This is a story I wrote in grade six and I was hoping to revamp it but I wanted to get other people's opinions on the story before any major changes were made. So Readers and Authors alike please help me out in reviews and criticize

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A girl with fairy tale blond hair suddenly opened her eyes to see that she is in a dark alley. With turned over garbage cans, cloths lines and of course the smell of old cigarettes and the faint smell of urine and beer.

"Where am I?" she said, confused. "Wh-what happened?"

With all that said she immediately clutched her head because before it had hurt so much but now, suddenly, the pain was gone. She decided to get up. In a broken mirror she saw her self and said, "This is my face." She had pale skin, her hair was blond and her eyes: they were different colors, one eye was electric blue and the other was emerald green.

"Who am I?"

She looked to be about fourteen or so. She was wearing a white t-shirt, some navy blue jeans and a blue jean jacket. She heard a sound like something being knocked over and looked in that direction. Her breath caught in her throat because what she saw could scare even the bravest of men. Its skin was green and scaly, she saw that its hands were claws and the eyes were yellow and like an alligator's, it was just as tall as her. It suddenly looked her way and then let out a cry like nothing she had heard before. She placed her hands over ears and glass was breaking everywhere. Without looking she turned from the creature and ran.

She soon ended up on a street but there was a smell in the air of burning and rotting flesh. She turned her head and saw them: they looked like people but they weren't, their skin was falling off of them, they were staggering and some were on fire. Only one thought flashed through her mind: "Zombies". She had the sudden urge to run back the way she came but then she heard it, the sound of feet splashing in puddles and the sound of rock or metal being dragged against the asphalt. She looked all around her and saw a door across the street that none of the zombies were near and dashed for it. As soon as she was about to reach the door handle something grabbed her and jerked her in the other direction. It was one of the zombies and its grip on her shoulders was so strong it felt like lead was wrapped around them. It was about to bite her as she grabbed its arms to get it off and then all of a sudden it let go and burst into flames and went flying through the air.

"Did I do that?" she asked in a weak and helpless voice. She raced for the door, yanked it open by a rusty handle, and locked the door behind her. Terrified, she sank to the grated floor.

"What am I doing here, how did I get here, what's going on, who am I?" she mumbled, shaking, almost reaching hysteria.

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that's it for chapter one please review and help me out