I know my story doesnt necessarily follow the show dbz but i like the way i made. please tell me your thoughts if i can make it better And please review! If you like it, I already have the sequel halfway done which is way longer and much better.
Oh and just so you guys know…not that it isn't obvious…I don't own YuYuHakusho or Dragon Ball Z.
Chapter 1: A crushing fate
Rena walked through the woods with tears streaming down her face. Her hair was matted down since she had wiped her face and ran her fingers through it so many times. She didn't care what she looked like, though; today was not her day, just as everyday had been for two weeks now. She was very pretty aside from that with her brown hair, tan, smooth complexion, and trim figure. Obviously she didn't train much. Of course, she never needed to before; she hated fighting, but 'She' definitely didn't. She would usually just rely on her friend if they ever got into trouble. It was only natural for a Sayian to love fighting anyway; she was just the one out of it. But Bre loved it more than anything, and she gave her life to becoming strong so she could prove to her father she wasn't weak and so he wouldn't constantly say that she was.
"Bre..."
The name escaped her lips and she quickly shut them. How horrible that she would have to prove anything to her dad to get him to leave her alone...and Rena. This brought back so many bad memories of her childhood past. Gosh, she thought, how long am I going to do this? Why can't I be strong just for once in my life; like she would have been? It had been two weeks since the day, that horrid day. With tears flowing harder now, she could feel her head start to throb so she placed her hand against her forehead. She closed her eyes and suddenly her mind replayed the flashback of her haunting memory.
:Flashback:
Two figures running in a factory, searching desperately for each other. One, hunting them. The only sounds that could be heard were the running of feet and the every now and then evil laugh of the demon chasing them. Besides that, it was almost so quiet you could hear the ticking sound of the bomb that was wedged in the ground of the building minutes before it would explode. The demon hunting, however, was the only one who knew this. Suddenly the demon catches up with the girl known as Rena (as she watched her flashback it was as she watched herself being lifted up, but still feeling all the fear inside her body). The demon grabs her by the throat. And holds her up against the wall. Choking, all she can think of is her best friends safety.
"At least …..if one of us…. survives...then…."
He hears this and only squeezes tighter. The next thing she saw (just as she remembered) she was being thrown across the room and as he came walking up to her he smirked,
" You don't know just how long I have waited for this, and if I can't get rid of your father then I'll take away the next most precious thing to him... his daughter."
Her eyes widened as she realizes this is it, and just as he puts his hand about five feet from her face she closes her eyes. As the demon is about to blast her, Bre, her best friend shows up and takes the hit instead. Rena screams as she runs to her best friend but Bre just gets up and blasts a hole in the wall as she then try's to get Rena to leave.
"Get out of here now! Ill take care of him"
" NO! I wont leave you... I cant!"
"Rena go! You know you can't survive against him. I'm the one who's trained for this!"
"NO! I'm not going anywhere! What kind of person would that make me if I just left you to die"?
"Ill be fine! And I'm not going to die! So this time I'm not asking, I'm making you leave!"
"But….Bre….I-I…."
"You were the best friend I ever had", Bre interrupted as she threw a blast at Rachel that threw her out the hole in the wall.
The Next thing Rena remembers was... that's right... the bomb... time was up.
:End Flashback:
Rena jumped a little almost like she could feel the intense heat from the explosion. She tried to shrug it off and stand up straight. …Yes. It had been two weeks since that day... the day her truest friend died, and she still didn't understand how she had survived herself. She didn't know whether the demon that killed her was alive either, but she figured that If he was, he would have come after her already. She really just hoped that he was blown up when the bomb went off. Still…Why couldn't she get over her pain? Why had Bre saved her in the first place, why had she given her life for her? More tears started to flow now than ever.
"I hate you!", she screamed, "Why did you do something like that! Are you crazy! Now your gone and I'll never see you again!" You promised me you wouldn't die….you….promised…."
She dropped to the ground hitting her fist hard against it.
"Now I've lost you and my father and he promised me he wouldn't die either! Just look what you've done!"
She braced herself against the ground as she then began to think about a couple of hours before she died. …that's right they had gotten in an argument, which was very strange because they never had before. She wasn't too worried about that right now though, because there was nothing that could ever replace the emptiness she felt. Why would some fourteen year old girl have to deal with this, she thought, life is so unfair! Of course she knew why. She and Bre were Sayians. Her father, Goku, was the strongest Sayian there was and since her older brother Gohan tried to live the 'unexposed life' she was constantly faced with monsters like that who went after her instead. Her friend, Bre, was the daughter of the Sayian Prince Vegeta, which in a way made her royalty, but she never really thought of it like that before. Vegeta was the coldest Sayian she had ever met, and she use to be terrified of him. Now, all she could feel was bitterness for the way he treated his only daughter that he would never see again. He hardly spoke to her and when he did, his words were only criticism. He also despised Rena because she was Goku or (as he said it) 'Kakorots' daughter. Vegeta could never accept the fact that Goku was stronger than him and naturally too. He even kidnapped her and Bre once to try to lure Goku to the planet Namek where he thought he could finally defeat him with the Dragon balls. Funny how he could kidnap his own daughter. She chuckled to herself. Wow, she thought, that's the first time I've even smiled since two weeks ago. She was now a little more relaxed so she decided to head home.
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And there you have it! Chapter 1! So please tell me what you thought about it or if you have ideas for like plot twists or anything. now this story is complete so i might not change much but i would love ideas for my sequal since i currently have a case of 'writers block' as i heard someone once say. if you flame... be nice!
