So my computer had problems, what else is new? This stupid machine has had problems from day one. Oh right read my friend jojochild's story, and on her little page thingy should be the names of my other friends screen names so you can read their stories too! I should be getting their screen names soon. Trust me, there all really good. (Happy now everyone?). Anywho, the guests for this chapter are Nik, Nak, and Flak.

Nik: Hello everybody! Nak, Flak, and I will be doing a running commentary on Ali's adventures!
Flak: I can't wait!

(Just a note: Troti is pronounced like troh-tea not like the trotty movement a horse makes between walking and galloping, and Ocine has a loooooong c and a loooooong i)

Allison just made it to the next city, 19 miles away, when she fainted.

(Nak: Oh come on! My great grandma can walk farther than that!)

When she came to she was curled up in a ball on the sidewalk, and someone was poking her. Allison flicked her eyes up, and made a squinty face at the person who was disturbing her, like a two year old who didn't get her way. Then, when she saw who was poking her, she shut her eyes tightly. One of the people was a girl. She was about 18, (Allison was 19) with red brown hair (natural), in a pony-tail that hung down over one shoulder, and large olive eyes (she was poking Ali). She looked at Ali with a raised eyebrow. The other was a really hot boy. He was about 19, and he had the dirty-blond (mostly brown) hair, slightly spiked, and the same large olive eyes. Allison pretended not to see them both and did the stupidest thing she had ever done in her life.

(Nak: What was it this time….)

Yes, Allison just stayed exactly as she was, eyes shut tight, in her little fetal position, biting her lower lip. She planned to stay there as long as it took for the people to go away, but the girl said "Uhhhh… what are you doing?" Of course, Allison, feeling like a complete idiot stood up and muttered "Hi, I'm Allison Cook."

"I'm Schuyler Troti" said the girl

"I'm Matthew Troti" said the hottie

"Do you need some help?" said Matthew

"Well, yeah, I was wondering if y'all could show me around."

(Nik: The 2nd stupid thing today. I mean come on! "Could you show me around? Has this girl ever been in society before? Flak: Shut up!)

Schuyler, and Matthew glanced at each other and snickered.

"What?" Allison said, embarrassed enough already.

"Y'all?" they said together

"I'm from Texas OK?" she said half screaming half crying

(Nik: Ewwww, Texas shouldn't even be part of the US! Some screaming)

(Me: Nik won't be back anytime soon. (sigh) You just Don't Mess with Texas, it's not good for you… or anyone else around you. He must have a thick skull, I've beat him about that before. I thought I got to his brain by know…)

"OK" Schuyler said slowly "We like you all right?"

Schuyler and Matthew proceeded to pick her up by the arms and lead her around town. Allison soon learned that the town was called Ocine, and there were many guys (that were hot). She was introduced to Aaron, Bret, Cole, Damien, Edward, Fred, Gabriel, Horatio, James, and Leo (Wow! Almost alphabetical order, go back and look) Each of them were cute, and nice, but none of them wanted to live on a farm.

(Nak: Oh great! She just met them and wants to know if they want to live on a farm with her?)(Flak: No you idiot. Haven't you heard of working things into the conversation? Sheesh if you want you're just so direct)

Then, she was shown the social, to-be places around town: the mall (of course!), the best stores in the mall, the restaurants in the mall, and various other things in the mall. They were having the best time in their lives shopping.

"Wow! I've never been to a mall this big before!" Ali said

"Really? This is one of the smallest malls I've ever been in" Schuyler said

"This is the most boring mall I've ever been in" muttered Matt behind the girls back, rolling his eyes.

That was a mistake on Matt's part. Both Ali and Skye (Schuyler's nickname) turned around to glare at him.

"I didn't mean it of course…" Matthew trailed off but it was too late. He ended up in the girl's bathroom being nursed back to health because of the various cuts and bruises. 10 minutes later, Matthew started complaining about the mall, and since the girls didn't want to beat him up again, they went to the video game store and Skye and Ali ended up standing around (because Matt wouldn't let them touch anything), rolling their eyes and sighing while Matt played various systems to test whether they were good enough for him. They all were.

"Ugh! This one's got the best graphics, but this one has the greatest sound effects, and this one has the most, and best games…" he chewed on his lip for a while. "Well, maybe later. Ready to go?"

"Yes! For the third time YES! We were ready to go to two hours ago! We would have left you, but Mom and Dad would of killed me." Schuyler got right up to his face for a more dramatic effect.

"Well why didn't you just tell me?"

"We tried" said Ali, exasperated "You just said 'Sure, soon' every time we asked you."

"Well whatever, let's go" said Matt.

They had let time get away from them (Well more like Matt), and when they stepped out, it was dark. Ali turned to Matt with an un-amused look on her face "You know, it wouldn't be this late if we had left the first time we asked" Matthew just waved her away and kept walking. Suddenly, he turned to Skye "You want to go to The Hill?" (Oh, it's a reference to Our Town!)

"Sure" she said brightening up a bit. "You have to see it" she said to Ali

They were out of the city when they got there, and Ali was beginning to think that they were gonna mug her or something. But eventually, she began to see a huge hill that looked almost like a small mountain with grassy patches all over it. There was a well worn trail leading up to the top, where there was a small plateau. Allison looked up at it with a confused look on her face and a raised eyebrow. "I don't see what's so good about it, it just looks like a bunch of walking to me. I did enough of that today."

"You have to get up to the top" Matt said

Ali just sighed and followed them up to the top. When she got there, the wind was blowing in her face but not to hard. It blew her hair back from her face. The view was picture perfect. She could see trees, flowers and grass, and bunches of hills just like the hill country. She could of sworn that she heard an owl/hawk or something too. Then she turned around. There was also, another amazing view. She could see the city, with the lights on and it looked like she was looking at a postcard. Ali sat down and spent time switching views every 5 minutes. She never wanted to leave. Oh and the sky! It was so full of stars that she could hardly see the sky. "Wow you guys" Ali said "This is amazing"

"Yeah" muttered Matt. "We should probably be getting home."

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OK, well that's it! Again, you have no choice but to review! MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! I've cleverly trapped you in one of my clever traps! I've one again!