I don't think the 1st chapter wasn't very good but I'm hoping to do better in this chapter

At the end of chapter 1 Yoh had just started running home after meeting Silva unexpectinly and then getting threatened of his twin brother Hao

Chapter 2: Near Death, but not

Yoh was running home and because he was running he decided to take a shortcut on the way home he saw Hao, and stayed round the corner. He saw that Hao had the spirit of fire this time and he was killing humans.

Oh my god what am I going to do I can't go past there without Hao spotting me and trying to kill me, Yoh thought.

Yoh started running again this time taking a different shortcut which lead straight to his house. When he got to his house he ran straight inside not bothering to look where he was going he tripped right over the table splashing everyone with food.

"WHAT THE? YOH" everyone shouted.

"You will; pay for this Yoh" Anna said furiously.

"Sorry there is something really important that I have to sort out" Yoh said in an hurried voice.

After Yoh apologized he looked at the time it was 10pm, he knew that if he didn't try and stop Hao soon, something even more terrible will happen. So Yoh went straight into the kitchen and put some rice in the microwave and then he went straight to his bedroom and changed into a pair of trousers with orange seams along with a matching top with orange seams and orange buttons on. Then he went back to the kitchen and got his rice and ate it as fast as he could by the time he had done all this he looked at the clock and it was no 10:15pm.

"Amidamaru. Hao has returned and is now causeing havoc I need your help, come on Amidamaru lets go stop Hao" Yoh demanded

"I'm with you Yoh" said Amidamaru kindly

After getting Amidamary Yoh dashed into the living room grabbed the spirit sword and went straight out of the front door not saying a word to any of the others whom he managed to splash with food when he tripped over the table. The others were all looking at the front door where Yoh had dashed out, without saying a single word.

"Where is he rushing off to" said Ren

"I dunno but it must be to somewhere really important, I've never seen him run like that before and out of his own house not even saying a single word to us before going out the house" Manta said very worried

"I agree Manta it's not like Yoh to do that" Ryu told the others.

"Do you think he's hiding something" said Tamaro.

"Nah he'll let us know anything" Horohoro reassured her.

"It'll be really important official Sharman king busyness" Anna told everyone.

"Yeah but what could be so important that Yoh would just do that and while he was doing his 100 laps to" Manta said panicking.

"I say we try and follow him and find out whats going on. Whos with me?" asked Horohoro.

"I am" all off them replied

"Then lets go" Horohoro demanded

So they all went and followed Yoh to where he was going he was running towards town. The others where all thinking the same thing.

Why would Yoh go into town this time of night. They all thought

When they all got there they found out why Yoh had gone into town. It was because Hao was terrorising people in the town and with Yoh being Sharman King it was his duty to keep the world safe. Yoh got Hao with the saletial slash and then whacked him at full strength with the spirit sword, when he did the sprit of fire grabbed the aword and threw Yoh who still had hold of the sword to the the trees where he fell unconscious. The others saw this happen and rushed out to the rescue. They all struck together apart from Anna, Pirika and Tamaro because they can't really fight like the others can, so Ren, Jun, Horohoro, Lyserg, Ryu, Chcolove and Fauset VIII all attacked together and got thrown away but didn't fall unconscious.

Hao disappeared. They all went to make sure Yoh was alright.

"He's just been knocked out, he'll be OK he just needs to lie down so we better get him home and lie him down on his own bed" Faust VIII told the others.

So they all worked together and took Yoh home when they got him home they layed him down in his bedroom on his futon. Anna got a cold wet flannel and folded it over and placed it upon Yoh's forehead. After Anna had done that they all went to get changed into there night things and went to bed leaving Yoh by himself. Anna on the other hand pretended to the others that she had gone to bed, but when she was sure that everyone was in bed she went back into Yoh's room and sat there watching him while he was layed there in bed unconscious wondering if Yoh would be OK.

Yoh I'm sorry for all that hard training I've put you through, I loved you that much that I didn't realise how you felt and how hard I have been training you. Anna Thought.

"Sorry Yoh, I love you" Anna said to the unconscious Yoh

Anna started crying because she was scared that she was going lose Yoh ended up looking like he had stopped breathing, and Anna panicked and checked his pulse. When she felt that there was no pulse she went straight to get Faust VIII. When she did she was banging on the door for five whole minuets shouting till he answered.

"Anna what do you think your doing waking me up early hours of the morning" Faust VIII said tiredly.

"Sorry but it's Yoh he's lost his pulse" Anna said terrified.

"What? How?" Faust VIII asked in surprised

Faust rushed out of his room and into Yoh's to try and bring him back to life. The others where awake aswell now because of Anna's screaming and shouting and banging.

"Anna whats going on" Manta asked.

"Yoh has lost his pulse" Anna told them all.

"WHAT? NO" They all shouted together.

They all rushed into Yoh's room where Faust VIII was busy trying to bring Yoh back to life, which wasn't going so well. They were all watching Faust VIII trying to bring Yoh back to life. Then Faust VIII gave up.

"Sorry guys. Looks like this is the last of Yoh Asakura. Sorry" Said Faust VIII sadly

"NO YOUR NOT GONNA JUST GIVE UP LIKE THAT ARE YOU" shouted Anna

"Anna I have no choice I can't bring him back I've tried" Faust told a crying Anna sadly

"YOU CAN GIVE UP FAUST YOU'VE GOT TO TRY AGAIN. PLEASE FOR YOH'S SAKE AND THE WORLDS SAKE YOU HAVE GOT TO BRING HIM BACK TO LIFE PLEASE" Shouted Anna

"OK I'll try it one more time, even though I don't think it'll do much use" said Faust VIII sadly

So Faust VIII tried again with not much hope. Anna was crying while everyone else was jus on the verge of crying. This time when the Faust was trying to bring Yoh back to life a great white light shone from somewhere and then all of a sudden unexpectedly Yoh started breathing again and then the great white light disappeared. Yoh still stayed lyeing there unconscious, but now breathing. Everyone apart from Anna went back to bed. Anna just stayed there in Yoh's room watching Yoh.

2 weeks later

Yoh was still unconscious. Everyone apart from Anna was watching TV in the living room.

"Anna must be really worried and upset about Yoh" said Manta depressingly.

"She will be we all are but Anna likes Yoh more than the rest of us do so that means that she'll be suffering by it more than the rest of us." Horohoro said sadly.

"We are all upset about Yoh but we have faith in him which mean that he'll wake up he has to." Ryu told everyone in the room.

"Yeah that's true" Ren agreed.

"Hey but it beats Anna bossing us around even though I'd rather have Anna being bossy to me than Yoh being unconscious" Horohoro confirmed

"Same here" Everyone else in the room agreed.

Just the Anna came into the room.

"And just what do you think your all doing just sitting there" Anna asked them all angrily.

"Were waiting for Yoh to wake up" Horohoro comfirmed.

"Well you can all do your chores while your waiting, Ryu clean the pool, Ren clean the toilet, Faust clean the kitchen, Horohoro clean the bedrooms, Chocolove clean the garden and sort the flowers out and no jokes about it, Manta you go do some cooking I'm not bother what you cook for a meal as long as it's not junk food" Anna demanded everyone.

"Awwww man" Everyone apart from Anna complained.

"WELL WHAT ARE YOU SITTING ABOUT FOR GET TO IT" Anna shouted to everyone.

Evenyone stood up to go clean and Manta to cook.

"Oh and Horhoro don't bother with Yohs room I'll clean that room myself"Anna told Horohoro clearly.

Everyone went to do there chore shocked that Anna was actually going to do some cleaning instead of letting someone else to do that bit of cleaning. Anna went straight to Yoh's room to clean it. She cleaned around Yoh. While cleanng Anna was also crying about Yoh and thinking.

Why won't you wake Yoh. You have got to wake up you jus have to. I love you Yoh, I want you to wake up. Please Yoh please wake up. Anna said to herself in her head.

To Be Continued

That's it till the next chapter if you want to know what happens next you'll have to read the next chapter to find out.

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