Well, I decided to revise the first chapter, using the suggestions from Katieelessar! I thank you ever so much, Katie! You have really made a difference to the quality of my story!
Eighteen-year-old Obi-Wan Kenobi walked briskly through the corridors of the Temple to join his Master, Qui-Gon Jinn. Qui-Gon had called him on his comlink with the message that the Council wished to speak with them. He turned the corner into the hall leading to the Council Chambers. He saw Qui-Gon standing outside the chambers ahead of him, awaiting the arrival of his Padawan. Qui-Gon greeted him with a smile and pushed the button to open the doors of the chamber. The doors slid open and they entered the room.
"Master Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, good it is that you are here," Master Yoda said in greeting. "Need your assistance, we do."
"The planet of Corellia has requested Jedi assistance," Master Mace Windu added. "The Human population of the planet is beginning to resent the fact that there are other, non-Human species dwelling on the same planet. There are two other species on the planet; the Selonians and the Drall. At present, a mostly Selonian/Drall government is in place, with few Humans. The Humans want more say in Corellia's affairs and are attacking the homes of the Selonians and the Drall."
"Do you have any ideas as to what could be causing this?" Qui-Gon inquired.
"No," Master Yarael Poof answered. "This is an extremely unusual situation for their planet. Actually, there have even been a select few inter-species marriages. Now assassination attempts are being made on Humans who have married outside their species and any children that have resulted from that marriage. Even Princess Caryna, the person in charge of the government, has been a target, primarily because her mother was Selonian and her father Human."
"Even worse, assassination attempts have also been made on Selonian and Drall senators. Fear is spreading through the citizens of the planet," Master Adi Gallia added. Qui-Gon nodded. Everyone in the building knew that fear was the most dangerous emotion, because fear led to the Dark Side.
"When do we leave?" Qui-Gon inquired.
"As soon as you get the information you need from Jocasta and pack the things you'll need," Master Plo Koon responded.
"May the Force be with you," Master Saesee Tiin concluded, dismissing them.
Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan bowed to the Council and left the room.
Jocasta Nu was waiting for them in the Temple Archives room. "So, another diplomatic assignment, huh?" she inquired. Obi-Wan smiled and nodded. She shook her head before beginning.
"Corellia, as I'm sure you've already heard from the Council, is a planet inhabited by three species; Humans, Selonians, and Drall. The three have lived in perfect peace and harmony until now. This is the first sign of any strain between them." She gestured toward a pile of datapads on her desk. Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan picked them up. "May the Force be with you," she wished them.
"Thank you," Obi-Wan said, bowing with Qui-Gon before following him out of the room.
I hope you like the changes!