Ok thanks for the advice and what not it really was appreciated I do like the fact that you guys will tell me what to do.
Some things I forgot to do:
I'm really bad at remembering to use my commas I'm really sorry
I have a lot of potholes that I meant to fill and so now I will:
Ana is 16, she was kicked out of Beauxbatons cuz she was a trouble maker and she broke the camels back when she accidentally blew half of the wall in the potions room or whatever up and nobody believed her when she said it was an accident. She started cutting after her forth year because of her mothers neglect. She's pretty much based of me except she looks better. Heh, she became addicted to heroin at the age of 15 and cocaine and acid soon followed. Then now where the story begins she gets hospitalized and they fid all that shit in her system. So instead of being like me and going threw the major withdrawals that come with addiction she gets a potion that I totally made up as you can tell from the uncreative name.
Thasnks for my grammer and spelling I like to hear that something's good I think I have a good story but I need to fill in some things I think I got every think oh yeah the reason that Ana was accepted in to Hogwarts is because Dumbledore always tries to see the good in people and she asked him for a second chance and explained her situation he allowed her in but she had to be on good behavior.
Btw I wrote this before the sixth book came of and if he gave Snape a second chance then why wouldn't he give a student a second chance of coarse that was a bit of a mistake. And I didn't like the idea of Sirius dieing so he didn't deal! Lol thanks for the advice
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