Battles
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Tawny the Noctowl vs. Magma the Magmar
The two pokemon glared at each other from their corners itching to bring the other down. The announcer cried, "Now these two are on their first ring fights. So in the red corner we have level 20 Tawny the Noctowl and in the blue corner we have also level 20 Magma the Magmar. Now have a nice clean fight. Begin".
Tawny quickly speed upwards until all Magma saw was a brown dot. Magma tried to blow a flame wheel at Tawny but the circles of fire fell a few metres short. Bits of fire useless rained down scorching the ground.
Magma tried to come up with a way to reach Tawny but while he was thinking Tawny swooped down digging her beak into his stomach. He fell back a couple of feet before hitting the ground with a thud. Using quite a bit of energy he pushed himself up. While he was pushing himself up Tawny was preparing for another attack.
Tawny sped towards Magma. Just before Tawny's beak slammed into Magma's flesh he thrust a flaming fist into Tawny's feathery midsection.
Tawny squawked before plummeting to the ground. Magma stood over Tawny about to hit it with an ember. Tawny stared into his eyes and started a strange squawk. Magma dropped like a bag of potatoes asleep. Tawny almost seemed to smile as she swooped down pecking at him.
After a while of pecking Magma jumped up. He breathed out thick black smoke to escape Tawny. Flapping her wings madly Tawny blew the smokescreen away. She scanned the ring but couldn't seem to see Magma. Then a red shape jumped out from behind her and landed on her back.
Tawny squawking and flying around erratically trying to rid herself of the fire pokemon on her back but he clung tightly his tiny claws digging into her feathers. Soon Tawny began to tire out and she flew sloppily. Magma took this to his advantage and breathed a long flamethrower onto the back of Tawny's neck. The flames hit Tawny's and feathers started to fall. He only stopped blowing flames when Tawny dropped like a brick. As she fell she flipped over and before Magma could jumped yo safety he was pushed into the ground. Surprisingly both walked away from it.
Both stood glaring at each other wait for the other to hit. Magma flinched and fell to his knees before keeling over. Moments afterwards Tawny fell landing in a big feathery heap. The referee walk up to both of them. "One… Two… Three. It's a draw," he cried.
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