I have heaps less homework now so I should be updating more often. Except when I need to change the chapter like the last one I decided the story line was too different from the real one.

R&R Winkler

I appreciate any advice for storylines, structure or just general comments, it's the only way to improve.


Zeke was in the hospital and slowly started to arouse from the deep slumber of drunkness when he saw Susan, Katya and Rachel standing over him.

"What happened?"

Susan answered swiftly, "You drunk a bottle of alchohol which Paul gave Stingray to try and when Stingray left this afternoon it fell out of his bag andlater you drunk it, felt sick and fell unconcious. I found you there and stopped the party Rachel was holdingand rang the hospital".

"What happened with your date?" Zeke's head slowly rolled over to face Katya.

"It was great honey I might see him again soon except this time you will be going to Susan's place".

Dr Karl Kennedy walked in with a uptight brisk walk and mustered Katya, Susan and Rachel out so Zeke could get some rest.

It was at this point that Susan decided that she needed to give a long talk to Katya on responsibility.

She gave Rachel $4 to buy a sandwich from the vending machine and sat down on one of the hospital chairs with Katya.


Stingray walked into the hospital, it was time to have a check up after the mystery illness was 'terminated'. He decided to go get some food because he was starving as Dylan didn't get discounts any more and that was his way of saving money.

He was approachng the vending machine when he saw a beautiful head and immediatly realised that the head belonged to Rachel. He was having some trouble talking to Rachel now as he felt embarrassed when he talked to her. There was a slight confusion within himself as he considered these feelings. She is young he thought, but that doesn't matter because I really love her, or is that like, oh I am so confused, maybe I should talk to her and see how it goes.

"Hey Stingray, I haven't seen you in ages, I really wanted to show you what Katya and I did to my room. We painted in pink and brought someteddy bearsand some Jesse McCartney posters froma really cool op shop".

"Cool". He spoke with less enthusiasm as usual as he realised the age gap.

He was interested in Simple Plan, not Jesse McCartney. He was interested in AFL (EAGLES ROCKespecially Judd)not teddy bears and he preferred green to pink.

The age gap was too large. He went to his check up then went to the Scarlet Bar to find Boyd to ask for his advice.


R&R

Winkler

P.S. For everyone's information EAGLES ROCK after that the cats, crows and dockers. But they are WAY WAY BEHIND