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Hello! This chapter is a flashback chapter! Because this guy who decided to remain anonymous said this: This needs work. I have always liked grimdark works, so this story is rather interesting to me, but it needs more time to developers. Percy goes from being... well, Percy, to a bloody vicious murderer in all of about five minutes. If you could some more inner thinking in there or something, Percy's transformation would feel a lot more natural and important. Also, the demigods are not afraid of fighting. The prospect of an upcoming war would send them into shocked silence at most, not running around screaming. That felt extremely forced and unnatural.
However, like I said, I really do like the idea you have here. With a little tidying up, this could be a really excellent story.
Thank you for this, because you have finally helped me to write this story. This IS my first fanfiction, so please, ease up on the criticism. The it also A HUGE THANK YOU, for making me come back to writing again thank you.
Now on with the show!
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Chapter 9
Tartarus
(REMEMBER THIS IS A FLASHBACK CHAPTER!)
The smooth obsidian walls reflected Percy's face, it showed a man, with white hair, and red eyes. Percy put his hand on his reflection, tears in his eyes. He had turned into a monster, a demon. He was no longer the Percy Jackson everyone knew and loved. He was no longer the happy green eyed son of the sea. He was now Percy Jackson son Tartarus, Master of the Pit. He spread his black wings into the dark air of Tartarus. His eyes narrowing, thinking about who made him into this monster. Annabeth Chase. She was the first love of his life. He would have given his life to protect her, he went through Tartarus with her. She destroyed his life.
Memories of their time together flashed through his head, falling into Tartarus just for her. She was the one thing that kept him alive, and then she killed him, stabbed him in the heart.
The pain of seeing her with Mark was unbearable to watch. The pain and sorrow in his heart soon turned to anger. Percy Jackson son of Tartarus wanted revenge, and that was never a good thing. He wanted to destroy Annabeth Chase and Mark Hill. He was going to destroy them mentally and physically. No mercy was going to be given, even when they were on the ground begging for mercy, he would show none. He would not stop until their corpses were mangled and bloody. He would stand above them, their blood covering his body. He would destroy them.
He would need to destroy their minds, little by little, they would go insane. And that was when he would appear in front of them, and destroy their perfect little immortal bodies.
CAMP HALF-BLOOD_
Percy appeared in the woods, his eyes darting here and there. Searching for one Katie Gardener( IF YOU DON'T READ MY A/N YOU WONT GET WHAT IS HAPPENING SO GO BACK AND READ IT YOU LAZY PERSON) . Katie has become a close friend of Annabeth, and torturing her would kill Annabeth's heart. Percy grinned. He flicked one of his throwing knives out, perfect, she was alone. He crept up to her, and held the knife to her throat,"Don't scream, or else I'll kill your up right here and now, and stain your pretty little plants with your own blood. I am sure that they will love it."
"You bastard," Katie said, not wanting Percy to notice her fear," What made you into this? This..this, monster?"
" Oh? What made me? Betrayal, and a broken heart made me," Percy said, glancing at his dagger," I wonder how long it would take for you to scream." Smiling in a way, that would have made grown mortal men walk the other way, very quickly.
Percy picked up Katie, and walked into the shadows.
" My lords and ladies, I am back," Percy said.
"Percy…."
"Oh, it's probably the thousandth time? Don't expect me to keep count. I have some work to do, so I'll call it a day." Percy said as he walked down the hallway.
"The nerve if that child," Erebus said, with an amused glint in his eyes," I think that we will be hearing quite a few screams tonight. To think he has saved Olympus twice….."
Percy chained Katie to the wall, and took out a knife," Actually, I don't think that I will have to use chains today. If I just drive this knife in deep enough, it should keep you secured." (Grins)
He drove the knife into Katie's shoulder and relished in her screams. With the knife all the way into her shoulder, Percy went to the cupboard and took out a bloody jar of salt.
Katie tried to escape, but to no avail, Percy had still not taken off the chains that held her. Percy smiled and said,"I lied, I wasn't going to take off the chains."
Percy dipped his hand in, and smeared the salt all over the open wound, making her scream even more.
END
JK PRESENT TIME NOW RIGHT AFTER PERCY "WALKS" AWAY INTO THE DARKNESS
"Percy," Annabeth cried out, come back,"The Percy that I know would never do this.
Red eyes glared at her,"The Percy that you know ceased to exist the moment that he saw you kissing Mark."
"What made you into this Percy? Please tell me," Annabeth pleaded with him.
"What made me? Ha!" Percy said laughing, stepping into the light," You made me Annabeth Chase, you made me into this monster. You painted me into a spy for the dark. Well… Mark did have a hand in it too, he destroyed the ties that I had with my friends, he relished in my pain, and you, you just stood there doing NOTHING!"
"Percy, I swear,I didn't know.." Her voice falling on deaf ears.
"Do you know what kept me alive in the River Styx? DO YOU KNOW?" Annabeth just shook her head,"You kept me alive, the memory of you was enough to keep me alive in the burning waters of the Styx." By now, Annabeth was crying into her hands," And then, you go and break my heart like this, do you know how much PAIN and SUFFERING I went through because of my love for you? I fell into Tartarus with you, with the full intention of seeing you alive. But now, I regret that decision. Goodbye Annabeth Chase, daughter of Athena," And with that he left.
Leaving a trail of blood behind.
The hero shall fall to darkness
He cannot be redeemed
Olympus shall fall to ashes
And all shall fall into darkness
A/N :Don't judge me on my prophecy writing skills, I already know that they suck, so shut up. Also, I do need to know the extent of Percy's power, but, you know. Hopefully you guys like this chapter, can't guarantee that though, because there still isn't a lot of Character development in here. So I think I need to work on that. So, if you have any ideas please do Review it or just simply PM me. Thanks
