A/N Ah chapter 13 the ending of the original Chapter 2, I added a bit more and changed a few things so have at thee, Chapter 13: A Proposal!

Edit: Changed the Chapter Number


Chapter 13: A Proposal


Back on Tython, Master Surik's ability to control her emotions any further was lost. This was due to one of the two corpses that were recovered, it was a friend she trusted dearly. Though, her heart ached even further as she held the sword of someone even more on her belt.

Walking through the temple she felt somberly isolated once again, thinking, am I cursed to lose everyone I care about? first I lose Atton, Bao Dur, Mira, and Visas. then I'm tossed on to Remnant where I make some new friends. then I can't contact my friends on Remnant when I get brought back here then I lose Revan, by the force Revan. but get to go back to Remnant have a family, a family no one could harm, only to get stripped away again. now my friends and family from Remnant are coming here, this is awful. I have to let her know, she deserves to know.Meetra concluded as she walked towards the training yards, Qrow's scroll in hand still open to the message from Ozpin briefing him on the situation at the Vytal festival. Her worst fear confirmed all of her friends and family including the most precious thing she held dear, Ruby, her daughter was in this galaxy and she was injured. Though, there was nothing she could do. They were now cast like dice into this galaxy at war. This was not a fact Surik was taking well.

Her legs wanted to give out and allow her to collapse to the floor. Though she realized she needed to steel herself. Tears streaming down her face as she continued, her hand loosely trying to grip the wall to support herself. Steeling herself, she managed to continue on.


Back in Malserik's study, Ruby and Weiss were discussing the situation at hand, while taking in the sight of the city of Hiskal at night as the snow fell. The view through the panoramic window was amazing to say the very least. Showing the skyline of the secluded city, the lights from the streets gleaming upward Even from this distance they saw people in the streets celebrating something. They were partying in the streets something that seemed quite odd considering how Malserik told them how disgusting this empire was.

"I wonder what they are celebrating," Weiss asked seeing the celebration. The people down below looked truly happy, rejoicing in the streets as the snow fell on them. They looked like laborers and factory workers. Though to Weiss, some looked like Miners, a look she knew well from some of her former families facilities.

"No idea, but they look happy down there," Ruby said with a bit of cheer in her voice, she still looked weird to Weiss without her cloak on. But they were happy to see that this empire wasn't darkness twenty-four seven.

"That they do," Weiss responded as she looked down on the crowd. She was really curious what had got them in the street like this. From above, it reminded the girls of a new years party in Downtown Vale.

"So what do you think of our situation, Weiss?" Ruby asked crossing her arms as she looked out the window at the falling snow and her own reflection in the glass.

"Interesting to say the best," Weiss spoke, as she crossed her arms while Ruby unclipped her saber from her belt and started to fidget with it, as Weiss replied with, "horrifying at the worst," Weiss admitted if this all went wrong this situation would be properly scary.

"Well, what do you think of this force stuff?" Ruby said with a bit of a shrug. The unignited saber hilt still in her gauntleted hand.

"If what Malserik said is true, then these abilities cannot be ignored," Weiss spoke calmly to Ruby, reasoning that these new abilities were very important," We need to master them."

"Maybe Malserik could teach us how to use them?" Ruby suggested calmly as she trusted the man so far, he had done nothing to hurt them, and only seemed to want to help them.

"Yes, though I don't feel comfortable working for this 'Empire'," Weiss said clearly, not liking the idea of a tyrannical empire being her masters.

"Neither do I but what choice do we have?" Ruby sighed, as her long repressed optimism shined through once again when she continued, "Besides, we could make the Empire a better place, Weiss, and Malserik doesn't seem like the kind of man who could go around terrorizing people."

"Well, you think we could?" Weiss paused to think for a moment. "Change this place?"

"Yes, I think we could," Ruby smiled in her optimism, Something Weiss had not seen since before the incident, "and we can give hope and help to the people of this empire, we could be its heroes."

"So, you think he will take us under his wing?" Weiss asked Ruby to see what she thought. Ruby took a second before replying.

"I may be wrong, but I think that may have been what he was going for," Ruby spoke looking back out the window. She was hoping she wasn't wrong about her prediction, "Why else would he tell us all he has already."

"I guess your right, I thought he was just being nice," Weiss admitted with her eyes wide still amazed at how Ruby managed to perceive this from the conversation.

"Normal people don't tell us things like the Jedi murdered their family," Ruby said her nerves a bit on edge with the idea, but she felt like her trust wasn't misplaced considering the things she had been told by Malserik.

The door slid open and Malserik returned to the room with a smile on his face. Noting the girls were standing looking out the window. "Enjoying the view?" He asked, walking up to the Duo.

"Yeah it's an interesting city," Weiss replied as she looked back down at the streets, as the crowd hung up banners and various decorations, showing this was not a planned event, "why are they celebrating?"

"They are celebrating because of the massive bonus everyone received for increasing the cities gross production level by twenty-five percent," Malserik said with a smile that showed how proud he was running this city, "due to the surplus accumulated by the production increase, I ordered fifty percent of the excess profit to be divided equally between the populous of the city, even the slaves got a cut as per my order. The total for each citizen was five-hundred credits, it isn't that much but it's enough"

"Well, that's kind of you," Weiss said calmly she smiled as this, the people seemed to be enjoying themselves. She could never imagine her father doing such a thing, and Malserik said this like it wasn't the first time he had done this.

"We are a city built on heavy industry, but this city in many opinions is one of the nicest cities to live in, in this empire," Malserik said proudly as he looked out over his domain. Watching the populous merrily going about in the streets.

"Really?" Weiss said slightly in disbelief. Normally industrial cities were less than stellar places to live on Remnant, especially if it was a Schnee mining town.

"We are number one in a lot of areas, making this a very desirable place to live." Malserik explained calmly, not looking away from the view "and that's because I'm not a self-indulging tyrant, and if you do your part here you have nothing to fear from me, and if young idiot apprentices waltz right into my city and terrorize my people, I have been known to deal with them accordingly."

"So you're the peacekeeper?" Weiss asked though she was concerned with the way he said he 'deals with the 'Idiot' apprentices accordingly.'

"Yes, you could say that, though most call me a necessary evil, as I don't conform to the ways of the Empire but you remove me from this city, it will fall apart. I run this city on respect, not fear, unlike my counterparts, who do the opposite. You earn my respect, you have nothing to fear," Malserik smiled, giving out one of his views that many Sith would say is wrong to a Nth.

"Well Malserik you have earned Weiss and I's respect," Ruby said in a way that surprised Malserik, it was truthful.

"He has earned our respect Ruby, you Dolt," Weiss spoke correcting her rosy friend's flawed sentence. Despite how intelligent Ruby was, she still had some work to go with speech.

"Well I'm surprised, considering the way you looked at me when I told you about the Empire that I'm a part of," Malserik replied shocked as he predicted he would have to convince these girls to stay, though these words felt soft and gentle, their meaning true, he did have their respect.

"You are not like them, Malserik and I can see that," Ruby smiled, taking the feeling's she was getting from him seriously, Malserik smiled lightly as those words meant a lot to him.

"Yes, I have to agree with Ruby here, you don't match how you described them," Weiss said calmly, trusting in Ruby's judgment.

"Well that's good to hear," Malserik spoke with some joy in his voice, "makes my next question a bit easier."

"May I - I mean, we ask a question first?" Ruby said with her nerves causing her to stumble verbally as Malserik turned to face them and give his reply.

"Sure? go ahead," Malserik responded, unsure what type of question they were going to ask that would make them this nervous.

"Well you said this force thing requires a lot of skill to control and use," Weiss spoke, her voice also nervous but more in control than Ruby's voice.

"I did say that," Malserik said bluntly, as he did say that. He tapped his foot as he looked down at the girls, quite curious what they were trying to say.

"Um, well we were wondering..." Ruby paused, she and Weiss continued in a creepy, extended synchronization. "Could you train us how to use it?"

"One does not simply train to use the force." Malserik said almost deflating the girls, though he continued with, "most would say you have to dedicate your lives to apply it effectively. Normally you two would be assigned as an apprentice to a master in the Academy on Korriban. that's if you survive long enough to get a master." Malserik added with a smirk, he was toying with them, while trying to make them understand how lucky they were going to be."But, I know the fire that burns in your hearts, so I hereby offer you two a place as my apprentices." Malserik proclaimed, proudly announcing this.

Ruby and Weiss smirked and looked at each other for a few seconds then returned their view to Malserik. "We accept your offer," they answered in unison. With that Malserik smiled, he had his first apprentices.

"Well, then we have a lot of work to do to get you two trained. So let's get you accommodated here, your training will begin tomorrow," Malserik said with a smile, as after he got them settled in he had to contact Imperious as things progressed quite quickly.

"Also what was your question?" Weiss inquired, out of curiosity, as he did not seem interested in asking it now.

"You two just answered it," Malserik smiled, proving he had planned to take them on as his apprentices. With this Malserik continued, still smiling, "Come on I will show you to your rooms." Malserik said pleasantly


Walking over to the windows overlooking the sparring grounds Meetra saw the flurries of blades of padawans practicing their velocities through tear filled eyes. Blue and green blades clashing and whirring through the air as masters walked between the controlled sparring, analyzing the form and posture of the padawans. This intense training was to get more Jedi ready for a war that was inevitable, as long as the Sith existed. Meetra had spotted her two Padawans sparring away two purple blades against a yellow saber staff. Their velocity was full paced blade contact. Walking slowly down the stairs to the room she heard the buzzing and humming of the blades as one young padawan misplaced his foot falling blade first towards the white-clad Jedi master.

Instinctively, Meetra grabbed one of her two lightsabers and parried the falling padawan's blue lightsaber away with the silver blade of energy. After the moment passed, Meetra disengaged her weapon and mounted it back on her belt as the padawan began apologizing profusely, Meetra said,

"It's okay young one, no harm, no foul," She smiled with a feigned smile as the padawan got back on his feet. Meetra continued on before he could see her face which she pulled her hood further down to cover her puffy eyes from view. The song of sabers clashing, their crackles and sparks filling the room with noise. Though after passing a few other practicing padawans, she saw her padawan dueling, the one with the purple blades had blonde hair that was chopped in one fell swoop at the back of her neck, and wore a revealing brown robe that kept her cool and allowed for maximum freedom of movement, along with her signature yellow bracelets that contained a dastardly secret. this young woman was her padawan.

The one with the yellow saber staff wore a similar robe but less revealing and hers was black and white with some accents of purple, her black hair was tied into a ponytail at the back, while two prominent feline ears topped her head, She was taken under Satele Shan's wing to become a Jedi Shadow. Though, one trait was shared between them, the braid of hair on the right side of their head.

"Padawans we need to talk," Meetra addressed them on her approach. With lilac and yellow eyes on her, she continued with, "In private." With that word spoken and seeing the master's face they both deactivated their blades and walked to her quarters together.


Elsewhere in the galaxy in the tombs of Korriban, three Sith acolytes journeyed to the tombs after the massive disturbance in the force subsided. training blades at the ready as they entered the tomb of Marka Ragnos, knowing the perils their masters put them through they stood ready to face any foe. The tomb seemed relatively clear as they went through the depths the ancient Sith carvings on the wall mystified the young acolytes.

Though, as they proceeded they saw a strange sight, a girl dressed in black, kneeling in meditation. Her hair as red as the Imperial banner. They looked around in the chamber and saw the bodies of three other acolytes. Any supplies they carried were scraped off their bodies and organized at the base of a ruined statue nearby. The bodies of the acolytes were arranged in a way that seemed to be at least showing respect for the dead. They also smelled cooking flesh looking over they found a fire started with k'lor'slug meat on it. In front of her rested a two-pronged staff made of a black metal with wrappings and gold accents along it away from the jagged prongs on the other end, it terminated in a sword like hilt.

"Who are you, identify yourself!?" one of the acolytes yelled at the meditating girl. She did not respond, most likely deep in thought or pondering. After a few second that felt like hours to the acolytes, the girl spoke, but not to them, "Yes, I know they are there," She said coldly to a voice they did not hear. standing up she faced the three acolytes her skin already showing the pallor of the dark side, her eyes blaring the thick sulfuric yellow that was known of the dark side.

Frightened, the acolytes charged her only to be cut down by quick lightsaber strikes. The first had his chest sliced open, the second had his gut impaled whilst being disarmed, the third managed to try and parry her but it was a feint to open his defense to her red lightsaber, which found itself in the last acolyte's forehead. As the silence fell in the chamber the girl relaxed disengaging her lightsaber. To the girl's ears, there was a thundering applaud as she looked out seeing the spirits of those long dead. Tapping the bottom of the scepter on the ground the girl focused residual energy from the six corpses. After doing that a ghostly specter that most would call a demon approached the girl, claiming she was doing well. Smiling the girl sat back down to listen to the specters and their teachings.

With that, a stone pillar raised from the floor behind her. She told to use the force to access its secrets. Opening the pillar with her thoughts it exposed a red three-sided pyramid shaped object. It was topped with something the girl found so beautiful. It was topped with a magma orange burning hot crystal that was cracked, despite this imperfection she still saw the beauty and power in the crystal. Holding the pyramid in hand, the crowd of spirits chanted in repetition,

"Open it! Open it! Open it Noxcaedis!"


On a distant world, known as Tatooine, a battle in the sands was raging. A black-clad girl with a lightsaber was dueling with a beast that no person in their right mind would dare face, a surfaced Greater Krayt Dragon. So much larger than her as a person, she was not the only one to be involved with this spectacle, the local clan of sand people was watching in awe as this girl fought this beast. The sand people saw the girl fall from the sky and she was now wandering the sands away from their mesa. when she was almost engulfed by the creature. She evaded its maw as the creature surfaced, and she engaged the creature in mortal combat.

Leaping up one of its ten, powerful legs, the furious redhead slashed it open with her crimson blade. While still leaping up the beast, she laid in cut after insignificant cut with her blade. Jump after jump, the sand people watched as the dragon became ever much more annoyed with the pest making its way to its back. The girl's yellow eyes saw the situation differently as she got onto the back of the creature.

Feeling the spine below the flesh, she buried the glowing blade into the creature's spine. The creature screamed out in a booming agony. As she did this as it reared up into the sky, though this did not deter the attacker. Eclipsing the sun for the onlookers, they saw the silhouette of the girl climbing up the creature's spine towards the neck and the head, her blade still buried in the beast's spine. The blade dragging along, slicing the dragons vertebrae open grazing and disrupting the spinal cord along the way.

Upon reaching the head of the great beast. Looking down, She saw glowing red cracks in the top of the screaming beasts head, aiming for the center of the cracks she buried the blade into the skull of the creature, killing it instantly. As the creature toppled to the ground she rode the head down to the sand. A tinge of remorse came over her, as she felt an attraction to the beasts belly area like something was calling to her.

Excavating the giant carcass she found the gizzard where the call was coming from. As she opened it she saw the most beautiful things in her life, Pearls, some the size of her head though a small one about the size of a marble held her interest it was glowing pink out of the bluish green glow of the others. She tucked the pink pearl in her pocket with what remained of her equipment. Cutting what remained of her cloak to form a makeshift sack to put the pearls in, she was interrupted by chanting outside the carcass, chanting in a language she could not comprehend they cried, "Maiden of War! Maiden of War!" Repeating vigorously as she climbed out of the carcass to face them holding a pearl in hand. Holding it up so the men in rags could see. With this, they kneeled before her, as they viewed her as a divine gift, and a sand person despite her not being one of them.


Elsewhere in a dark corner of the galaxy, a figure who removed himself far from the galaxy. he felt the disturbances in the force. They were like the ones four months prior, though this one carried connotations, dark connotations for the galaxy. He stood up with his rusted brown droid behind him. Standing, he mounted the signature red mask to his face giving his identity, Revan. He had one goal in his mind, he had to find 'her'.


Returning to Drommund Kaas, Malserik had led the girls to their quarters. Though their quarter's resembled a small apartment more than just a bedroom. Complete with a small kitchen, dining table for two, full bathroom with a tub and shower along with the other amenities, and a bedroom with a large bed with a walk in closet. Malserik explained that these 'Rooms' were the guest rooms. They were completely furnished and quite luxurious. The red and white coloration of the room and its surrounding worked perfectly for them. Though, this did prompt one new question, who the hell stayed in these rooms?

Ruby vaulted over the couch, plopping down on the white cushions. While Weiss watched looking out into space. It was hitting her like a brick, just hours ago they were on Remnant, fighting Cinder, and now they were apprentices to a man on another planet. She had no time to truly comprehend the situation. Which only caused her to mutter,

"What the hell happened?" Weiss spoke thinking aloud about the situation they were in. Which caused Ruby to look back at her white-haired girlfriend.

"What's the matter, Weiss?" Ruby looked back with her head cocked at Weiss who snapped out of her shocked trance when Ruby spoke.

"It's just... You know, I am just trying to wrap my head around what is going on," Weiss spoke stuttering at first as she collected her thoughts. Her mind was spinning, she was drowning in her thoughts as this change was so sudden.

"I get what you mean, though I think we may have it better here than we ever would have on Remnant," Ruby said to Weiss as she stood and walked over to her, putting her gauntleted metal hand on her counterpart's shoulder to ease her nerves. "Weiss we are in this together, that is all I care about," Ruby smiled as her voice was soothing to the former heiress.

"With all that we learned, I mean your mom was a Jedi," Weiss replied still in shock over that fact, a fact that got her thinking about which off her parents were Jedi. Though it was at that moment Ruby's thoughts started going at full speed. My mom was a part of that organization! The one person I truly looked up to was part of that. There was part of her mind that tried rationalizing this though her view of her mother was cracked and flawed now.

"That she was," Ruby grumbled, as she released Weiss's shoulder, Weiss could tell by the way Ruby was tensing up she was livid.

Ruby then burst out with, "I wonder when she planned to take me?! When would she have told me the truth!? Did my dad know?! did Qrow know?! Or would she have left me to discover this on my own! Am I wrong to think this is something I should know?" Ruby ended her loud rant with a question to Weiss, though this one was spoken with more sadness than anger.

"Ruby, I think you should have been privy to this information," Weiss spoke solemnly as Ruby started sobbing as the cracks in the "supermom" started to get deeper and wider.

"At least I have you, Weiss," Ruby spoke her voice soft as she faintly smiled.

"Well I think we should get some sleep, Our training starts tomorrow," Weiss stated as she took off her belt and boots, which Ruby did the same though Ruby threw a quick joke as they walked towards the bedroom.

"Yeah, let's hope he doesn't fling us off a cliff." Ruby snarked, as the initiation to beacon was one of the most ridiculous things in her life, that poor bird.


A/N: Well, first off with this chapter's upload I have removed the old chapters as promised. Now I am going to say the next two chapters may take a bit longer than these ones I have been uploading as they are going to be almost entirely new, so expect it to take a wee bit longer. As always I want to know what you guys think of this reworking. Also about a few things I changed I wanted Ruby to hold even more animosity towards her mother, and I find her finding out at this time to be more appropriate and better to have it earlier. As for Summer, I decided to really kick her down a bit harder this time.

Like I used to do, next chapter will be a more thorough look into the light side of the force.

Also to celebrate this part of the Rewrite I found myself in the saber workshop again, so go check out my deviant art for it, (I am not going to link it directly here, as it does contain a slight spoiler to chapter 14)

On that Bombshell, back to th- I mean Everyone have fun, stay safe and may the force be with you!