obsessedbyerik.
2 hours? This is GerardErik, it doesn't take 2 hours to get to the lair. And he didn't faint, he lost consciousness.
And that wasn't the Zora he saw before he lost consciousness. It was someone else. And it was clinging to him.
It was afraid of it's attackers coming back for it. Wouldn't you be scared if someone attacked you,then came back?
And I think the lake is a bit polluted, but I was thinking about the same thing. :D
LetsTwistAnotherFairyTale.
The other reviewer liked my story, they just had a bit of constructive critism for me. I like that. To an extent.
I am very glad you like my story, and I am especially thankful that you think I am a skilled writer. Thank you!
I love it when people enjoy my reading, because that's really what it's about; everyone enjoying it.
arachnid.
I don't really agree with you about this story being better than the others, but I am glad you enjoy this one.
And Erik lost consciousness because he was, not only tired in the first place (I don't think he would sleep much, after The Fire, do you?), and because he was stopping himself from reliving the memories. Did that help you any?
I was a bit worried about the Zora's speech, I'm glad it was good. I am more glad you think it was in-character.
I'm a member of the IPFC; the Institution for the Protection of Fictional Characters. We strive for in-characterness.
And the Zora does not know, because it was raised in captivity, and does not know what 'genders' are.
And no, there will not be too much embarressment. On the Zora's behalf. Glad you like. I really am!
Thank you guys so much for your reviews!
And here is chapter 2:
((BEGINNING OF CHAPTER))
+---Erik's P.O.V.---+
I regained consciousness. Where was I?.. I remembered where I was now, I was at the edge of the lake. I slowly opened my eyes, to see someone I had not expected.
"Hello Erik." She said, smiling
"Christine? Is that you?" I
asked, dumbly. That would explain the white blur I saw earlier...
I sat up. Christine was seated next to
me. I looked around.
"I wondered when you would wake, my Angel. You had me worried, fainting like that." She said. "What happened?"
"I did not 'faint', and nothing is
wrong. I just, have not had much sleep since you left.
I am glad you are here, Christine. But,
why?" I asked. She smiled at me.
"I wanted to see you, is that so wrong?" She asked.
"No, no. It is not wrong at all. I
am just surprised, that is all." I replied. She hugged me.
I was dazed momentarily, then returned
her embrace. "I feel better now that you are here, Christine."
"Can we continue our lessons, just
like before, Erik? I hate not seeing you every day, like I used to.
You are like a father to me, and and friend. Please can we try
again?" She begged. I smiled,
and turned her head to face
mine.
"You are always welcome here, my
dear. Always." I replied. We sat there locked in eachother's
gaze.
It was bliss. And it was doomed to end.
I heard a scream and a loud splash. It made Christine jump.
It did not take me long to figure out
who had made the scream. A groan accompanied the discovery.
The Zora.
What a nuisance it had turned out to be! It must have followed me
here, and gotten lost.
And now, it had
fallen into the water trap!
"Darn that creature!" I growled, standing up. Christine was apparently confused.
"What creature?
Is something wrong, Erik?" She asked me. I grabbed her arm, and
dragged her along.
I made my way through a
few hallways, until I came to the hallway that led to the water trap.
Christine's eyes
went wide at the contraption. She was about to say something, when
she gasped.
I was puzzled at
first, then I saw it too. The Zora was sitting on the bottom, looking
mournful.
"What is that, Erik?" She whispered. I sighed.
"It is a Zora, Christine. No doubt you have heard of them." I replied. She raised an eyebrow.
"I thought they were just a hoax. Are they really fish-people?" She asked, confused. I shook my head.
"Unfortunately for me, no. It is really what they say it is." I replied, feeling agitated.
"It? I am sure that there would be a
difference between a man and a woman, even for Zoras." She said.
I frowned. I was not sure if I should
tell her that I did not know whether it was a male or female.
"You do
know whether it is a man or a woman, right?" I hesitated, then shook my head.
"It did not know, and neither do I." I explained, gloomily.
"How could the Zora not know?" She asked.
"That is what I said, when it told me that." I replied.
"Well, it cannot just stay in there, Erik. You need get it out of there before it gets hurt!" She told me. I scoffed.
"Let it. Then I
shall be rid of the creature. I do not want to have to take care of
something." I stated.
And that was
suppose to be the end of the discussion. But Christine shook her head.
"You are going to
let it go, Erik. Now." She declared. I gave her an
'oh-really' look. It did not work.
"Erik, now." I
groaned, and lifted the grate. I saw the Zora look up, and swim to
the top. It smiled.
Christine smiled
too. "Aw, it's so beautiful." I rolled my eyes. Christine stroked
it's face.
The Zora suddenly
swam back wards and did a flip in the air. Christine laughed and
smiled.
Why I could I never
make her laugh like that? I frowned.
"Women." I muttered. Christine moaned, turned towards me, and frowned.
"Men." She
retorted. I glared at her. The Zora climbed out of the water, and
smiled.
Then it noticed the
two of us frowning at eachother, and looked puzzled. It did a dolphin
call.
Christine and I
turned, at the same time, and raised an eyebrow at this weird
creature.
Then, it laughed.
It was a kind of a squeak, but it filled us with joy. We could not
help but smile.
I do not know what
kind of magic that creature had to use on us, but I can now say, that
it worked.
We laughed
together, then hugged. The anger between Christine and I had
vanished, as if never there.
The Zora smiled at
the two of us, then jumped up and down. What a giddy creature.
"Well Erik, now
we shall never 'get rid' of it. But we shall have to find out it's
gender." She said.
The Zora nodded,
not completely understanding. I nodded as well.
"How about we go
home, and think about it?" I asked, smiling. Christine smiled too,
and nodded.
We took eachother's
hand. The Zora ran over and took mine. I forced a smile. There was
something about it...
We walked down the
hallways, and got into the boat. The Zora sat next the Christine,
after a fuss.
I pushed us along,
and Christine hummed. The Zora tried humming with her, but I could
not hear it,
through Christine's
laughter. When we finally arrived, I helped Christine, and the
teetering Zora, out.
Now, the real adventure will begin.
((END OF CHAPTER))
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