy black mass over his face. The other man stood infront of him, emotionless.
Suddenly, his face twisted into fury. "Why do you continue to fight? Why will you not accept death?" he snarled.
The man on the ground shifted his rain filled eyes from the man's dress shoes, all the way up his suit to his face. They're all the same. he thought. Every single one of them...
"I won't die like this..." he murmured under his breath.
"What?" the man standing glared down at him.
"I can't!" he shouted. "I wanted power..."
Laughter. It rung though his ears like a bell, over and over again. It suddenly stopped.
"Then let this be a lesson to you." the man drew a gun from his suit pocket. The man on the ground looked frightened. His eyes widened and he tried to move but...
"Your time is up."
...Gunfire. It was almost slow motion for him as it shot through his heart. He fell back, his blood spilling into the rain and reaching the drains on the side. He closed his eyes as the rain pushed the hair from his face.
The sky is crying. he thought. Power... it was something I wanted... what I craved in life. It kept my alive. Why would it end now?...
No... it hasn't ended yet!... I will not let my mistakes leave me to rot!
He opened his eyes to slits and saw his killer staring down at him. His eyes became heavier as time passed, and his blinking stopped. His last sight was of his grinning killer.
"Still, only human." he flipped his sunglasses from his jacket pocket and put them on while walking the other direction. He left his prey to die in peace.
I have to help him... Kalia weakly jogged, out of breath and exhausted. She slowed down, but sped up quickly again. I cannot let him die!
She stopped. Her face became pale and widened in shock. She stared at the body lying ahead of her.
"Apollo... Apollo?" she cried, dropping her umbrella and running to her love. She skidded her knees against the sidewalk, ignoring the scratches. She felt his pale frozen face.
"Why..." she lightly slapped his cheek. Nothing.
"Why..." she felt for a pulse. Nothing.
"Why did you have to die!" her soft voice squeaked. "You were our only hope..." she hung her head down onto his chest and cried as the rain began to die down. I couldn't save you!...
Someone's crying. Was it the sky? No...
Apollo's eyes flicked open slowly. He lied there, staring at the grey skies. Then looked down at the crying woman over his chest. He began to sit up.
"...A...Apollo?" her crying paused suddenly. His gunshot wound was completely gone. "You were..."
"Apollo?" he turned his head towards her and stared blankly. "No... not anymore."
"...What?" she whispered, confused.
"Apollo died... along with his mistakes." he stood up and faced away from her. The sun peeked out from the clouds onto him. He shined, almost blindingly. "I am Phoenix now... Reborn, and I will do everything in my new power to help the Underground."
He walked away, not turning back. He left Kalia watching in shock.
TBC