Inheritance
Chapter 3
Standard disclaimer inserted here
I realise that I shouldn't have asked for a number of reviews, I'm a beginner after all. To all those who reviewed, thank you. I hope this is up to your expectations.
Seven years before, Eleni Cooper was walking in the streets of Corus, delighting in the world. It was strange that even while it was raining, there were still people in the streets for all sorts of purposes. There were no noble ladies, but then the world wasn't centered on their time schedules. Eleni's only dislike of Corus was that it was classes so unfairly, but then what could you do. Corus was everything from the palace to the streets where slime used from the sewers and the walls were blackened and disfigured. Where blood and dirt had dyed the ground brown, but that was what the nobles' saw of Lower Corus, not what Eleni could see. Eleni had seen the famines and the rebellions but also the talk among friends, the thieves and their companions planning a nice hall. Eleni wasn't sure what she preferred Higher Corus or Lower Corus. But what amazed her was life and that was what had brought her to the Mother Goddess' temple to become a priestess, what had encouraged her to have a son and open a business healing.
Suddenly she was surprised by a toddler's cry. Running towards the noise, Eleni found seven shadows surrounding the babe.
'Salognits, the bringers of Chaos,' thought Eleni, 'That babe is special or they wouldn't be here.'
Casting a spell from her days as a priestess, Eleni begged the Great Mother Goddess to take away these spirits who wished to do harm. The Goddess looked down below and saw them, furious; the Goddess banished them to their realms as she prepared to meet the gods in council. It was time that the gods discussed the prophesy and the fate of the worlds. It was time they summoned Dallas, the wise man of the mountains and the weaver of lives.
Far below, Eleni Cooper picked up the child, calmed it and brought it to her house, calming the child all the way. The child looked hungry so Eleni gave it some of the goat's milk that she had in her healing pouch in case a child lost it's mother and needed the breast milk. The girls crying subsided and Eleni was able to take a look at her new charge. The child's skin was a light brown, with blond hair and brown eyes. She appeared to be a willowy creature. But what surprised Eleni most was the crest on her hand, a scimitar and a staff crossed.
'Nonsense,' she said to herself, 'the prophesy mentioned a staff, a scimitar and a sword; this child can't be part of it.'
But even as she said that, Eleni felt the hands of hate tighten their grasp and the words of prophesy hang around the air.
Do you like it? This adds a bit of plot to it as well as creating some suspense. Sand now that the 'prologue' has ended the true story can begin. Give me ideas please; you'll enjoy it more if it's full of creative ideas.
Chow,
Brown-Eyed Fencer of Conte (flyery)
PS: Zoë isn't going to fall for Jon, so don't get deluded by my name.
PPS: I'm going to Quebec for a week, so don't expect updates for at least a week and a half. After that is summer vacation, so I don't know how much time I'm going to have to write this.