Recalling the Spirit
Okay, I'm doing a couple of responses to reviews that I think need commenting on. The rest I will do later. YOUR REVIEWS ARE NOT ANY LESS IMPORTANT! There are just a couple I am itching to answer.
Mysticwolfguardian: HEY! You're back! YAY! Just ignore the person who flamed your story. They're just doing that to hurt you. I'm REALLY glad you like my story! I mean REALLY glad!
porifra: *sigh* Other then the Chihiro going to the death thing, is it okay? ^________^
Aharah Musici: YAY!!! You get an AWARD! You are the first constructive review I have had! Thank you for the advice. From now on, each chapter will focus on one of the two major groups: (Chihiro and Haku) and (Tamiko and Akira). TWO PLOT LINES! Now the story will be more detailed and less brief. Thanks again!
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Tamiko stood still, frozen like a deer in headlights. Her mind told her to run, but her feet were planted. The sounds were coming closer now, and her hands began to shake.
Something was coming.
Closer...
...closer...
....closer...
"AHH..mmmgh." Tamiko screamed, but it was cut short by a hand across her mouth.
"Quiet!" snarled a voice.
Tamiko's eyes lit with rage, and she bit hard into the hand, at the same time elbowing the person in the stomach...hard.
The hand released her, and a muffled 'poof' was heard as the person fell back, winded.
Tamiko turned around, fists in position, to look at her opponent. One of her eyebrows raised, and she dropped her fists.
"You?"
"Me." Akira replied crossly, rubbing where she had hit him. "What was that for?"
"You snuck up on me!"
"I didn't even know it was you!"
"Oh, so you were just in the woods, running like there was no tomorrow, for no reason whatsoever?"
"There was to a reason!"
"Oh YEAH?!?"
They were fighting so loudly, they could not hear the approaching sounds.
"WHAT'S THE REASON THEN!?!" shouted Tamiko, who didn't particularly enjoy being snuck up on, if you couldn't tell.
Akira opened his mouth to bring up a sharp response, but stopped. Something had just crashed through the trees.
"There's your reason."
"WHERE' S SEN? I WANT SEN!" the massive blob demanded. It stood twelve feet high, and, to Tamiko, looked rather harmless.
Tamiko turned to Akira. "Sen?" she questioned. It stirred a memory... Akira shrugged, but still looked horrified. Tamiko rolled her eyes. "What are you afraid of? It's a blob!"
Akira pointed at the stirring lumps in the thing's body. They looked suspiciously shaped, almost like...
Tamiko was at a loss for words. "It...eats..."
Akira swallowed, and began backing up. "Come on!" he hissed at the girl in front of him. But her eyes narrowed, and she aimed a punch at the thing's stomach. Instead of meeting solid flesh, it was almost like...a jelly-like substance. Tamiko withdrew her hand quickly, and took a few steps back, feeling nauseous.
~Stubborn girl.~ Akira would have rolled his eyes, were they in a better situation. If she had only WAITED, he could have told her he had tried that already. He didn't really like this girl, but apparently she was the only human around, and, unfortunately, he needed her help.
Tamiko was thinking along the same lines. ~This STINKS!~
She glared up at the thing, and gasped at what she saw. Resting on the...the...thing's body, was a mask.
She had seen that mask before. In her mother's book! The one she had written, and read to Tamiko when she was younger. The one Tamiko had loved, and begged for every night. Her mother had named it 'No-Face', and it had always given her the chills. "No...way.."
She backed up further, beside Akira, and groaned.
How, in the book, did Sen, her childhood hero, defeat this thing?
No-face reached out, and grabbed Tamiko, picking her up. THAT snapped her into reality.
She began to burn with a raging fire, twisting and turning inside of her. "You've gone to FAR!" she ended in a roar. Fire leapt from her whole body, and burned the ting, forcing it to let go.
She fell to the ground hard, wincing as she felt something, most likely a rock, jab deep into her arm, through the long sleeve T-shirt she wore. She could feel the stickiness of blood already, and stood up.
"NOW we run!" she shouted at the boy behind her. Together they left the scene in a hurry.
"Great help you were." spouted Tamiko, after they had stopped in a grove.
"I never ASKED for your help, if you think back, if, in fact, you think at all! How STUPID could you be? Punching gel!"
"Oh, you're one to talk! You were just STANDING there!"
"Only because I'm not stupid enough to attack something that would eat me whole! Stupid girl!"
"I HAVE a name you know?"
"Oh yeah? You couldn't even think enough to tell me it!"
"TAMIKO! Do you think your puny mind can understand that?"
Akira raised his hands. "I TOLD you mine? Can you remember it?"
Tamiko smiled smugly. "Akira!"
Akira stood up. "You DO have a brain!"
Tamiko rolled her eyes, and smiled. "You know we've known each other for about an hour and already we're at each other's throats?"
Akira snorted. "Probably because our personalities clash so badly."
"Hey, I'm not fighting all night, I'm going to sleep!"
And with great poise, Tamiko lay down, and turned her back to Akira, making a perfect dramatic moment. "Discussion over."
Which was rather spoiled by the rock digging into her back. She sat up abruptly. "Stupid rock." She grumbled, as Akira chuckled.
She tossed it, and winced as pain lanced up her arm from the wound.
Even in the dark, Akira caught the expression. "You okay?"
Tamiko slowly lowered her arm, gave herself a minute to calm herself, and growled. "I'm fine...Akira." she added mockingly. She heard him laugh quietly.
She smiled to herself, thinking she had put on a rather good performance. "Why are you worried?" she adding triumphantly, turning slowly for maximum effect, so she could get him mad.
He was fast asleep.
~I can NOT believe this!~ Tamiko thought to herself. ~I'd probably be better off by myself then with this...'Akira'.
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For some reason I'm GOOD at writing fights. Don't know WHY...
Imput please!
THANKS EVERYONE FOR ALL YOUR REVIEWS! MORE RESPONSES NEXT TIME!
~JO-chan~
Okay, I'm doing a couple of responses to reviews that I think need commenting on. The rest I will do later. YOUR REVIEWS ARE NOT ANY LESS IMPORTANT! There are just a couple I am itching to answer.
Mysticwolfguardian: HEY! You're back! YAY! Just ignore the person who flamed your story. They're just doing that to hurt you. I'm REALLY glad you like my story! I mean REALLY glad!
porifra: *sigh* Other then the Chihiro going to the death thing, is it okay? ^________^
Aharah Musici: YAY!!! You get an AWARD! You are the first constructive review I have had! Thank you for the advice. From now on, each chapter will focus on one of the two major groups: (Chihiro and Haku) and (Tamiko and Akira). TWO PLOT LINES! Now the story will be more detailed and less brief. Thanks again!
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Tamiko stood still, frozen like a deer in headlights. Her mind told her to run, but her feet were planted. The sounds were coming closer now, and her hands began to shake.
Something was coming.
Closer...
...closer...
....closer...
"AHH..mmmgh." Tamiko screamed, but it was cut short by a hand across her mouth.
"Quiet!" snarled a voice.
Tamiko's eyes lit with rage, and she bit hard into the hand, at the same time elbowing the person in the stomach...hard.
The hand released her, and a muffled 'poof' was heard as the person fell back, winded.
Tamiko turned around, fists in position, to look at her opponent. One of her eyebrows raised, and she dropped her fists.
"You?"
"Me." Akira replied crossly, rubbing where she had hit him. "What was that for?"
"You snuck up on me!"
"I didn't even know it was you!"
"Oh, so you were just in the woods, running like there was no tomorrow, for no reason whatsoever?"
"There was to a reason!"
"Oh YEAH?!?"
They were fighting so loudly, they could not hear the approaching sounds.
"WHAT'S THE REASON THEN!?!" shouted Tamiko, who didn't particularly enjoy being snuck up on, if you couldn't tell.
Akira opened his mouth to bring up a sharp response, but stopped. Something had just crashed through the trees.
"There's your reason."
"WHERE' S SEN? I WANT SEN!" the massive blob demanded. It stood twelve feet high, and, to Tamiko, looked rather harmless.
Tamiko turned to Akira. "Sen?" she questioned. It stirred a memory... Akira shrugged, but still looked horrified. Tamiko rolled her eyes. "What are you afraid of? It's a blob!"
Akira pointed at the stirring lumps in the thing's body. They looked suspiciously shaped, almost like...
Tamiko was at a loss for words. "It...eats..."
Akira swallowed, and began backing up. "Come on!" he hissed at the girl in front of him. But her eyes narrowed, and she aimed a punch at the thing's stomach. Instead of meeting solid flesh, it was almost like...a jelly-like substance. Tamiko withdrew her hand quickly, and took a few steps back, feeling nauseous.
~Stubborn girl.~ Akira would have rolled his eyes, were they in a better situation. If she had only WAITED, he could have told her he had tried that already. He didn't really like this girl, but apparently she was the only human around, and, unfortunately, he needed her help.
Tamiko was thinking along the same lines. ~This STINKS!~
She glared up at the thing, and gasped at what she saw. Resting on the...the...thing's body, was a mask.
She had seen that mask before. In her mother's book! The one she had written, and read to Tamiko when she was younger. The one Tamiko had loved, and begged for every night. Her mother had named it 'No-Face', and it had always given her the chills. "No...way.."
She backed up further, beside Akira, and groaned.
How, in the book, did Sen, her childhood hero, defeat this thing?
No-face reached out, and grabbed Tamiko, picking her up. THAT snapped her into reality.
She began to burn with a raging fire, twisting and turning inside of her. "You've gone to FAR!" she ended in a roar. Fire leapt from her whole body, and burned the ting, forcing it to let go.
She fell to the ground hard, wincing as she felt something, most likely a rock, jab deep into her arm, through the long sleeve T-shirt she wore. She could feel the stickiness of blood already, and stood up.
"NOW we run!" she shouted at the boy behind her. Together they left the scene in a hurry.
"Great help you were." spouted Tamiko, after they had stopped in a grove.
"I never ASKED for your help, if you think back, if, in fact, you think at all! How STUPID could you be? Punching gel!"
"Oh, you're one to talk! You were just STANDING there!"
"Only because I'm not stupid enough to attack something that would eat me whole! Stupid girl!"
"I HAVE a name you know?"
"Oh yeah? You couldn't even think enough to tell me it!"
"TAMIKO! Do you think your puny mind can understand that?"
Akira raised his hands. "I TOLD you mine? Can you remember it?"
Tamiko smiled smugly. "Akira!"
Akira stood up. "You DO have a brain!"
Tamiko rolled her eyes, and smiled. "You know we've known each other for about an hour and already we're at each other's throats?"
Akira snorted. "Probably because our personalities clash so badly."
"Hey, I'm not fighting all night, I'm going to sleep!"
And with great poise, Tamiko lay down, and turned her back to Akira, making a perfect dramatic moment. "Discussion over."
Which was rather spoiled by the rock digging into her back. She sat up abruptly. "Stupid rock." She grumbled, as Akira chuckled.
She tossed it, and winced as pain lanced up her arm from the wound.
Even in the dark, Akira caught the expression. "You okay?"
Tamiko slowly lowered her arm, gave herself a minute to calm herself, and growled. "I'm fine...Akira." she added mockingly. She heard him laugh quietly.
She smiled to herself, thinking she had put on a rather good performance. "Why are you worried?" she adding triumphantly, turning slowly for maximum effect, so she could get him mad.
He was fast asleep.
~I can NOT believe this!~ Tamiko thought to herself. ~I'd probably be better off by myself then with this...'Akira'.
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For some reason I'm GOOD at writing fights. Don't know WHY...
Imput please!
THANKS EVERYONE FOR ALL YOUR REVIEWS! MORE RESPONSES NEXT TIME!
~JO-chan~
