Note: WOO! Flames! I love those things, cuz that means people are reading it enough to point out the details!
And here's how I interpret things.
Sonic21541 says:
Don't write for reviews, play God and just update the story when YOU want to...
I didn't find this funny at all, I think you were trying to force the humor, I don't laugh... at all. I believe it's way better, and funnier, to try to have a boring story, just let the story flow and put in the humor when it's needed. Besides, Sonic is kinda of a nomad, he doesn't stay in one place for too long, Tails is so this dumb, and Knuckles is supposed to drive a car and crash it into things. You got it perfectly.
You tried and I hope others will find this entertaining... because I'm a big doodiehead!
WOO BEANS!
Disclaimer: Sonic and those people aren't mine. Except for the red guy.
And now to the story!
Sonic was packing his bags. He wondered why, of all people, Mario invited him to a cruise. It made no sense.
"Oh well," Sonic thought. "At least I'll get a free cruise ride."
Sonic was just about to pack his sun tan lotion when he heard a knock on the door.
"I should really stop giving people my address" Sonic grumbled as he walked up to the door. He opened it up to see a red hedgehog.
"HEY! SONIC! I'M YOUR NUMBER ONE FAN! I WANTED TO MEET YOU! Actually, I just need a place to stay. Can I come here for a while?" the red hedgehog said quickly.
"Uhh. Ok?"
"SWEET! Where do I sleep?"
"Umm… maybe on the couch?"
"Alright!" the red guy said as he leapt onto Sonic's sofa, and instantly fell asleep.
"Umm… hey buddy I-"
"SOOOOOONIIIIIC!"
"Oh god."
Tails crashed through a window a hit several walls, but didn't seem to notice.
"HEYSONICIBROUGHTCREAMTOSTAYHEREFORALITTLEBITANDIWANTTOKNOWWHERETHEICECREAMIS!" the hyper fox yelled.
"Tails! I told you not to eat sugar at our house or Cream's house!" Sonic yelled back.
"DID SOMEONE SAY SUGAR?" Cream yelled as she crashed through the door.
"Ugh! Why don't you two go play outside or-" Sonic started.
"WHO IS HE?" Tails screamed pointing at the asleep red hedgehog.
"Wait, don't bother him! He's -!"
"WAKE UP MR.SLEEPYHEAD! WAKE UP!" Cream was yelling into the red guy's ear.
He didn't budge.
"THAT'S NOT HOW YOU WAKE SOMEONE UP, CREAM! THIS IS HOW YOU DO IT!" Tails screamed as he started to drag the red guy across the floor.
He only started to drool.
"IS HE DE-?" Tails started, but Sonic grabbed him and pressed his finger into Tails' neck. Tails fell on the floor.
"YOU KILLED TAILS!" Cream screamed.
"I didn't kill him. I knocked him out. He'll feel better when he wakes up." Sonic said.
"SO SHOULD I GO HOME?"
"Yes."
"OK!" Cream yelled as she flew through one of Sonic's windows.
"Finally. Note to self: Don't ever have children." Sonic thought. He picked up Tails and put him in his room. When he walked back into the living room, he saw that red guy eating nachos and watching TV.
"How did you-? Wait. Never mind. I have to grab my stuff for the cruise." Sonic grumbled.
"Cruise? Can I come?" the red guy said.
"Fine. It's in 2 days."
"But I'll be gone in 2 days!"
"Why?"
"I have to go to the cruise, remember?"
Sonic looked at him funny. This guy was not normal.
END OF STORY! REVIEW! TELL ME HOW MUCH I SUCK!
Note: The quote on the top is only a joke.
