x jesserbelle x: oh
x jesserbelle x: well they're stupid and immature...I especially hate the way that when people flame you, they are so much of cowards that review anonymously and don't leave an e-mail address, so you can't respond...
x jesserbelle x: if they're going to flame someone they should at least be brave enough to not care if they get flamed back
That is what my friend said after she heard about my anonymous reviewer, who called themselves, "no."
I really would appreciate it if you accutally give me a good flame. A good flame would tell me what's wrong with the story. No one else told me "No, just no." before soI think you just can't see a good story when you read it. Or maybe you just don't like the wayI write. Well flipen tell me that because right nowI just think your stupid. Why do you think you're able to review to peoples stories? They want to know if they're good enough!
Have a nice day.
Disclaimer: A disclaimer is self explanatory.
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Al burst out laughing and Mr. and Mrs. Elric were smirking. Kailani turned red all over and so did Ed.
"Hello! I'm Emilie Herman! Pleasure to meet you, Mr. Elric and Alphonse!" Emilie grinned and shook both of their hands, a little to hard.
"Nice to meet you too Emilie…" they replied holding the hands she had shook in pain.
"Well, enough introductions!" Kailani interrupted , still burning red. "We are in the enemy's fortress still, you know!"
"Right! Let's get moving!" Ed agreed, also burning red.
"Wait a minute!" Emilie peered intently at Mrs. Elric. "Who is she?"
"I am Mrs. Elric, Emilie, pleased to meet you." She said, taking her hand and smiling.
"But…" Emilie's face flushed, "You're supposed to be dead!"
"Long story, come on! We need to get going!" Al exclaimed.
"I'm afraid I cannot come with you." Emilie replied, looking at the ground.
"What? Emilie, the soldiers will know what you did." Kailani said sadly, trying to take Emilie's hand. But Emilie backed away.
"I have someone else to save."
"Emilie…"
"Kailani, my mother is in here." Emilie said gently, looking up with tears in her eyes and a smile on her face. "And I promise we'll see each other again."
"Yea," Kailani said, "I'm sure of it."
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The Elric's (And friends)had made it out. They were walking down the road to the next town with Mr. and Mrs. Elric in front, Al with Raeka's wheelchair behind them, and Ed and Kailani in the back. (Kailani still has the skimpy uniform on)
"Ed?" Kailani said, laying her head in his solder.
"Yea?" Ed whispered with a smile.
"You know how much I was worried about you in that 4-5 hour period, right?"
"Probably not as much as I was worried about you…"
Kailani looked up at him.
"Kailani… did they DO anything to you in there?" Ed stopped and grabbed her by the shoulders.
"No, Ed. They didn't lay a finger on me. This one guy tried, but I kicked him. HARD! Where it hurts!" Kailani hugged him. "I'm glad your worried, though…"
Ed smiled.
"Kailani I--"
"Shut up I want to kiss you." She smiled and brought his head down to hers. Ed put his arms around her and it stayed like that for a long time after they finished kissing.
"Kailani?"
"Yea?"
"… Where are the others?"
"Oh snap!"
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"Give me a reason not to panic! We just got them back and now they're gone again! Not only that, but I just came back to the Human world!"
"Trisha, calm down. Ed and Kailani are resourceful kids, they will find us. We're only walking on a road."
"But--"
"Don't worry, mom. You wouldn't BELIEVE how many times me and Ed got lost with only dad around."
A glare was sent Mr. Elric's way and he sweat dropped.
"Thanks a lot Al!" he hissed back at his son. Al sweat dropped too.
Al looked down at Raeka and pushed the hair out of her face.
(Al's inner thoughts)
She's so beautiful…
Hey! Stop thinking that Alphonse!
You know I can't help it!
Well… at least don'tthink like thatwhile she's passed out!
Al sighed and looked back up at his parents. His dad was begging his mom to forgive him, and she was slowly giving in.
I hope I can get married someday…
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"Oh damn it! I can't see them anywhere!" Kailani shrieked, scanning the horizon for the others. Ed watched in amusement.
"Kailani, we're just going to walk on this road to the next town. All we need to do is keep walking." Ed replied.
"Fine Mr. Smarty Pants, be all simple. I say that up ahead there will be a fork in the road!" She smiled at this thinking she won, but Ed countered with,
"They would stop there and wait for us."
Kailani fumed. She wanted to be right. Her face turned red and Edward started to laugh. She grabbed his shirt collar.
"Don't you laugh at me Edward or you'll regret it…" She hissed. "Aren't we supposed to keep walking?"
"Yea, but…" Ed had a glint in his eye and an evil smile across his face.
"Don't you dare Edward!" Kailani threatened. The Ed began to tickle her.
"Noooooooooo! Ed stop!" she gasped between giggles.
"Or what?" He dared, tickling her more.
"Or I'll…" Kailani was interrupted by a snort. Ed stopped and she covered her mouth.
"I didn't know you snorted!" Ed exclaimed dumbfounded.
"I didn't want you to. I hate snorting." Kailani admitted shrugging him away.
"I think it's cute." Ed teased.
"Stop lying…" Kailani turned away from him.
"I'm not lying, it's really cute." He insisted.
"Yea?" She smiled turning back to him.
"Yea." he grabbed her by the waist and he almost kissed her when…
"I think we should keep walking!" Kailani pulled away leaving a disappointed boy in her wake.
"You'll never catch up like that Edward Elric!" She teased, running ahead.
"Hey!" he screamed. Then he sighed and started running after her.
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"Oh, well look at that." Mr. Elric said. "A fork in the road."
And there it was, a split in the road. One going left, one going right, and a tree in the center. The tree wasn't bad sized either; it was about the size of a 3 story office building.
"Well," exclaimed Mrs. Elric, "We better climbup that tree."
"Why?" Mr. Elric and Al questioned at once.
"We need to wait for the two love birds behind us, right?" Al and his dad nodded.
"We also need a rest, right?" Al and his father nodded.
"Then why don't we rest in the tree? Also, it's a good place to hide." She concluded, walking over to the tree.
"What about Raeka?" Al asked, wheeling her over to the tree in her chair.
"Umm…" Trisha wondered aloud.
"I can climb to a lower branch, and leave the chair on the other side of the tree." Raeka mumbled, tugging on Al's shirt.
"You're awake! You wouldn't believe what happened while you were out of it." Al said gently, helping her walk over while his dad took over the wheel chair.
"Try me." She taunted, grabbing on to a lower branch and beckoning him to follow. Al's parents smiled at each other.
"Wanna see who can climb higher?" Trisha challenged her husband, eyes glittering.
"Try me." He threw back, sprinting for the tree.
"No fair, ladies first!" His wife yelled, following him up.
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"Dang!" Trisha exclaimed on the highest branch of the tree. "I didn't know you could go that fast…"
Her husband, who was sitting next to her, patted her head.
"I didn't know you could go that fast either" He replied.
"Now I'm exhausted…" She whispered, putting her head on his shoulder. He leaned farther against the trunk and put his arms around her.
"Don't let me fall…" Trisha mumbled half asleep.
"Who says I'll ever let go?" Mr. Elric flirted.
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"Whoa… I didn't know I could miss out on so much in only 6 hours…" Raeka mumbled, letting her feet dangle off the edge of the branch they were on.
"You better get used to it. Anything can happen out here…" Al replied thoughtfully, looking up through the leaves. "It's getting late… Where are Ed and Kailani?"
"Who knows… they're so wacky sometimes." Raeka joked.
"You don't think they ran into any trouble right?" Al inquired looking at her.
"Naw… at least I hope not." she replied with a smile. Al sighed.
"I just wish they would pay attention to more then each other sometimes. This is their second time getting lost." Al complained, looking at the ground.
"Al, you can't count the first time because that was partly our fault for leaving them there." Raeka pointed out.
"I know… your right…" Al agreed. "I just…"
"Are you jealous of Kailani?" Raeka asked, moving a little closer to Al.
"No… well, I don't think I am… I think I'm more jealous of Ed…" Al thought out loud.
"Why would you be jealous of Ed…" Then she gasped. "Do you like Kailani?"
"No! No, it's not that…" Al tried to explain.
"Then what is it?" Raeka persisted.
"He is lucky enough to… um… what I'm trying to say is…" Al floundered, trying hard to get his feelings out. Raeka crossed her arms.
"He is lucky enough to have the person he loves…" He shrugged hopelessly. "Love him back…"
It was silent.
"Look, Al, I-" Raeka said, reaching for his shoulder.
"Never mind, forget what I just said. Take your time to heal. I want you to be able to talk to me about everything… alright?" Al whispered, grabbing her hand in both of his.
"Okay Al…" She whispered back, taking her hand away. "Can you call me Rae?"
Al looked at her.
"My sister called me that. It was sort of a secret name…" She put her hand to her head. "I want to keep her memory alive. And more importantly…"
"I want you to know everything, Alphonse. I want you to know that... there's still a chance I'll be able to love you too."
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"Ah ha! A fork in the road! Just as I predicted!" Kailani bellowed, showing Edward the split.
"Okay, so you were right. But I was right too because…" He brought out the wheel chair. "They did wait for us."
"Dang! Well, I think they climbed that tree and fell asleep up there." Kailani countered.
"I'll race you to the top." Ed challenged.
"You're on!" Kailani roared, sprinting towards the tree.
"Hey! I wasn't ready yet!" Ed bellowed, running after her. Kailani stuck her tongue out.
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"Mother!" Envy screamed. "The Jews lost them. We don't need to storm their hide-out now, right?"
"No. We go along with the plan. Katie Emery is still in there, and if we take her we have the best bait for the Elric's to come." She grinned evilly.
"But even her daughter doesn't know she's alive!" Envy pouted, crossing his arms.
"We'll make sure she finds out." She exclaimed, shushing her son. "In the meantime, we will keep watching them from afar; they don't know what we know."
"Whatever, I'm going to go kill something." Envy mumbled walking out of the huge room.
(Did you make the connection? Katie Emery?)
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Tooo dah! Alright, if you want a character, please tell me know now! All I need is your name and a last name you made up! If you want you can give details!
You know you want to be in this story!
Sincerely,
Jainabelle