Here are some more from my reviewers:
Also theres these things called ADJECTIVES. They belong scattered throughout the story describing your character and the other characters in the story. I don't need to know EVERYTHING about your character in the first paragraph. Also if you know how to use those absurd adjective thigns you would know I DO NOT need a description of your character that takes up the first chapter.
-Lintucuiel
I agree with all of those.
Here's three more:
1) "The Dingo" is a DRIVE-IN; not a diner or a bar or a pool hall or anything else.
2) Pony is 14 years old, not 4. He doesn't cry into his brothers' arms everday, Darry doesn't call him "baby" on a regular basis, & if I read about Soda rubbing his back in circles one more time I might puke.
3) Two-Bit is not ALWAYS watching Mickey Mouse, Steve & Soda are not always playing poker, & Darry isn't always reading the paper.
-just another anglophile
The odds of Two-bit, or anybody else for that matter, getting a beer out of the Curtises' fridge are EXTREMELY slim. As far as I can remember, it never once happens in the book. The Curtis boys don't really drink and with unexpected State visits, it just wouldn't be in their fridge.
-Skittles37
And then I want to apologize for the skirt thing. I was mostly basing it off the book, and in the book I didn't hear talk of any jeans among girls, but my own mother informed me that jeans were a big thing in the late sixties.