Chapter 4
random dude #386 1, anon.
I'm sorry but this is one big mess. I read the entire thing and a lot of times it's hard to tell what is going on. Your writing is only decent, and the characters are "slop". It's an interesting idea to combine the two (although one is a piece of trash, coughNARUTOcough, and one is only decent) I have to say this one of the worst fanfics I've ever had the displeasure of reading. Due to your pathetic way you set this up , it's hard to tell what the hell is going on. Also it's mostly dialouge, it's not a bad thing nessicerily, but when half of that is stuff that no one can understand, or chessy rip-off batman sound effects, I have to say it is quite annoying.
Now, this isn't the worst fic. ever. The worst I've ever had the displeasure of reading was a Evangelion fic. in which Shinji decides to kill everyone at Nerv, for no particular reason. Infact it was only two sentences long! In short; it was a big piece of crap.
If you were to re-write this so what is actually going on would make more sense, then this would pass off as a decent fic. until then, this is utter trash.
This is the most accurate review of my fic to date! What does that say of my author skills then? That I don't care about you random dude #386. Actually no…
Genma Saotome knew to expect very little from the only practizing martial artist of the Tendo household. She even moved awkwardly when walking the distance to the dojo. There was no economical thinking in how she placed her feet to begin with and she was tiring herself without noticing it at all! 'Perfectly arranged Soun! This does fit in with our plans, a huge ego will be the best to hold up against Ranma's idiotic assumptions of what makes this and that in a female and all machinations in that direction!'
Genma would kept on giggling to herself if not for the fist slowly nicking her temple…