Kurtain: Thank you so so much!!!
Hellcat: I'm panicking like crazy.=( even though it's all objective.I'm not
too good at "tembakking," as the term goes.. Did I make Kougaji that mean?
Oh dear..=P my dislike for him must be showing too strongly.I'm not overly
fond of Kougaji...he keeps Yaone away from Hakkai, evil person..*laughs* I
like him though, his devotion to his "haha" is touching.
Rook: Write it all???? Sorry.don't get that..=( But it's cool to know more
peeps from M'sia. *gryns*
chubby sanzo: Kou's in denial! Hehehehehe...
ceres17: yes I totally agree!!!!! It sux to the max! Doku calls him Kou?
Oops.sorry..haven't watched Saiyuki for a long time.timing not good...
Arista Niara: I'm kinda a very strong Hakkai/Yaone supporter..but of
course, if I feel like it..Yaone might go back to Kougaji...or.*grins
evilly* I could do a yaoi. Hakkai/Kougaji anyone?
I've reread the third chapter.seems painfully short..I did some editing and here's the end result.. Ehehhe..didn't do much editing..sorry...distraction*in the form of irritating bf came along*
Chapter 3 (re-edited) Thoughts are now enclosed in ^^
Yaone leaned slightly against the rough stone walls of the cave. She leaned her head on the irregular stone and felt the roughness against the smooth skin on her cheek. It was raining outside. She sighed softly. It seemed to rain continuously now. The heavens had not stopped weeping for three days.
"The sky has seen much to mourn," she whispered faintly to the dark grey clouds above. A lock of purple hair fell down and obscured her vision. She brushed it aside absentmindedly. ^It's so quiet here.^ She stifled back the tears she felt coming. ^It's so lonely, and gloomy.^ Giving herself a mental shake, she straightened and turned around to walk back to the inside of the cave.
She knelt down beside Hakkai's still body and gently brushed back the long brown hair that had matted down on to his eyes. She felt a great wave of gratitude go out to this man. He had helped her more than she could ever imagine. In healing her physical wounds, he had also somehow healed her spiritual ones. Even though the thought of Kougaji still brought a small pain into her heart, she no longer felt herself worthless or deserving of death. Cho Hakkai had shown her, somehow, that life was too precious a thing to just throw away like that. After he had almost killed himself to save her, she could not bear to take her own life and waste his hard efforts.
Coughs racked through his long frame. He choked slightly, and Yaone was all attention. "Hakkai-san?" she asked, concerned.
He whispered weakly, "Water." His lips were cracked and almost bleeding.
Frowning slightly with worry, Yaone reached towards a hollowed out stone she used as a makeshift bowl. She dipped a piece of clean cloth into the clear water inside and gently patted the water onto Hakkai's lips.
He was still too weak to drink. He would choke. Yaone was quite worried about him. Healing her had weakened him to a point that he could barely move without assistance. She swore that she would stay by his side until he had regained his health. She owed him that much. Her heart was torn inside. This man had almost sacrificed his life to save her, and she was deeply touched by what he had done. Guilt raged within her.
She shivered slightly and glanced automatically towards the fire she had built some time ago. It was out. She frowned, displeased with herself. She had not even noticed that. Sighing, she stood up, and stretched slightly. She needed to collect more firewood. Unfortunately, with so much rain, it would be hard to find any dry materials. Berating herself on her carelessness on letting the fire go out, she walked out of the cave into the drenching rain. While looking for stuff to make a fire with, she also searched for certain herbs and plants that she knew were filling and nutritious. Hakkai would need them to hasten his recovery, and she needed to eat too.
Smiling with pleasure when she finally found a rare leaf that she wanted, she didn't realise that she was being watched until she caught a small shadow in the corner of her eye. Dropping the leaf, she spun around, and saw nothing. A few metres away, a small twig cracked. She glanced up just in time to see a small, retreating figure far far away in the treetops.
Narrowing her eyes, she shrugged and bent down to pick up the leaf. With that, and all the other things she had gathered, she had enough to make a nourishing broth for Hakkai. Quickly, she strode back towards the cave, getting wetter and wetter by the minute, but not caring a whit.
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Dokugakuji ran into Kougaji's room where the red haired man was pacing around impatiently. The red haired man was clearly agitated. He whirled around immediately when he heard Dokugakuji's footsteps.
"We found her, Kougaji-sama," said he.
Kougaji leapt towards the taller man eagerly. "You have? How is she? Is she all right? Is she alone?" The relief in his tone was painfully evident.
"She seems fine."
"What do you mean?" asked Kougaji, his eyes narrowed slightly.
"We didn't manage to observe her long. She caught sight of the spy."
Kougaji did not speak for a while, contemplating the situation. "Well, she it would have eventually," he mused aloud. "She's good enough. I trained her well." A gleam of pride came into his eye.
"Umm.. Kou?" Doku said tentatively.
"What?"
"What do you want to do? About Yaone."
"Hmmm," Kougaji's eyes gleamed. "Where is she? I want to go bring her back."
Dokugakuji hesitated. "Kou," he said, uncertain on how to go on.
"What?"
"Don't hurt her again, please. I don't think Yaone can take too much."
"What are you talking about, Doku?"
"Nothing Kou. Forget that I even said anything."
With that, Dokugauji bowed slightly and exited the room leaving Kougaji standing there, confused.
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I've reread the third chapter.seems painfully short..I did some editing and here's the end result.. Ehehhe..didn't do much editing..sorry...distraction*in the form of irritating bf came along*
Chapter 3 (re-edited) Thoughts are now enclosed in ^^
Yaone leaned slightly against the rough stone walls of the cave. She leaned her head on the irregular stone and felt the roughness against the smooth skin on her cheek. It was raining outside. She sighed softly. It seemed to rain continuously now. The heavens had not stopped weeping for three days.
"The sky has seen much to mourn," she whispered faintly to the dark grey clouds above. A lock of purple hair fell down and obscured her vision. She brushed it aside absentmindedly. ^It's so quiet here.^ She stifled back the tears she felt coming. ^It's so lonely, and gloomy.^ Giving herself a mental shake, she straightened and turned around to walk back to the inside of the cave.
She knelt down beside Hakkai's still body and gently brushed back the long brown hair that had matted down on to his eyes. She felt a great wave of gratitude go out to this man. He had helped her more than she could ever imagine. In healing her physical wounds, he had also somehow healed her spiritual ones. Even though the thought of Kougaji still brought a small pain into her heart, she no longer felt herself worthless or deserving of death. Cho Hakkai had shown her, somehow, that life was too precious a thing to just throw away like that. After he had almost killed himself to save her, she could not bear to take her own life and waste his hard efforts.
Coughs racked through his long frame. He choked slightly, and Yaone was all attention. "Hakkai-san?" she asked, concerned.
He whispered weakly, "Water." His lips were cracked and almost bleeding.
Frowning slightly with worry, Yaone reached towards a hollowed out stone she used as a makeshift bowl. She dipped a piece of clean cloth into the clear water inside and gently patted the water onto Hakkai's lips.
He was still too weak to drink. He would choke. Yaone was quite worried about him. Healing her had weakened him to a point that he could barely move without assistance. She swore that she would stay by his side until he had regained his health. She owed him that much. Her heart was torn inside. This man had almost sacrificed his life to save her, and she was deeply touched by what he had done. Guilt raged within her.
She shivered slightly and glanced automatically towards the fire she had built some time ago. It was out. She frowned, displeased with herself. She had not even noticed that. Sighing, she stood up, and stretched slightly. She needed to collect more firewood. Unfortunately, with so much rain, it would be hard to find any dry materials. Berating herself on her carelessness on letting the fire go out, she walked out of the cave into the drenching rain. While looking for stuff to make a fire with, she also searched for certain herbs and plants that she knew were filling and nutritious. Hakkai would need them to hasten his recovery, and she needed to eat too.
Smiling with pleasure when she finally found a rare leaf that she wanted, she didn't realise that she was being watched until she caught a small shadow in the corner of her eye. Dropping the leaf, she spun around, and saw nothing. A few metres away, a small twig cracked. She glanced up just in time to see a small, retreating figure far far away in the treetops.
Narrowing her eyes, she shrugged and bent down to pick up the leaf. With that, and all the other things she had gathered, she had enough to make a nourishing broth for Hakkai. Quickly, she strode back towards the cave, getting wetter and wetter by the minute, but not caring a whit.
~~~~~~~~~
Dokugakuji ran into Kougaji's room where the red haired man was pacing around impatiently. The red haired man was clearly agitated. He whirled around immediately when he heard Dokugakuji's footsteps.
"We found her, Kougaji-sama," said he.
Kougaji leapt towards the taller man eagerly. "You have? How is she? Is she all right? Is she alone?" The relief in his tone was painfully evident.
"She seems fine."
"What do you mean?" asked Kougaji, his eyes narrowed slightly.
"We didn't manage to observe her long. She caught sight of the spy."
Kougaji did not speak for a while, contemplating the situation. "Well, she it would have eventually," he mused aloud. "She's good enough. I trained her well." A gleam of pride came into his eye.
"Umm.. Kou?" Doku said tentatively.
"What?"
"What do you want to do? About Yaone."
"Hmmm," Kougaji's eyes gleamed. "Where is she? I want to go bring her back."
Dokugakuji hesitated. "Kou," he said, uncertain on how to go on.
"What?"
"Don't hurt her again, please. I don't think Yaone can take too much."
"What are you talking about, Doku?"
"Nothing Kou. Forget that I even said anything."
With that, Dokugauji bowed slightly and exited the room leaving Kougaji standing there, confused.
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