All offset
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Pools of blood, darts of blame,
Red fences in my shield.
Then; thunder, fire and wind,
The end of war, the dawn of fame...
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Bloodied hand, dreams of shame,
Drenched heart in crimson nights,
Ideals all long died;
Loyalty's my sole asset.
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Winged mount of a knight,
Rememberance of a mate
In her smile, on this night;
Loyal thoughts all offset...
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Note: the second chapter has been removed and the story, drastically reduced to these haikus.
From the moment I posted the original fiction, I have become very aware of my English, and couldn't look at it anymore without cringing, both because of it's terrible grammar and the total absence of plot or originality.
I haven't totally lost interest in Kent and Fiora's dynamics, throught and I am very grateful for all of the (extremely) kind reviews I received from you all. Thank you very much...
