Alright, while this is not my first fic, it is my first Naruto fic. Help, suggestions, translations, ideas, all that good stuff is most considerably welcomed. This fic is actually a by-product of my longest fic (a HP). While researching for the elements that made up 'jutsu', I decided to watch the series after a reviewer told me about all the episodes being on youtube. Greatest place in the world to find free TV. episodes. While doing this though, I found out that I really like the story, and got into it. Seen up to episode 140 or something (just after Sasuke vs. Naruto). So after I had some good background, I decided to check out the stories here. Good stuff, I'm hooked. So much so that I haven't read a HP story since probably August. I'm not abandoning my other fics, not really. I just sort of lost my muse. It will come back, I'm sure of it. I don't know if this fic will be any good, but her it is.
I'm at college now, finding time to write is a hassle (another one of the reasons that I haven't updated the other ones), so updating will be sporadic.
Oh yeah, the plot, not the most original thing in the world. Maybe I can put a twist on it. Maybe with monkeys. 'Cause Enma is cool…
Summery: Naruto has a chance to fulfill a promise, and it turns into a nightmare. Now Naruto has a different chance. A second chance. A legendary demon lord has awoken, and he's not happy.
Raiden Rising
Chapter 1: Bolts of Time
"So predictable…" A smug voice said. The sound was muddled, a slightly echoic tone to it. He couldn't feel his hands, or his feet. His position was unnatural and the fog in his head refused to clear long enough to figure out what was going on. He tried to open his eyes…to see nothing. A ruff rag had been tied over his eyes to prevent him from seeing.
"Well done, Sasuke-kun… Very well done indeed." A voice that sounded slightly familiar, just like the one before it.
"S-Sasuke?" He asked, confused. 'What's going on? What happened? I saw him, but, but…' His muddled thoughts trailed off as hazy memories began to resurface.
Flashback
Naruto had been training with the Frog Hermit for a little more then a year and a half. They had stopped in a small inn just outside of the border of Earth Country. There had been rumors that an alliance between the Sound and Stone was being made outside of the usual channels and Jiraiya's usual contacts couldn't say much on it.
'Kuso!' Naruto thought, cursing his teacher's lecherous ways. He was once again left to his own devices, with little more then some instructions to practice, a small scroll on the five point unsealing technique, and an empty space where his frog wallet once fit. It was depressing, really, seeing his green friend lose an unnatural amount of weight so fast… Of course, the cursing could have had something to do with the fact that he had failed to perform the technique properly, once again.
He was trying to get the Rasengan to form without the aide of his clones, a truly daunting task. His control had increased exponentially, but it still was not enough. He sat down, dripping sweat and exhausted, and took out the scroll. He had practically begged Ero-Sanin to teach him sealing after he saw him pull out an entire camp set from a small sealed scroll. Jiraiya had finally agreed after Naruto had successfully slept on a tree's trunk, upside down, walked on water while keeping two leaves stuck to his head and jumping on one foot, and began to do his tiajutsu training on water. The basics had been easy, draw the seal (which took a lot of practice to get right) and infusing the needed chakra. Depending on the seal, blood may or may not be needed. Of course, he wasn't taught how to do the 'useful' seals, as he had put it, but sealing and unsealing techniques that were harder to get right then the Rasengan. He had to learn the other sealing techniques on his own though, and was able to keep a good majority of his equipment in a small scroll that would only open to his blood. He was actually working on a seal that would increase the gravity on the user's body, but had not made any real progress. Kami knows that he hated to constantly have to adjust his belt, leg, arm, and shoulder weights. He was beginning to look like he wore full plate armor, not the best for his range of motion.
The next step in his training would be sleeping on water and running up waterfalls, but he wasn't close to that yet. He had been doing his own training on the side though, besides practicing the seals. He was trying to move small pebbles with his chakra before bed to totally exhaust himself. He knew that while he might be a good fighter, he didn't have a real defense, so he was thinking of emulating the Hyuuga's Heavenly Spin. The way things were going, it would be years before he succeeded.
The Rasengan and the Unsealing technique were not the only things that he had been working on though, they just happened to be the only ones he could not get right. Several fire jutsu had been added to the list that he could do, the strongest being Gamayo Emudan (Fire Blowing) that was used in tandem with Gamabunta and Katon: Karyuu Endan (Fire: Fire Dragon Flame Blast). He had been taught a few other water jutsu, a couple of wind, and an earth jutsu too. The scroll basically outlined what the unsealing was, the most common uses, and what a master could hope to do with it. The mention of unsealing sealed power sources caught his interest towards the end of it though. If Orichimaru ever sealed him again, he wanted to be sure he could undo it. Naruto's many attempts at the technique had failed miserably, but he was not discouraged.
He was close to dropping off to sleep when he heard it. It wasn't anything that was out of the ordinary in a forest. It was a snapping twig, probably by a deer or something. But he couldn't smell any animals in the vicinity of where the sound came from. Increasing his senses at all times had been Jirairya's idea. It forced him to keep his chakra flowing at all times to specific points on his body, increasing his control and reserves. The Toad Hermit had looked at him oddly when he was able to do it so easily, but chalked up to something else the fox had done to him.
'It would have been useful if the damn thing had told me.' Naruto thought to himself as he got up slowly, slipping a kunai into his hand. Another sound, this one as soft as a sigh, caught his attention and he looked up. His eyes had to be playing tricks on him; because there was no way that he was there.
"Sasuke?" He asked in disbelief, picking up the scent of his friend. But something was wrong with it, it was…tainted somehow. He smelled like snake.
"Dobe." Was all the Uchiha said. Sasuke was disgusted at the hope that he saw shooting into his 'best friend's' eyes. 'Pathetic' He thought to himself.
"What are you doing here? They've been looking for you, and Sakura has been worried…" Naruto trailed off. The look in his friend's eyes was not the cool and determined look it used to have. Those eyes at least could soften. These eyes…they were just cold, hard, and unforgiving.
"What happened to you, Sasuke?" Naruto asked, some of his hope at finally fulfilling his promise to Sakura being washed away under the hard glare.
"I got stronger, I found power. Unlike you, dobe." Sasuke said, crushing a large branch above him with the squeeze of his hand. "Walk with me…Naruto." He said softly, jumping down from the tree and walking into the forest. The hairs on the back of his neck were standing ramrod straight and a cold feeling settled in the pit of his stomach. He didn't like the situation, and he really didn't like the fact that his friend smelled like snakes.
'This might be my only chance to bring him back though.' He reasoned with himself. It was a weak argument, and he knew it. But the thought of disappointing Sakura again hardened his resolve. He would not go back on his word; he would try until he succeeded. That was his nindo. He caught up with the black haired teen a minute later, falling in step and adapting to the silence.
"Come back with me." Naruto said.
"No." Was the simple answer to the almost command. Naruto wanted jump up and down, scream, but he didn't. If Jiraiya had imparted anything on him, besides a slightly corrupted mind, it was that patience and control were all important. It was a hard lesson that he still had trouble with.
"Kanaho is not my home anymore. They are weak, you are weak. A place like that, where weakness festers like a disease is nowhere to gain power. Even after I kill my brother, I will not return there. A weak village raises weak clans, and I refuse to be weak. He gave me power, taught me things that people in that place couldn't even comprehend…True power. Power only attainable when you fight for yourself."
Naruto's thoughts were going by a mile a second. So fast that he was shocked when he had come to a conclusion. He stopped suddenly, just staring. Staring at someone he once considered a friend…a brother even. Sasuke looked back at him, a smirk on his face and his eyes saying something that he could not.
"Your wrong. Weakness is not teamwork, or kindness, or caring. And you know true strength only comes from protecting those you care about. You know this because you pushed your limits when you protected Sakura, or Kakashi, or me. Power is not something given, it is earned. Earned through blood, sweat, and tears. I once told Konohamaru that there were no shortcuts to power, in his case, the Hokage. Maybe I should have told you as well." Naruto said, as Sasuke's fists clenched.
"You know nothing!" Sasuke snarled, his eyes slowly turning red. Three tamoe made their presence known, beginning to rotate slowly.
"You're really not coming back, are you?" Naruto asked, knowing the answer. Naruto's eyes darkened with a red tint as well, the small piece of the Kyuubi's chakra the he could control without losing it being brought to bear.
"No."
"One last time then?" The blond boy asked, slipping into a fighting stance. Sasuke's smirk widened.
"No. No more chances for you." Sasuke told him, a disgusting amount of arrogance making its way into his voice. Naruto saw a twitch of the other boy's finger and heard several voices from different places. He was knocked out before he could even think to move, the last thing he saw and heard was a laughing Sasuke.
End Flashback
The rag that covered his eyes was taken off of him and he looked at his surroundings. He was tied to a large wooden stump, his arms stretched out at his side. The reason why he couldn't feel his hands or feet was because they had lost circulation, probably a long time ago if the bluish purple tint was anything to go by. His feet and hands were the least of his worries though. Surrounding him were Sasuke, Orochimaru, and the four freaks that Naruto, Neji, and the rest had fought to bring Sasuke back.
"Kuso." Naruto thought outloud.
"Kuso, indeed." The snake sannin agreed, his face contorted into something creepily happy. Naruto looked at Sasuke, and Sasuke smirked at him. Naruto was filled such a sense of betrayal that he almost cried out 'Why?' But he didn't. He knew why. Sasuke had left them, betrayed them, betrayed him.
"It's so nice that you could join us, Naruto-kun. You see, your something of a…guest of honor."
"Goody, will there be ramen?" He asked sarcastically. That feeling of foreboding that he had been feeling earlier was churning his stomach. He was screwed, and unless Ero-Sannin could find him, he was dead. Maybe he was dead either way though. It had taken both Jiraiya and Tsunade both to beat Orochimaru back the last time they had fought, what chance did they have now? Maybe he should just give up… Yeah, that was a good idea. Sasuke was so much stronger then him anyway… Naruto gave himself a mental slap, realizing that he had been looking into Sasuke's eyes the whole time his thoughts had taken a downward spiral. He tore his eyes away and spat at Orochimaru's general direction.
"Is that anyway to treat your host, Naruto-kun? I was sure that Jiraiya would have taught you better then that." Orochimaru chided.
"Yeah, he taught me that those who abandon their friends for power are the worst kind of trash there is." Naruto snapped acidly. Orochimaru smiled wickedly while Sasuke twitched.
"Yes, well, those with the power, make the rules, don't they… And you see, I have the power, so I make the rules, and I think that holding back potential is just as traitorous. But this neither here no there. You…precious Naruto-kun, are my last step to my goal."
"Yeah, well get in line." Naruto said, thinking about the last time that he had to run from the cultists.
"Yes, they are rather…zealous, aren't they?" Orochimaru said with a smile still on his face. "The Kyuubi's power, with my ritual, will give me true immortality. I will be a god among men, and finally fulfill my goal."
"And you think I'll just give that to you?" Naruto asked the man like he was stupid.
"No, I believe that you'll have no choice. You see, if that seal where to be removed, then the Kyuubi would be freed. Of course, you would die, along with part of his soul, but that is a sacrifice that I'm willing to make. There is only one place that the fox can escape from, and I'll catch it when it comes out." Orochimaru said, laughing evilly now. Naruto just stared at him, questioning his sanity.
"He won't have a body, you know, and without that, he won't be of any use to you." Naruto pointed out. While he did not know much on sealing or unsealing, he had learned what pertained to him pretty well. The fox was sealed inside of his soul. There was no body, just a spirit and its chakra.
"And that is the beauty of it, Naruto-kun. It will simply be the weakened spirit and chakra that I need! Let's start!" Orochimaru said, striking Naruto in the stomach with both of his suddenly glowing black hands. Naruto felt something burning through his stomach, but it wasn't the snake-teme's hands. It was foreign chakra. He was being unsealed. Naruto gasped, spitting up a small amount of blood as he did so.
"T-ten point…" He managed to say before the pain from his stomach turned into a ripping feeling. It was breaking.
"Yes, a ten point unsealing. It seems that Jiraiya has been teaching you after all."
"Impos…" Naruto tried to say before he let out a primal roar, his blue eyes glowing red.
"Impossible? No, just difficult. For all the complexity of the seal, it is still based off of the basic sealing laws. More power at more points will break a lesser seal. What is impossible is unsealing it to allow the demon to survive… a rather difficult impediment for those cultists…" Orochimaru said with a smirk, though the strain of using the technique could be seen on his face.
(XxX)
The pain was building, and Naruto was sure that his head was going to split. 'It's breaking…He's trying to get out.' Naruto thought before he tried to get into his mindscape. After a minute he was finally able to and was met with a horrible sight.
The gate was broken. The piece of paper over the bars had been burnt and was lying on the ground. Kyuubi was nowhere in sight.
"Kuso." He said again, almost expecting the next thing he heard.
"Indeed." Said a voice from inside the shadows opposite the cage. 'Why the hell do they keep saying that?' Naruto thought to himself before he turned around.
"You'll die if you leave, you know." Naruto told the fox. The demon just chuckled, the sound reverberating around the room.
"I've been dead for years. I think I've served my time in hell. Anyone subjected to you would probably want to kill themselves as well. It's no wander why the villagers hate you." Kyuubi told him, walking into the light. The fox seemed to be even larger then he usually was, teeth bared.
"They hate me because of you!" Naruto shouted; finally losing the cool that he had been hanging on to since all of this happened.
"Really now, the parents never told their children, yet they hated you just the same."
"Y-your wrong!" Naruto stuttered out, suddenly feeling very small. The memories of his childhood flashed across his face, each one tormenting him. All of those that he now called friends. Each comment was like a stab, every stare like a punch to his stomach. Sasuke, Neji, Shikamaru, Ino, Hinata, Kiba… They were all tormenting him.
'Wait…Hinata never did anything to me. She never said anything mean to me at all, actually. Ever.' Naruto thought as new memories about the Old Man throwing him out of his office and Kakashi telling him he was worthless moving across his mind. 'These aren't my memories…Kyuubi! How is he fucking with my mind? My mind…this is my mind. My domain.' Naruto thought, anger flooding him.
"Cut the shit, fox! I'm not falling for it anymore." Naruto yelled. The demon only growled.
"I was really hoping that you wouldn't give up hope and just let me out. This way will so… satisfying." Kyuubi said, as a tail suddenly whipped out from behind him. Naruto was nearly able to dodge the giant tail, but was clipped by the end of it and sent into the side of the now broken cage. Several cracks were heard and Naruto knew that at least one rib, most likely more, had just been broken. He quickly got to his feet just fast enough to avoid being burnt to a crisp.
'He's fast.' Naruto thought as he began to run up the cage, avoiding the fox's tails that were trying to spear through him. The attacks suddenly stopped as the area began to rumble. Kyuubi's tails were thumping against the ground, causing a small earthquake. The tremors were almost enough to make Naruto fall from the cage, and he jumped to the ceiling, hanging on by a foot and a hand.
"Come on brat, I want to taste your blood!" Kyuubi roared, as his tails whipped behind him. Blasts of air like blades came at Naruto, one nearly slicing him in half and another hitting the hand that was holding him to the ceiling. He let go, momentarily distracted by the pain, and lost his footing. A tail slammed into his stomach, forcing the air out of his lungs and his eyes to open up wide in shock. Another tail hit him in the back, and he shot to the ground, making a small crater in the process.
"How disappointing… I suppose that Uchiha brat may have been right about you after all." Kyuubi said with a dark laugh. Naruto lay there, trying to take in a breath of air that wouldn't come. The broken ribs felt like they were shattered and piercing his lungs.
'Can't give up…I can't…burns, hurts…can't give up…Sakura, Hinata, Kakashi, Ero-Sannin, Obaa-chan…He'll kill them all…destroy everything…can't…why won't it heal? Orochimaru, Sasuke, they'll kill everything…never took this long before…won't even stop bleeding…' Naruto's incoherent thoughts wound there way around his head. 'Can't even beat him in my own head…how pathetic…' He stopped struggling suddenly. 'Wasn't real…this, this isn't real…just my imagination, right? Kyuubi's real, the power is real, but the pain, the injuries…Kami, why didn't I pay attention to Iruka-Sensei when he explained the mind and pain? My mind, mine…so what I will, happens…'
Naruto looked at his still bleeding hand, wondering why he hadn't begun to feel the usual light headedness associated with losing too much blood. The feeling suddenly came to him, making him feel sick.
'The opposite works…' He thought, looking at his hand again, willing it to be healed, to stop bleeding, for the blood to not be there. Slowly, but with increasing speed, the blood vanished, the bleeding slowed, and the cut vanished as if it was never there. The pain in his chest lessoned until it was none existent, but the nearly debilitating pain in his head remained. Naruto got to his feet, drawing in a deep breath.
"Hey, teme! You may want to help those other bastards just to spite me, but don't think I'm going to just sit down and let you!. This is my mind, my domain. Your nothing but half-dead chunk of chakra and spirit, and I'm going to take it all!" Naruto yelled, as the damp sewer began to change. Grass grew, trees sprouted, the walls and ceiling disappeared, and Naruto's eyes shot open. They were red, slit like an animals, and full of cold rage.
"What do you think you're doing, brat? You can't beat me, I'm the great Kyuubi! The fact that I almost took you seriously in a fight should let you die happy." Kyuubi taunted as he turned back around, heading towards a bright point far down the clearing. He stopped as he felt something. Like a pulling directed at him. He looked at the Uzumaki kid again and was shocked at what he saw. A red aura was growing around him, the chakra swirling, starting to turn purple as it reached further away from him.
"Give it up, kid. Even if you could absorb all of my chakra, you wouldn't survive it."
"And you would be gone. With you gone, Orochimaru can't get what he wants. Someone will kill him, I'm sure. I think killing a demon is more then enough." Naruto said, his eyes darkening and veins appearing across his face from the strain. If he could absorb Kyuubi's chakra, then even if the damn fox got out, he wouldn't be able to inadvertently help Orochimaru.
"Baka, I am a demon, you cannot defeat me!"
"Yeah, I think you said that before." Naruto commented absentmindedly. "And I don't need to 'defeat you'. As long as you're here, I can just take your chakra in the same way I do when I fight. Only now, there are no limiters like that seal." He told the fox, a shit-eating grin across his face. Kyuubi wasted no time and lunged at him, intent on killing the little bane of his existence. Only to be stopped by a light blue barrier that was the outside of the boy's aura. The fox growled menacingly and tried again, then attempted to spear it with his tail. Nothing seemed to affect the barrier.
"My mind Kyuubi, my domain! In this place I am the master, I am the 'great'. In here, I control everything. I would have suggested you run, but it's too late." Naruto said with a smirk.
"What are you talking about, brat, I'll still ki-" He was abruptly cut off as a giant metal muzzle strapped itself over his nose and jaws. He tried to pull it off and found that his legs were chained to the ground, as were each of his tails. A feeling akin to fear slowly crept through the demon's head, before it gave way to animalistic rage. He struggled and thrashed, uprooting trees and sending up clouds of dirt, and still the chains would not give and inch.
"Tell me something, 'Oh Great Kyuubi', how did you attain all of your power?" Naruto asked in almost pure curiosity. The fox just growled and lunged at him again. "Stupid me, the muzzle." He said, before the metal thing vanished.
"I gained my power the same way that I plan on getting out of here. Killing everything that stood in my way!" Kyuubi roared as he redoubled his effort to break the chains.
"So it's safe to say that you fight for yourself? See, I have always been my strongest when I was protecting my teammates, my friends, my teachers. You represent a threat to everything and everyone I know. So let's see which way is stronger, ne?" Naruto said, as the aura surrounding him nearly doubled in size, and his eyes turned blood red. While he had been able to not let the pain show, it was bordering on the unbearable and fell to a knee, clenching his fists. It was as if liquid fire was being circulated through his veins, and crushed glass through his chakra circulatory system. His chakra coils were being forcibly expanded demonic chakra poured in droves. The chakra that he wasn't being converted was wreaking havoc on his body, constricting the coils that were wrapped around his intestines. All he wanted was to lay down and die, anything to stop the pain. But he would stop the demon and kill those bastards. He would not go back on his word.
"I will not be beaten by a mere mortal!"
"Well I won't be beaten, period!" Naruto screamed out, as the primal roar of the fox and human mixed into the cacophony of pain and chaos the nightmares were made of.
(XxX)
Outside of Naruto's mindscape, the villainous crowd were watching the pain on the boy's face. Orochimaru was watching intently, as much for his sadistic pleasure as it was to prepare for Kyuubi's appearance. After nearly five minutes though, the boy's face had turned almost completely red, and crimson tears made their way down his face, as well as a torrent coming out of his ears and mouth. Had Orochimaru possessed the Byakugan he would have seen Naruto's insides slowly destroying themselves.
"Give in boy…give me my desire…" Orochimaru cooed in a way that made Sasuke's left eye twitch. A glowing began to grow on Naruto's skin, getting brighter by the second. "Yes, yes! Give it to me!" The Snake-Sannin said, bracing himself(1). Time seemed to freeze for one moment. The glowing suddenly went from white to a ferocious purple. The aura condensed, and the moment ended as the powerful chakra shot out with the force of a Gamayo Emudan of horrifying magnitude.
A burning wasteland was the only left a second later.
(XxX)
"Such a waste." The a black cloaked figure said, getting on one knee. He slapped the young man's cheek. It elicited a barely audible groan and the figure almost gave a sigh of relief. But he didn't. He had a reputation to protect, despite the absence of anything else living in the vicinity. The boy in front of him had seen to that. He shook the teen's chin none too gently, trying to get a further reaction.
"Hey kid, looks like you fucked up." He said, opening the unresponsive eyes in front of him. The eyes looked back at him, unfocused. Dark purple, almost red eyes the likes of which he had only ever seen in one other being. The pupil's were slightly slit, like cat eyes, only wider. They color began dark at its center, getting lighter and progressively more blue towards the outside of the eye. Congealed blood looked to have come out recently, but there wasn't any in the actual eye. As he watched, the slits shortened slowly and the reddish purple lightened further until there was almost none left, leaving the eyes looking almost normal.
"I'll be damned… Looks like you took it all. Not many could handle that, kid…" The figure told the prone person in front of him. "I'll bet he was pissed too. I would have loved to see his face… Doesn't matter now though. I always thought he was a bit of a bastard. Much too stuffy for a Demon. Blood, death, destruction, sure, but could Kyuubi relax? Could he hibernate for a millennia or two like the rest of us? No, all funand no play er, I mean, ne, whatever…" The man trailed off, noticing that the odd, red changing to blue eyes, were taking on a slightly matted look and were starting to roll back into the young man's head. Even on the brink of death the boy's body was trying to convert what it could to help.
'Never give up indeed.' He thought.
"Hey!" The cloaked figure nearly shouted. "I'm not boring you to death, am I?" He almost chuckled at his slightly morbid joke. But he didn't laugh. Not in this realm anyway. That was for subordinates. He almost missed those poor, contracted kids. Of course, they never liked being called 'kids', especially Enma. 'Damn uppity chimp.' He thought as he was laughing on the inside. Slapping the boy in the face again, a soft pop was heard.
'Oops, didn't mean to break his jaw…Not like he probably felt it anyway.' He thought to himself.
"Nope, can't have you dieing yet. See, this wasn't supposed to happen. You, them, not supposed to die. Yet, anyway. Probably would have happened, possibly in the exact same way, but it was too soon. That wannabe immortal was not supposed to get as far as he got, that perverted teacher of your's was not supposed to die yet either," The odd eyes focused on him intently. "Yeah, they got him before they came after you. Orochimaru must have had a soft spot for him though. Going out in a twenty person orgy is a hell of a way to go. Too bad they were all men(2)…" A tear and a sweat drop fell from Naruto's head. "Anyway, you weren't supposed to get caught, and more importantly…" The man paused, gathering breath, "I wasn't supposed to be awake!" The person screamed.
'It's called a vacation, damn it!' The slightly sulking black cloaked figure thought. The teen's eyes focused on him for a second time before they lost the will to.
"I don't know where things went wrong, and I don't care, really. I just know that whatever was supposed to happen didn't. Here's the deal, your going to fix this, or I'll make you regret it. And believe me, I am not someone you want pissed off at you. So… deal?" The figure asked, not waiting for a response. "Good. Messed up or not, you just pulled some serious shit. You'd probably have the boss setback for weeks if I didn't intervene. There used to be the Hidden Village of Stone about a mile behind you. Anyway, diverting a disaster, that'll put me in his favor, so perhaps I'll put you in mine. And kid, don't fuck up again." The figure said before a massive black aura burst from him. Within seconds an enormous silvery clad, dark skinned and slightly hairy form stood where the cloaked figure was.
A billowing silver robe adorned the figure. A large black bo was held in his dark and hairy hands. Hands that while wrinkled, still looked oddly young. On the end of the bo hung an odd ornament. It was a giant silver hourglass with miniscule black sands falling continuously. The beings huge, human like eyes focused on the dieing boy and the hourglass began to glow. With a clap like the splitting of a mountain, the hourglass exploded. The pieces hung in the air for a moment before they shot back together faster then they exploded. Blinding white light condensed and crackled with chirps so loud and frequent that it put the Chidori to shame. The young man was oblivious to any of this though, barely having the cognitive function to keep his eyes open and wonder where the giant monkey had come from.
The chirping reached a fever pitch until it was no longer chirping, but a crackling scream. The light grew brighter, blotting out the afternoon sun, as a bolt of lightning shot out of it, striking the boy. The body arched sharply, painfully, as more and more arcs of electricity struck him until it looked as if there was simply a whitish blue beam connecting the near-dead adolescent and the end of the bo. With a sudden and all blinding flash, the light blinked out with a sound like a giant gong. It left nothing of the young man.
"I think its time for a nap." The giant monkey said, scratching his stomach through his robe. The ten black tails behind him moved themselves into a position like a recliner and he sat down, relishing in the feel of his soft chair. "Damn fox couldn't leave it alone… It's not every human that can defeat a demon. Of course it could have been because it was in his head… Ne, not my problem." The ten tailed monkey demon said to himself, laughing periodically. 'I think I'll go and speak to young Enma. I haven't seen him in ages.' Another crack like a breaking mountain was heard once again and the ten tailed monkey demon, master of time and lightning, disappeared in a pulse of light. The world around him began to disappear, it hadn't happened yet, so it was being erased to prevent the chance of paradox.
A stray thought crossed Sarushukun's mind as he made the transition from flesh to lightning.
'I wonder what kind of effect Seihen Rakurai would have on a human with all of that demonic chakra still being converted…'
(XxX)
Well, that's the end of the first chapter. Hope you guys liked it. Tell me what you think, good, bad, whatever.
Question; I have read fics that leave the translations till the end, and I have read fics that have the meaning after it has been said.
Ex. Seihen Rakurai (Lightning of Change)
Or I can just leave it till the end,
Seihen Rakurai: Lightning Of Change
What do you think?
Anyway, if you didn't get it, I did both throughout the chapter, the first in the beginning and the second at the end.
What it means:
Sarushukun: Monkey Lord/Master
Kyuubi: (Honestly, If you don't know this, maybe you should not be reading Naruto Fan fics) Nine tails. Refers to the nine tailed fox demon, Kyuubi no Kitsune.
Seihen Rakurai: Lightning Of Change. It literally means 'Lightning attack of changing times'. Sounded appropriate.
Enma: The monkey king/boss, greatest of the summon monkeys. The summoned animals, I think, are a sort of 'lesser' demons. To Enma and his subordinates, Sarushuken would be their lord, master, whatever. He also happens to be the strongest of the tailed beasts. His boss would be the guy with the sword in his mouth, making deals with mortals for their souls.
(1): Orochimaru comes off to me as a flamboyantly gay person who doesn't know it. Gay or not, he creeps me out, calling everybody 'kun'. I think all this control with an iron fist is a desperate cry to be someone's 'chan'. It wasn't until I was halfway done with writing that little paragraph that I realized how wrong it sounded, so I attempted to make it worse. If you don't find it funny, because you found it offensive, or maybe just stupid, oh well. I don't ever try to write funny. It happens, or it doesn't. It made me laugh, so there.
(2): Same with the above. Orochimaru kills his rival in perverted irony. I thought it was funny.
Notice: This will not be slash, yuoi (if I spelled that right), yori, or anything like that. Not sure about a whole lot of romance at all, actually. Orochimaru may or may not be gay, but he won't be taking on a lover or some shit like that.
Okay, that's the end of chapter one, hope you all liked, check out the next chapter when it's out.
I have an idea of where I want to go with this, but ideas are welcomed, I'll try to incorporate as many as I can without compromising my vision that has yet to show itself. Did that in my other fic, big mess, had to change it. It was much better for having done so.
Remember to tell me what you think.
Omni Black
