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Disclaimer: I do not own Artemis Fowl but I do own this story
Three weeks later Artemis stood five miles from his destination drinking his finest water available in a bottle.
At this same time Mandi and George stood the same distance to the north of their destination drinking some of the cheapest stuff that could be found.
"This water tastes like plastic." Said Artemis.
"This water tastes like plastic!" moaned George.
"I told you to buy some of the other water. You might have liked it better." prompted Mandi.
"Why aren't you drinking it then?"
"Because I choose to save some money, I don't know."
"SAVE...MONEY? Are you kidding?"
Mandi sighed, rolled her eyes and looked back to the map that was on the table.
"Go ahead and buy different water then." She said, uninterested.
He looked at the bottle in his hand. Mandi was touchy when it came to money.
They were looking at a map of Sundance, Wyoming and surrounding areas. The hill they were looking for wasn't marked on the map, but they knew where it was.
There were land mines hidden in the ground of Wyoming which became more numerous the closer you got to their destination, "Mole Hill." The land mines weren't much of a threat. They weren't even activated. They were to try to keep Fowl away enough for him to be apprehended. Mandi doubted it would be that easy.
As far as she could tell, Artemis was still being pompous and hadn't tried to conceal his position since it had been so easy to find him. Mandi had a feeling that either Artemis had lost his mind, or he had something up his sleeve. The later was probably true.
Mandi had done a lot of tiring research the past three weeks but had come away with only cryptic riddles and bedtime stories.
Five miles south of Mole Hill.
Artemis didn't much care what the name of the site was called, he hadn't troubled himself on a name but instead looked at what was needed to get to and leave with this device.
When the hill appeared on the horizon Artemis brought out a small device that he placed over his eyes. They looked like sunglasses because that is what they doubled as. Artemis could now see several devices that had been placed under the earth and seemed to be more close together as they neared the hill. Artemis did not bother stopping. He could see easily that these were there for scare and had not been activated.
As the bump on the horizon grew to a hill, Artemis busied himself with his laptop. He could not see anything below the surface of the hill which led him to believe that something in it did not want to be found. As men started to dig on his orders a dot on the horizon caught Artemis's attention.
Picking up a pair of binoculars Artemis could distinguish a group of men walking toward them. Artemis went to his laptop and brought up a program he had designed himself.
"You forgot something, Miss Huttle." He said as he clicked an icon on the screen.
Meanwhile
There was an explosion at the rear of the team that shook the ground and surrounded the back half of the group in a whirl or dust.
"We are under fire!" Someone called. "Hold your positions!" Why did people insist on her talking like that?
She had to hold in a low growl. "Stupid stupid stupid stupid stupid." she said to herself. OF COURSE Fowl could activate her mines, she could do it, she had designed many programs the same purpose, how had she overlooked that?
Another mine went of about thirty feet to the right, causing more dust to swirl around in the air, making it harder to see.
Mandi hadn't liked this idea in the first place. She was supposed to be in charge but someone at the company found out and started giving orders. Did they really think that they could just walk up next to Fowl? See if she ever took any of their orders for the Fowl case again.
"Fall back!" she yelled, but people were already panicking. Why did they have her talk like that?
"Mandi!" George called from horseback. "We have to get to that mountain."
"I know, I know!" they didn't need all of this extra baggage.
"George! Tell everyone to back up about forty feet and you follow me!" George turned around and went to tell the men what to do as Mandi searched the horizon with her binoculars. There were men working on the hill and a tent was being put up, one looked like it was the mess hall and the other a luxury tent complete with shaded porch area and air conditioning.
"You've got to be kidding me." She muttered. A few minutes later she was joined by George who, she could tell, was ready for action.
"Follow me." She said, though it was unneeded. If she had decided to go get a drink of water he would have followed, expecting some brilliant piece of information.
They set their horses on a gallop when George realized and slowed to a trot."The dust will give us away too soon!"
"Maybe we should take one horse, we can't help the dust but that would reduce it." George nodded and they moved their horses closer so that Mandi could switch saddles.
They began to ride as fast as they could, trying not to overheating the horse.
"What exactly are we going to do?" asked George over his shoulder.
"Mr. Fowl has a laptop that set off those mines. How much do you want to bet that by getting that we can slow him down?"
"Uh...huh...and you think he isn't going have his paws on it 24/7?"
They rode on in silence for a while as the hill and men became bigger and closer.
At Mole Hill
Artemis was satisfied with two mines being set off. The dot on the horizon had stayed the same size for quite sometime. After a quarter hour had passed he checked again and saw nothing had changed, it seemed that the dust was settling and-
Dust didn't take that long to settle. Artemis grabbed his binoculars and swung around to find two figures galloping toward him on horseback. Artemis smiled as he leaned over to his laptop and activated a few more mines.
Meanwhile on horseback
A ground shaking boom that kicked up dust told Mandi and George that they had been found. The horse reared, nearly throwing Mandi off. George led the horse around the dust cloud and continued to gallop still in the direction of the camp. Another mine went off behind them and then one to their right that sent the horse and riders flying.
All three landed hard on the ground, the horse jumped up and galloped off.
Mandi sat up first and noticed the horse was gone. George sat up as Mandi was dusting herself off.
"If Mr. Fowl notices the horse has no riders then he may send men to find us. If we get lucky and he doesn't notice that we are not on the horse, then we may have a chance to get the laptop still."
"Uhuh." Said George, still dazed. Mandi walked over to him and checked that he didn't have a concussion.
"I think your ok, just shaken up."
"Uhuh." seemed to be all he could get out. Mandi brought out some water and towel from her backpack and, moistening the towel, put it on George's forehead.
"We can stay here for a little bit, hold this here." George obediently put his hand on the towel to keep it in place.
2 a.m.
Artemis had been satisfied when he saw the horse ride off, thinking its riders were with it he had not sent out anyone. When the horse's dot met the other dot on the horizon, they soon left the area, leaving Artemis to his work for now.
Artemis had just finished putting a security system on the mines so that no one else could use his idea against him and try to interrupt his sleep. Butler was to sleep in the room next to him in the luxury tent, complete with comfortable cots and fresh fruit for their enjoyment. Artemis fell asleep and was comfortably dreaming when the flap on his tent was pushed back and the figure of a teenage girl came noiselessly in and paused.
Artemis's laptop was closed and sitting on a table near the owner's bed, unprotected but by the sleeper's ability to hear. As Mandi walked over to the laptop Artemis rolled over in his sleep, causing the girl to pause again for fear of waking him. Mandi reached for the laptop and was surprised when Artemis's hand slammed onto it first, almost knocking into hers.
"Who's there?" Artemis said in a sleepy confused voice. Mandi could tell he was sleep talking. She assessed the possible ploys that could be used. All she had to do was keep him quiet so that Butler didn't come rushing in.
Mandi sat down gently on Artemis's bed. "It's me Arty, Mommy."
"Mother?" was Artemis's innocent reply.
"Please call me Mommy dear, even Mom would be nice. I came in to check on you. I didn't mean to wake you." She reached out her hand toward him and paused, she didn't want to touch him and wake him but she thought it would be more convincing. She placed her hand in his hair and gently brought it down the side of his face, trying to make it seem motherly. He seemed to calm down and brought his hand away from the laptop, falling to sleep again.
"Goodnight Arty." She whispered, glancing at the tent flap, expecting to see Butler's shadow.
"Goodnight Mother." He whispered back.
Mandi sat there for a moment before taking her hand away and getting up. She could make out the shadow of the sleeping Butler through the tent door, so she decided she was safe. She gently picked up the laptop and began to leave silently, praying that Artemis didn't wake up again.
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