V:
Thanks for your review, and you're right this is a little too chaotic but this is just something I do for fun and I don't really have time to plan it all, I normally just write chapter by chapter and see where it heads but I'll try to do better next time, I'm just not taking this too seriously and I don't see why I should.
As for the grammar and spelling mistakes, well you see english is not my first language and I've seen a lot of mistakes in differentfanfics so I think they aren't as important, at least not in this website, but again I promise I'll try to do better next time and if you aren't annoyed by my many mistakes I hope you can keep reading.
I do get most of the mistakes you brought up but can you please tell me how do you spell acknowledge then?