On with the story:
Erol was sound asleep in Bontiak, and for whatever reason Chilonka was there wearing all black, sneaking in. Her eyes were full of hatrid. She wanted revenge for all he's done to Jak, and to what he attempted in killing all of them. Quietly, she snuck lowly into his room with a powerful hand gun. No body was around for them to hear it. She loaded the gun, and pointed straight at his head. Just as she was about to pull the trigger, Erol opened his eyes quickly, and tried to jump at her yelling , and it scared Chilonka, pulling the trigger shooting him in the head. Erol fell to the ground in a cold dead stare facing her.
She ghasped in fear, just realising what she did. She killed Erol! "Oh shit.. Oh shit.. OH SHIT." She yelled, looking at Erol's body. Trembeling, she dropped the gun, and just as she was about to run, she stopped herself planning something so he wouldn't be concidered murdered. Very carefully, she put her handgun in his hand. Then she ran off.
Not even I could bring him back, because I'd be too late. It was for the better because he was too dangerous to keep alive. Chilonka never spoke of the incident, and we only saw on the news about it. Investogators inferred he went cuisidal.. We forgot about it and went on with our lives. I didn't have much of a thing for Erol other than physical attraction. Other than that we had nothing in common. Same thing with Torn, but he's not a bad boy red head that loves to kill everybody and anybody in plain sight.
So in conclusion of this tale I am solefully telling you... Love is pure, you can never break it. There are different loves though, you must understand. There's the passionate, caring, and favoring. I loved Erol in a way that you'd love well... The way he treated you.. I loved Torn in a way that I had a crush on him for no reason. Then I love Jak for that we belong with eachother. In the beginning I had a heartache on switching from Erol, to Torn.. Erol, to Torn numerous times. The twisting part of it all my decision between the two was neither! Love is so confusing sometimes, I still don't understand.
This is my so long salute to all of you love confused people out there. If you truely feel you love somebody, stay with that choice. Listen to what your instincts say. If something doesn't feel right, GET OUT OF IT. There's a lil possibility it can end out tragic.
END... OF... OH I JUST CAN'T SAY IT : cries: STORY. End of story iight! You've sucked me dry out of the story folks! But DON'T WORRY. I've made an alternate longer version of Laona and Jak hooking up, like I said. I am VERY happy that you guys enjoyed the story. Thank you so much guys, I don't know what I would've done without you guys.
Mini review from the charactors: (Jus' for laughs, and cause I'm BORED and want the charactors to bite eachother's heads off)
Jak: I loved the layout of the story... But it actually did start to get on my nurves on how it was sinched up.
Laona: What was wrong with the way it was sinched up?
Jak: ... I... Can't quite explain it.
Laona: ... Anyway. : smirks:
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Erol:: laughs: My favorite part of the story was when Loura and Laona cat fight. Those two lines were exelent.
Laona:: shruggs: Eh... It was OK.
Loura: OK? Girl, it was fly!
Laona.
Loura:... What!
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Torn: Um... Well all I have to say about this story, was that I sounded like a total softy. That sucked my whole entire personality out of me.
Laona: Torn, if you didn't have a soft side you wouldn't have the heart to play that roll!
Torn: .. Smart mouth. : blushes:
Laona: Oh by the way guys, he was VERY bad in bed.
Torn: CAN YOU PLEASE SHUT UP ABOUT THAT. Not infront of everybody atleast. Don't wanna talk 'bout it.
Laona:: laughs:
Jak:: blinks: What's your opinion of me in bed?
Laona:: just about to open mouth to say something:
Torn: JAK GET OUT OF THIS SECTION.
Jak: Ok fine fine! Don't have to yell.
Laona:: whispers to Jak: 100 better, jus' to tip off.
Jak:: laughs in his throat walking off: This is too funny.. Can we just start that over?
Me (Angela):: walks in with a marker board: CUT. xD
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Marvin: I had little part in this story, but I'm glad I could help.
Torn: For the record, Marvin looks nothin' like me.
Laona: You blind, Torn?
Torn: ... I wish.
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Erol: Why'd I have to die in the last chapter? Funny way to end the story, Laona!
Laona: Well... If you weren't taken care of the story would go on and on and on and on.. No wonder why in the video game Naughty Dog got rid of you.
Erol: Hey get it..:: laughs:
Laona: What?
Erol: Naughty DOG, and Naughty OTTSIL? That's probably where they got the name of it.
Laona: Wow yea, most likely.
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Chilonka: No hard feelings in the story on killin' you Erol.
Erol:: grumbles with arms crossed:
Chilonka:: smirks:
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Jak: Laona always listens to my problems, and during the story you can notice that. Hey, don't you remember when my hand went a little to low one time when we were makin' out?
Laona:: listening to Michael Jackson music at full volume nodding head viggerously next to Jak:
Jak:: makes an 'I can't believe she's doing this' face:
Laona:: notices that Jak's staring at me funny, and stops music: What?
Jak:: shakes head: Nothin'...
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Jak: Naw.. We don't like eachother like we originaly do in the movie. Sure, we're good friends and all, but not like that.
Laona: Stories are like movies. Celebrities makin' out.. That's just business. Nothing more.
Daxter: YEA RIGHT. You two are just in denial.
Laona:: whacks Daxter flip side in the face knocking him down: .. Don't listen to him.
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(: WHILE JAK AND LAONA DIDN'T KNOW THAT WE WERE STILL LISTENING TO THEIR COMMENTS:)
Jak:: whispers: Hey.. Wanna make out when we're done here?
Laona:: whisperes back: Sure, where?
Jak: I dunno... Maybe at my house.
Laona:: lightly holds Jak's face and kisses him sitting real close, practicly touching: Ok.
Jak:: smiles closing eyes, slightly blushing, opens eyes then notices that the listening thing was still on: OH SHIT THAT WAS ON!
Laona:: blushes heavily: OH MAN.. C-C-CAN WE DELETE THAT ONE?
Daxter:: bursts out laughing: TOLD YA! IN YOUR FACE HA HA!
Jak and Laona:: blushes heavy and yells at the same time: SHUT UP!
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Torn: I think the reason why I was a total softie was because we had a child write this story.
Angela (me, the writer): Godda problem with that!
Torn:: glares at Angela: Yes.
Angela: ... : glares back:
Torn and Angela:: glares at eachother for several seconds:
Torn:: begins to crack a small smile, then suddenly starts bursting out laughing:
Angela: I am the queen of making Torn crack up! WHOO HOO : moonwalks:
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o.O ok I leave you to your grieving.